Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời tốt nhưng có thể tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn nếu mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng vài liên từ để nối ý và tránh lặp từ. Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về kỹ thuật hoặc cảm xúc sẽ tăng tính thuyết phục. Ngoài ra giữ độ dài trong 3-4 câu để rõ ràng và hiệu quả.

Example: Yes, I used to make paper crafts like tigers, lions and small building models. I enjoyed it because it was creative and helped me concentrate, especially when I spent several hours folding and cutting on weekend afternoons. I often experimented with different folding techniques to make the shapes more realistic.

Suggestion: Rất tự nhiên và rõ ràng; tuy nhiên có thể ngắn gọn hơn để tăng hiệu quả: bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, rồi đưa ra lý do và một ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh các cụm từ dài không cần thiết để giữ tối đa 3 câu.

Example: No, I haven't written physical letters for years because I prefer emails and messaging apps—they're faster and let me attach photos. However, I still write or keep handwritten notes for special occasions like birthdays because they feel more personal.

Suggestion: Ý chính rõ nhưng câu ví dụ thứ hai có lỗi nhỏ và thiếu liên kết logic. Nên dùng liên từ để nối lý do và ví dụ cụ thể, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và cung cấp chi tiết hơn về bối cảnh để thuyết phục hơn.

Example: Yes, many people still keep handwritten letters, especially older generations and collectors who value their sentimental and historical worth. For example, a grandparent might keep letters from their spouse as cherished keepsakes that remind them of important life events.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời ngắn gọn và phù hợp. Để cải thiện, thêm một câu nêu lợi ích cụ thể hoặc trường hợp bất tiện khi không mang giấy bút để tạo cân bằng và chiều sâu. Dùng một liên từ để nối các câu hỗ trợ mạch lạc hơn.

Example: No, I don't — I rely on my smartphone to send messages and save notes because it's quicker and more convenient. For instance, I type shopping lists into a notes app and share them with my family, which saves time and prevents lost lists.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời tốt nhưng có thể gây ấn tượng hơn nếu bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn rồi dùng một liên từ để nối hai hoạt động và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cảm xúc hoặc kết quả. Tránh lặp từ 'paper' quá nhiều.

Example: As a child, I spent a lot of time practicing handwriting and doing homework on paper, which improved my penmanship. I also loved folding and cutting leftover sheets to make paper animals and buildings, then playing with them after school.

× I used to make paper animals like tiger and lion, sometimes small building models.

✓ I used to make paper animals like tigers and lions, and sometimes small building models.

You need plural nouns for 'tiger' and 'lion' because 'animals like' implies more than one example; use 'tigers and lions'. Also add 'and' for correct sentence flow.

× For example, a grandparent might keep stacks of their spouse as sentimental keepsakes.

✓ For example, a grandparent might keep stacks of letters from their spouse as sentimental keepsakes.

The sentence is missing the noun 'letters' and needs the preposition 'from' to show possession/relationship. 'Stacks of their spouse' is ungrammatical; use 'stacks of letters from their spouse'.

× I rely on my smartphone to send messages and save notes because it's quicker.

✓ I rely on my smartphone to send messages and save notes because it is quicker.

Contraction 'it's' is acceptable in speech, but in formal written answers 'it is' is clearer. Also this maintains consistency; pronoun use is correct but expand contraction.

× I often type shopping lists into a notes app and share them with my family instead of writing them down.

✓ I often type shopping lists into a notes app and share them with my family instead of writing them down.

Sentence is correct; present participle 'writing' is properly used. No change needed.

× When I was a kid I spent several hours folding and cutting on weekends.

✓ When I was a kid, I spent several hours folding and cutting on weekends.

The sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; only a comma is recommended after the introductory clause for clarity.

× I usually use emails or messaging apps to stay in touch with my family and friends because they are faster and more convenient and let me save photos instantly.

✓ I usually use email or messaging apps to stay in touch with my family and friends because they are faster and more convenient and let me save photos instantly.

Use uncountable 'email' as a general means of communication rather than plural 'emails' in this context. The rest of the present tense usage is correct.

× I enjoy doing this because it's creative and helps me concentrate.

✓ I enjoy doing this because it is creative and helps me concentrate.

The sentence is fine; changing contraction improves formality. No structural error otherwise.

× I also spent time folding and cutting leftover sheets to make paper animals and buildings, which I played after school.

✓ I also spent time folding and cutting leftover sheets to make paper animals and buildings, which I played with after school.

The verb 'play' needs the preposition 'with' when referring to playing with objects. Add 'with' to correct the prepositional use.