Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct topic sentence stating what you made, then give 1–2 specific examples and a brief description using linking words. Use correct nouns and avoid vague words like “sleeps.”

Example: Yes. I often made paper crafts when I was younger. For example, I folded paper into origami crabs and also made paper roses and small decorative flowers. They were tiny but very detailed, and I enjoyed giving them as gifts to friends.

Suggestion: Answer directly and explain briefly with clear reasons. Use linking words like “because” or “since,” and correct tense and word choice (e.g., “technology,” “email”). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: No, I rarely write physical letters now because modern technology is much more convenient. I usually communicate by phone calls, text messages or email, which are faster and easier.

Suggestion: Give a balanced, coherent response. Start with a short opinion, then support it with a specific example and a linking word like “however” or “although.” Use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary.

Example: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially older generations who value them as keepsakes. However, many younger people prefer digital messages or photos because they are more convenient.

Suggestion: Make your answer concise and organized. Start with a direct yes/no, then give a clear reason and one specific example. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases like “literally I don't.”

Example: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. For instance, when I discover a new shop or café, I jot down its name or sketch a quick photo to remember it.

Suggestion: Clarify your meaning and use simple, correct sentences. Begin with a topic sentence about childhood activities, then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Avoid unclear words like “thieves” or “small waters.”

Example: As a child, I enjoyed making paper crafts with my friends. For example, I often folded paper flowers and small boats, and we would race the boats in puddles or streams.

× Yeah, I made it all crabs with Peppers like flowers, rose flowers and some sleeps.

✓ Yeah, I made a bunch of paper crabs, paper roses, and some small paper decorations.

Multiple issues: incorrect plurality and word choice ('it all crabs', 'Peppers like flowers', 'some sleeps') and unclear nouns. This fits 'Singular and plural issue' and 'Incorrect use of adjectives or nouns' but per the allowed list, treat as plural/singular error (ID 1). Use count expressions ('a bunch of'), make nouns plural/singular correctly, and replace incorrect words with intended nouns ('roses', 'decorations'). Be concise and keep simple noun phrases.

× No, I didn't just like it a little bit.

✓ No, I didn't really like it much.

The original mixes past negation with adverbs incorrectly. This is a past tense/word choice issue (ID 5). Use correct negation with 'didn't' plus base verb ('like') and adverb placement ('really', 'much') for clarity.

× So now the modern technologies days and a little lightweight, right with the phones or some computers and the emails.

✓ Nowadays, with modern technology and lightweight devices like phones, computers, and email, people prefer digital communication.

This is a sentence structure and preposition/word choice problem (ID 26 and 11), but per list choose sentence structure error (ID 26). Rearrange words, use 'nowadays' and 'modern technology', and list items clearly. Use 'email' (uncountable) rather than 'the emails'.

× There are some of the old people are literally right, write the letters off and writing photo.

✓ Some older people still literally write letters and keep photos.

Original has redundant 'there are' plus another clause and wrong verb forms. This fits 'There be issue' (ID 3) and verb form problems. Remove redundant structure, use 'older people' and parallel verbs 'write' and 'keep'.

× Nowadays some people change in the modern technology.

✓ Nowadays some people have switched to modern technology.

Incorrect verb and preposition 'change in' should be 'have switched to' indicating a change of habit (present perfect). Classify as present/past tense issue (ID 6). Use correct phrasal verb 'switch to'.

× Yeah, I carry a pen and a paper when I go out.

✓ Yes, I carry a pen and a piece of paper when I go out.

'a paper' is incorrect; use 'a piece of paper' or just 'paper'. This is an article/quantifier issue (ID 22). Also 'Yeah' to 'Yes' for formality is optional.

× I, when I look, uh, like new, new things or new places that literally I don't.

✓ When I see new things or new places that I don't know, I write their names down and take some photos.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical (ID 23 sentence without a verb / 26 structure). Provide complete clauses, correct verb 'see', 'know', and parallel actions 'write' and 'take photos'.

× So I write that name and drop some pictures.

✓ So I write down the name and take some pictures.

'Write that name' should be 'write down the name' and 'drop some pictures' is incorrect — use 'take some pictures'. This is verb/preposition misuse (ID 11 and 8); here categorized as preposition/verb + -ing form. Use correct phrasal verbs.

× As a son, I like to do the paper like making some flowers or making thieves like, uh, to lean, uh, small waters with friends.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to make paper flowers or small paper crafts with friends.

Multiple errors: 'As a son' should be 'as a child' or 'when I was a child', wrong nouns 'thieves' and 'small waters'. This is an article/word choice and sentence structure issue (ID 22 and 26). Use correct time expression and clear nouns 'paper flowers' and 'paper crafts'.