Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatically accurate, use a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like 'uh'. For example, start with: 'Yes, I have made paper crafts, mainly origami characters.' Then add a detail: 'For instance, I folded a paper Pikachu when I was young, which required many small folds and patience.' This shows clarity, coherence and richer content.

Example: Yes, I have made paper crafts, mainly origami characters. For instance, I folded a paper Pikachu when I was young; it took several careful folds and I was proud of the result.

Suggestion: Correct grammar and choose concise phrasing. Provide a clear topic sentence stating the current habit and then contrast with past behaviour using a linking word (e.g., 'however' or 'when'). Avoid misused words like 'sweaty'. For example: 'No, I don't write physical letters anymore. When I was a child, however, I often wrote letters to my mother.'

Example: No, I don't write physical letters anymore. When I was a child, however, I often wrote letters to my mother to tell her about my day.

Suggestion: Make a clear statement and support it with a reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and correct word forms. For example: 'Fewer people keep handwritten letters today because smartphone messaging is faster and more convenient.' Then give a brief example or consequence.

Example: Fewer people keep handwritten letters today because smartphone messaging is faster and more convenient, so most personal messages are sent online rather than kept as paper keepsakes.

Suggestion: State your habit clearly and give a concise reason with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition like 'smartphone' twice. For example: 'No, I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I use my smartphone for messaging and searching information.'

Example: No, I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I use my smartphone for messaging and finding information, which is quicker and more convenient.

Suggestion: Use past tense consistently and give a specific detail or example to enrich the answer. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add a brief example using a linking word like 'for example' or 'for instance.'

Example: As a child, I liked to draw characters with paper and pen. For example, I would copy cartoons and spend hours shading their faces and clothes.

× I often made the shape up, uh, characters.

✓ I often made shapes of characters.

The speaker used past tense 'made' which is acceptable for past habits, but the phrase 'the shape up' is incorrect collocation. Use plural 'shapes' for general activities and 'of characters' to show what shapes were made. Suggestion: say 'I often made shapes of characters.'

× One with origami.

✓ I made one using origami.

Fragment sentence lacking main verb. Adding 'I made' plus 'using origami' clarifies the action. Use past tense to match context.

× For example, I remember that I made a Pikachu with paper.

✓ For example, I remember making a Pikachu out of paper.

After 'remember' it is more natural to use the -ing form for a past memory: 'remember making'. Also 'out of paper' is a common collocation.

× Not sweaty because I'm not have.

✓ Not really, because I don't have any.

Original contains wrong word 'sweaty' and incorrect structure 'I'm not have'. Use 'I don't have any' to indicate lack of letters. 'Not really' suits the question 'Do you still write physical letters?'. Suggestion: avoid incorrect words and use standard negation.

× I don't have the letters so I can't write physical letters to send someone.

✓ I don't have any letters, so I can't write physical letters to send to someone.

Use 'any' with negative sentences and include 'to' before 'someone' for correct infinitive phrase 'send to someone'. Also adjust punctuation for clarity.

× But when I was a child I often write letters to my mother.

✓ But when I was a child I often wrote letters to my mother.

The time phrase 'when I was a child' requires past tense; use 'wrote' instead of 'write'.

× I'm not really many people use use a smartphone to communicate with other people, so the handwriting letters decrease today.

✓ Not really. Many people use smartphones to communicate, so handwritten letters have decreased today.

Original combines clauses incorrectly and repeats 'use'. Correct structure: state disagreement 'Not really.' Then 'Many people use smartphones' (plural noun agreement) and use present perfect 'have decreased' to describe a change up to now. Use 'handwritten letters' instead of 'handwriting letters'.

× I'm not really many people use use a smartphone to communicate with other people, so the handwriting letters decrease today.

✓ Not really. Many people use smartphones to communicate with others, so handwritten letters have decreased today.

Replace 'other people' with 'others' for conciseness and pronoun correctness. Also remove repeated 'use'.

× I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I have a smartphone such a such so I can messaging and searching with my smartphone.

✓ I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I have a smartphone, so I can send messages and search information with it.

Use plural/singular correctly: 'send messages' not 'messaging' as a verb; 'search information' or 'search the web'. Replace 'such a such' (nonsense) with a comma and 'it' to refer to the smartphone. Use proper verbs 'send' and 'search'.

× I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I have a smartphone such a such so I can messaging and searching with my smartphone.

✓ I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because I have a smartphone, so I can send messages and search the internet with it.

After 'can' use the base verb form: 'can send' and 'can search' rather than gerunds 'messaging' or 'searching'. Also replace awkward phrase 'such a such'.

× I like to draw some characters with paper and pen.

✓ I liked to draw characters with paper and pen when I was a child.

Question asked 'What did you like to do with paper as a child?' so response should be in past tense 'liked' and include time reference 'when I was a child'. Also 'some' is unnecessary; 'draw characters' is sufficient.

× I often enjoyed drawing.

✓ I often enjoyed drawing when I was a child.

Add time reference to match past context. 'Enjoyed' is past tense and fits 'when I was a child'. Without time phrase the answer is incomplete.