Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I used to make paper crafts as a child."), correct grammar (past tense and articles), remove unclear fragments ("My fear" is irrelevant), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word (e.g. "For example,"). Keep to 2–4 short sentences.

Example: Yes, I used to make paper crafts as a child. For example, my friends and I often folded small dogs and rabbits from colorful paper. It was fun because we could shape them by hand and give them simple faces.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and avoid repetition: begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, correct verbs and pronouns, and use linking words (e.g. "Also" or "Sometimes"). Provide one concrete detail about materials or process. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: As a child, I enjoyed making paper animals and kites. I often folded colorful paper into dogs, rabbits and small kites. Sometimes my mother taught me more difficult folds, and I remember practicing until the shapes looked right.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and fix sentence structure: answer directly, give a brief reason using linking words ("because"), and correct grammar ("I don't write physical letters anymore"; "emails are much faster"; "I'm busy with my PhD study" -> "I'm busy with my PhD"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: No, I don't write physical letters anymore because I usually send emails. Emails are much faster and more convenient when I need to contact my supervisor during my PhD.

Suggestion: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct opinion ("I don't think many people keep handwritten letters today"). Use linking words ("because", "however") and give a concrete reason or example (e.g. phones, email, social media). Avoid vague phrases like "most today".

Example: I don't think many people keep handwritten letters today because most prefer to store messages on their phones or use email and social media. However, some people still keep letters for sentimental reasons, such as old family correspondence.

Suggestion: This answer is good but can be slightly improved by combining sentences and adding a brief linking phrase to show contrast or reason. Use present simple consistently and avoid redundant words. Keep it natural and concise (2–3 sentences).

Example: No, I don't usually carry paper and pens when I go out because I use my phone to take notes. It's more convenient since my phone is always in my pocket.

× Yes, I made some paper animals when I was child.

✓ Yes, I made some paper animals when I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'. In English we say 'when I was a child' to indicate age in the past. Add the article to make the noun phrase grammatically correct.

× My fear.

✓ My favorite was making animals by hand.

Original fragment 'My fear.' is ungrammatical and unclear. It seems the student intended to say what they liked; replace with a complete sentence that fits context. Ensure subject and verb are present for a complete sentence.

× My friends and I often made small dogs and rabbits together.

✓ My friends and I often made small dogs and rabbits together.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; no change needed. It correctly uses past simple to describe habitual past actions.

× It was interesting because we could shape the paper by hand.

✓ It was interesting because we could shape the paper by hand.

This sentence is correct: past simple 'was' and modal 'could' appropriately describe past ability and experience.

× As a child, I really like making paper animals with my hand.

✓ As a child, I really liked making paper animals with my hands.

Tense mismatch: talking about childhood requires past tense 'liked' not 'like'. Also use plural 'hands' for natural collocation when referring to using both hands; 'with my hand' is uncommon. Adjust tense and noun form.

× I often for I often folded dogs, kites and rabbits using colorful paper.

✓ I often folded dogs, kites and rabbits using colorful paper.

The phrase repeats and contains an extra fragment 'for I often'. Remove the repetition to form a clean past-tense habitual sentence. Maintain past simple 'folded' to match childhood context.

× My mother have me help me make them more difficult shapes sometimes.

✓ My mother had me help make more difficult shapes sometimes.

Multiple errors: 'have me help me' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use past tense 'had' to indicate she arranged for the child to help, and drop the extra 'me'. Also change word order to 'help make more difficult shapes' for natural phrasing. This fixes incorrect verb form and pronoun redundancy.

× No, I don't write. I don't write physical letters anymore anymore.

✓ No, I don't write physical letters anymore.

Repetition 'anymore' appears twice; remove duplicate. Also combine sentences for conciseness. Present simple 'don't write' is appropriate for current habits.

× I usually send e-mail instead because I'm I'm busy with my PhD study e-mail are much faster when I need to contact my supervisor quickly.

✓ I usually send e-mail instead because I'm busy with my PhD studies; e-mail is much faster when I need to contact my supervisor quickly.

Fix repetitions 'I'm I'm', subject-verb agreement 'e-mail are' should be 'e-mail is' or 'emails are'. Use plural 'studies' for 'PhD studies' and separate clauses with a semicolon or period. These changes correct pronoun duplication, verb agreement, and noun form.

× I think the most people don't keep handwriting letters most today.

✓ I think most people don't keep handwritten letters today.

Remove extra 'the' and the redundant 'most' at the end. Use adjective 'handwritten' rather than 'handwriting' to modify 'letters'. This corrects quantifier and adjective form.

× Most people prefer to save information on their phones instead of paper.

✓ Most people prefer to save information on their phones instead of on paper.

Add the preposition 'on' before 'paper' to parallel 'on their phones' and clarify the contrast. This fixes a missing preposition rather than a pronoun issue, but aligns with allowed types (preposition).

× Although many people don't really know who they could write a letter to.

✓ Although many people don't really know who they could write a letter to,

This sentence is a dependent clause and is incomplete on its own; it needs to be attached to a main clause. If intended as a full sentence, rewrite as 'Many people don't really know who they could write a letter to.' Ensure sentences are complete with a main clause.

× No, I don't usually carry paper and pens when I go out.

✓ No, I don't usually carry paper and pens when I go out.

This sentence is correct in present simple to describe a habitual action; no change needed.

× Now I just use my phone to write down notes instead.

✓ Now I just use my phone to write down notes instead of paper.

Add explicit contrast 'instead of paper' to mirror earlier question about carrying paper. Alternatively, the sentence is acceptable alone, but adding the contrast clarifies meaning. The issue is missing prepositional phrase to complete the comparison.

× It's more convenient for me because my phone is always in my pocket.

✓ It's more convenient for me because my phone is always in my pocket.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed.