Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific examples using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear words (e.g., 'Bolsheviks').

Example: Yes, I made many paper crafts as a child. For example, I often folded paper aeroplanes and crafted paper roses to give to my friends, and we played with them in the park.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite activity, then give specific supporting details and use linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'also'). Correct grammar and choose precise words (e.g., 'draw pictures' not 'draw in a papers').

Example: I liked drawing and making paper models when I was a child. For example, I drew faces and scenes on paper and also folded paper flowers and airplanes to play with my friends.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then explain why with concise reasons and linking words. Use correct collocations (e.g., 'social media', 'mobile phones') and avoid redundancy.

Example: No, I rarely write physical letters nowadays because social media and mobile phones make it much easier to stay in touch. For example, I usually send messages or emails instead.

Suggestion: Give a balanced opinion with clear reasons and examples. Start with a direct statement (e.g., 'Some people do, but many do not'), then explain why using linking words and correct vocabulary ('handwritten letters', 'nostalgic', 'convenient').

Example: Some people still keep handwritten letters because they are sentimental and personal, but many others prefer digital messages because they are faster and more convenient.

Suggestion: Give a clear yes/no topic sentence and then give specific situations when you carry them. Keep supporting details relevant and coherent, and use linking words like 'for example' or 'when'.

Example: Sometimes I carry a notebook and a pen when I go out, especially on trips. For example, I use them to sketch new flowers I see or jot down interesting facts about places I visit.

× Yeah, I have been major craft with the papers in childhood, like, uh, aeroplanes and rose flowers, rose flowers and Bolsheviks and flew with the friends.

✓ Yeah, I used to make crafts with paper in my childhood, like aeroplanes and paper roses, and I used to play with my friends.

Original contains incorrect continuous perfect construction 'have been major craft' and wrong noun forms. Use 'used to' to describe habitual past actions. 'Make crafts with paper' is correct collocation; 'paper roses' is clearer. Remove duplicated words and incorrect 'Bolsheviks'.

× As a judge, I really like to draw in a papers like all of face is fulfilled with my drawing and literally is writing and I like to make a paper papers like a flower, sports sieve or airplane in childhood.

✓ As a child, I really liked to draw on paper; my drawings covered whole faces sometimes, and I liked to make paper things like flowers, paper airplanes, or simple toys.

'As a judge' is wrong; use 'As a child'. 'Draw in a papers' should be 'draw on paper'. Tense should be past 'liked' for childhood. 'Make a paper papers' is redundant; use 'make paper things' or list items. Clarified 'sports sieve' to 'simple toys' because original is unclear.

× No, today is now the modern communications and all people have their own social medias like phones and phones or mobiles like a laptop tab and today is some.

✓ No, nowadays communication is mostly digital and people use social media on phones, tablets, or laptops.

'Today is now the modern communications' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use 'nowadays' and singular 'communication' or plural 'communications' with correct structure. 'Social medias' should be 'social media' (uncountable). 'Phones or mobiles like a laptop tab' is confused; clarify devices: phones, tablets, or laptops.

× Some people like to take a handwriting letter, some butter nowadays is that is the past of letters and now the modern and all people like to chat with the mail and message with the friends or family that is so easy to communications with each other.

✓ Some people still like to write handwritten letters, but for many people letters are a thing of the past; now people prefer to chat by email or messaging apps with friends and family because it is so easy to communicate.

'Take a handwriting letter' is incorrect; use 'write handwritten letters'. 'Some butter' is meaningless — likely 'but'. Use quantifiers 'many people' and correct uncountable nouns: 'communications' -> 'communicate'. Use 'email' or 'messaging apps' for clarity and proper collocation.

× Sometimes I take a paper and pens with me, like going out for the travelings with the friends and I really like to know the new things, like a new flower, new planets.

✓ Sometimes I take paper and pens with me when I go out travelling with friends, and I like to learn about new things, such as new flowers or planets.

Do not use 'a' before uncountable 'paper' and plural 'pens' is fine. 'Going out for the travelings' is incorrect; use 'when I go out travelling' or 'when I travel'. 'The friends' should be 'friends' (no article). 'I really like to know the new things' -> 'I like to learn about new things'. Use 'such as' to list examples and remove unnecessary articles.