Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitations and unclear phrases, and give one or two specific examples. Use linking words for coherence. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I made many paper crafts when I was a child. For example, I often folded paper airplanes and made simple paper dolls, which I played with for hours. Those activities were fun and helped me develop my imagination and fine motor skills.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid double negatives and repetitions. State your position clearly, then give reasons and a brief personal view using linking words like 'however' or 'because'.

Example: No, I don't usually write physical letters anymore. However, I believe they have sentimental value because handwritten notes feel more personal. Nowadays I prefer email or messaging for convenience, but I still appreciate receiving a letter on special occasions.

Suggestion: Be specific and concise. Begin with a clear opinion, then give concrete reasons and an example. Reduce filler words and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Example: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters because they have sentimental value. For example, couples often save old love letters as keepsakes, and families may keep letters from relatives as a way to remember them.

Suggestion: Good structure but reduce hesitations and improve accuracy. Start with a direct statement, then explain situations when you do carry them, using clear linking words and a polished example.

Example: Generally I don't, but I do carry a notebook and a pen when I go to university or an interview. For instance, during job interviews I bring a notebook to jot down important points or questions, which helps me stay organized.

Suggestion: Be specific and use past tense consistently for childhood memories. Give one or two clear examples with brief details and avoid fillers. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

Example: When I was a child, I enjoyed making origami and playing paper games with my sister. For example, we folded paper into shapes like cranes and also made number-guessing games by writing numbers on folded paper and guessing which one was chosen.

× As far as I remember when I was a child, I have made an across this paper.

✓ As far as I remember, when I was a child, I made a paper craft.

The student used present perfect 'have made' with a specific past time ('when I was a child'), which requires simple past 'made'. 'an across this paper' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'a paper craft' or 'a paper airplane'. Use simple past for completed actions at a definite time and choose correct noun phrase. Suggestion: Use simple past for actions tied to a past time and replace unclear noun phrases with correct vocabulary.

× I enjoyed it when I was little because it was, uh, fun and also I think it was umm, it helps me to improve my, umm, imagination.

✓ I enjoyed it when I was little because it was fun, and I think it helped me to improve my imagination.

The sentence mixes past ('enjoyed', 'was') with present 'helps'. When describing effects of a past activity on past development, keep past tense 'helped'. Also 'it was, uh, it helps me' is inconsistent. Use consistent past tense and remove filler words. Suggestion: Maintain consistent tense (past) when discussing past experiences and their effects.

× Not not exactly. To be honest I haven't tried any physical letter, but I think they have some sentimental value and it should be continued.

✓ Not exactly. To be honest, I haven't written any physical letters, but I think they have some sentimental value and should be kept.

'Tried any physical letter' is incorrect collocation; use 'written any physical letters'. 'They have' refers to letters (plural) so OK. 'It should be continued' is awkward; for practices use plural subject and verb: 'they should be kept' or 'the practice should continue'. Also maintain present perfect 'haven't written' for life experience up to now. Suggestion: Use correct verb 'write' in past participle 'written' with letters and use suitable verb for continuation such as 'should continue' or 'should be kept'.

× But nowadays as technology advanced there is no need to write letter umm physically.

✓ But nowadays, as technology has advanced, there is no need to write letters physically.

'As technology advanced' refers to a process continuing to present, so present perfect 'has advanced' is better. 'Write letter' needs plural 'letters' or article 'a letter'. Adverb placement: 'physically' should follow 'write letters'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for changes up to now and correct noun number and adverb placement.

× I think, umm, there are some people who kept these letters today because they have some sentimental value for them.

✓ I think there are some people who keep these letters today because they have sentimental value for them.

The clause 'who kept these letters today' mixes past 'kept' with adverb 'today'. Use simple present 'keep' to describe current habitual action. Also 'have some sentimental value for them' is acceptable but 'some' is unnecessary. Suggestion: Use present tense for current habits and avoid unnecessary words.

× Uh, handwritten letters are more personal than emails and it's kinda memory for them.

✓ Handwritten letters are more personal than emails and they're kind of a memory for them.

'It's kinda memory for them' uses singular 'it' for plural 'letters' and omits article 'a'. Better: 'they're kind of a memory for them' or 'they are a kind of memory'. Also 'kinda' is informal; use 'kind of' in writing. Suggestion: Match pronoun number to noun and include necessary articles.

× They can, uh, reop, reopen it and, uh.

✓ They can reopen them and reread them.

'Reop, reopen it' is fragmented and uses singular 'it' for plural 'letters'. Also 'reopen' is not the best verb; 'reopen them' could mean physically opening envelopes, but 'reread them' is clearer for reading letters again. Remove fillers. Suggestion: Use clear verbs and correct pronoun number; avoid filler words.

× Generally not, but if I have to go to university or to the job assignment, I try to carry paper and pens with me because it helps me to take notes and write some important, uh, details if it's necessary.

✓ Generally not, but if I have to go to university or to a job assignment, I try to carry paper and pens with me because they help me take notes and write important details if necessary.

'It helps me' incorrectly uses singular 'it' to refer to plural 'paper and pens'; use 'they help me'. 'Write some important details' can be simplified to 'write important details'. 'If it's necessary' should be 'if necessary'. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun agrees with its antecedent and streamline expressions.

× For example, if I go to job interview, I can write question.

✓ For example, if I go to a job interview, I can write questions.

Need indefinite article 'a' before 'job interview' and plural 'questions' or 'a question' depending on meaning. Also 'write question' is incomplete; use 'write questions' or 'write down questions'. Suggestion: Use articles with singular countable nouns and make nouns plural if appropriate; include 'down' for 'write down' if noting questions.

× As far as I remember, I like to make origamis and I like to play games with uh, papers such as I divided paper, some uh, blocks and I like to write numbers then guessing which number is correct and also other place with my sister.

✓ As far as I remember, I liked to make origami and play games with paper, such as folding paper into blocks; I also liked to write numbers and guess which number was correct while playing with my sister.

Talking about childhood requires past tense 'liked' not present 'like'. 'Origamis' is incorrect plural; 'origami' is uncountable or 'origami models'. 'Games with papers' should be 'games with paper'. The phrase 'I divided paper, some blocks' is unclear — likely 'folding paper into blocks'. 'Then guessing' should be 'and guess' or 'and guess which number was correct' in past tense. Suggestion: Use past tense for childhood activities, correct noun forms (origami), and clarify game descriptions.