Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Correct grammar (use passive/active correctly) and avoid redundancy.

Example: Yes, I often make paper crafts, especially greeting cards. For example, I cut decorative shapes and glue layers to create a neat, personalised card for birthdays or holidays.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and give a specific example with linking words for coherence.

Example: As a child, I loved cutting paper into shapes. For instance, I used to make animals and flowers from brightly coloured paper, and I often pasted them into scrapbooks.

Suggestion: Be concise and use correct collocations (express gratitude, show emotion). Use linking words to explain frequency and reasons. Avoid filler words like 'umm'.

Example: Not usually, but occasionally I write letters to close family members. I do this because a handwritten note feels more personal and it helps me express my gratitude clearly.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer and follow with a clear reason or example. Improve sentence structure to avoid fragments and be more specific about who keeps letters and why.

Example: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters and cards. For example, people often save birthday cards or love notes because they value the sentimental memories they contain.

Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and correct phrasing (it lies in my bag, I take it everywhere). Be concise and give a brief reason using linking words.

Example: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook in my bag. I take it everywhere so I can quickly jot down important ideas or reminders.

× Yes. And in my experience, I think that is very common when I want to make a really good looking card and I will do with myself. And yeah, that is including craft.

✓ Yes. In my experience, I think that is very common when I want to make a really good-looking card, and I will make one myself. And yes, that includes crafts.

The original uses the reflexive phrase 'do with myself' incorrectly; the correct reflexive use is 'make one myself'. Also 'good looking' should be hyphenated as 'good-looking' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. 'That is including craft' is ungrammatical; use 'that includes crafts' or 'that includes craft activities'. Improve by using the correct reflexive pronoun with a specific verb and by revising noun forms and adjective hyphenation. Suggestion: Replace 'do with myself' with 'make one myself', hyphenate 'good-looking', and change 'that is including craft' to 'that includes crafts' to be grammatical and clear.

× In my memories I thought I was very enjoyed in cutting something into some beautiful shapes like animals, flowers and something else.

✓ In my memories, I really enjoyed cutting things into beautiful shapes like animals, flowers, and other figures.

Errors include incorrect use of pronouns and auxiliary verbs: 'I thought I was very enjoyed' is ungrammatical. The correct structure is 'I really enjoyed'. 'Something' and 'some' are vague here; 'things' or 'objects' is clearer. Also use 'other' instead of 'something else' for parallelism. Suggest practicing subject-verb patterns: subject + past verb (I enjoyed) and using plural 'things' after 'cutting'. Suggestion: Use 'I enjoyed' rather than 'I was enjoyed' and prefer 'cutting things into' for natural English.

× And I do love a lot of colors of paper.

✓ I also love papers in many colors.

The phrase 'I do love a lot of colors of paper' is awkward: 'a lot of' modifies count/mass nouns; 'colors of paper' is unnatural. Better options: 'I love paper in many colors' or 'I also love papers in many colors.' Improve adjective/noun order and choose natural collocations. Suggestion: Use 'paper in many colors' or 'papers in many colors' for natural expression.

× Not at all, but sometimes I will do it for someone who I really care for, like my parents or my friends, because I think that is, umm, a really good way to express my real emotion and my thankful to them.

✓ Not at all, but sometimes I would do it for someone I really care about, like my parents or my friends, because I think it is a good way to express my real feelings and my gratitude to them.

'I will do it' is acceptable but 'would do it' is more natural for occasional actions; both modals can work depending on nuance. 'Someone who I really care for' should be 'someone I really care about'. 'Express my real emotion' is awkward; use 'express my feelings' and 'my thankful to them' is incorrect — use 'my gratitude to them' or 'my thanks to them'. Suggest choosing appropriate modal (would/will) and use correct preposition with 'care' and proper noun forms for feelings/gratitude. Suggestion: Use 'care about', 'feelings', and 'gratitude' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I think there are many cards still in the shops and you can see it everywhere because I think people. Are enjoying the moments when they are writing a letter.

✓ Yes, I think there are still many cards in shops and you can see them everywhere because I think people enjoy the moment when they are writing a letter.

The original has sentence fragments and incorrect pronoun agreement: 'you can see it everywhere' should be 'you can see them everywhere' referring to 'cards'. 'Because I think people. Are enjoying...' is a broken sentence; combine and use correct verb form: 'people enjoy the moment' rather than 'are enjoying the moments' for general truth. Also 'in the shops' -> 'in shops' is more natural. Suggest combining fragments and ensuring pronoun-number agreement. Suggestion: Use complete sentences, match pronouns to nouns (them/cards), and use simple present for habitual/general statements.

× Yes actually I have a small notebook with me and it is just on lay in my bag and I will pick it to everywhere and record something I think important on it.

✓ Yes, actually I have a small notebook with me and it is just lying in my bag, and I take it everywhere to write down things I think are important in it.

Multiple preposition and verb form errors: 'on lay in my bag' should be 'lying in my bag'. 'I will pick it to everywhere' is incorrect; use 'I take it everywhere' or 'I carry it everywhere'. 'Record something I think important on it' should be 'write down things I think are important in it' or 'write down important things in it'. Suggest learning correct phrasal verbs (lying, take/carry, write down) and preposition use ('in my bag', 'take it everywhere'). Suggestion: Replace 'on lay' with 'lying', 'pick it to everywhere' with 'take it everywhere', and use 'write down things I think are important'.