Paper— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar and clarity: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and article usage, and avoid redundancy. Add one specific detail and connect ideas with a linking word. Also limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes. When I was in eighth grade my teacher introduced me to paper crafts, and I loved drawing and making little landscape scenes on coloured craft paper. For example, I made a seaside picture with cut-out waves and a paper boat.

Suggestion: Make the response more natural and complete: give a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms, and provide a brief reason with a linking phrase. Keep it concise and specific about how rarely you write letters.

Example: No, I hardly ever write physical letters because I’m usually too busy. For instance, I send messages or emails instead of writing by hand when I need to contact someone.

Suggestion: Organise ideas more logically and correct grammar: open with a clear opinion, then support it with a specific reason and an example; use linking words like 'however' or 'for example'. Avoid vague endings.

Example: In general, fewer people keep handwritten letters today because most communication happens digitally. For example, people usually text or email from their phones, which is faster and easier than writing and mailing a letter.

Suggestion: Be concise and relevant: give a clear main sentence, correct word order and articles, and add a specific reason or short example. Avoid repetition like 'definitely' twice.

Example: Yes, I usually carry a pen and a small notebook when I go out because I like to jot down ideas or reminders. For instance, I always bring a pen to exams to fill in answers and make quick notes.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct tense and plural forms: start with a simple topic sentence, then give two specific examples and a brief linking phrase. Avoid repeating 'when I was a child'.

Example: As a child I enjoyed making paper crafts, especially drawing scenery and folding paper flowers and houses. For example, I used coloured paper to build small paper houses and decorate them with cut-out windows.

× When I was in eight standard, my teacher taught me about the craft paper and I loved to drawing and made scenery on craft paper.

✓ When I was in the eighth grade, my teacher taught me about craft paper, and I loved drawing and making scenery on craft paper.

Errors: 'in eight standard' uses incorrect preposition and form; correct phrase is 'in the eighth grade'. 'about the craft paper' uses unnecessary article; use 'about craft paper'. 'loved to drawing' mixes infinitive and gerund; use 'loved drawing'. 'made scenery' should be parallel gerund 'making scenery'. Suggestion: use correct preposition and ordinal number, remove unnecessary articles, and keep verbs parallel using gerunds.

× Not at all. I do not like write physical letter for anyone because of my busy schedule.

✓ Not at all. I do not like to write physical letters for anyone because of my busy schedule.

Errors: Missing 'to' after 'like' when using infinitive form and plural 'letter' should be 'letters'. Use 'to write' or 'writing'; both are acceptable. Suggestion: add 'to' and make 'letter' plural to match general meaning.

× Nowadays technology has changed, people do not like to write any letter by their hand because they use a computer and if they want to write anything for anyone they use their phone.

✓ Nowadays technology has changed, and people do not like to write letters by hand because they use computers or, if they want to write something, they use their phones.

Errors: Missing connector 'and' after the comma. 'any letter' should be plural 'letters' for general statements. 'by their hand' is incorrect preposition; correct is 'by hand'. 'a computer' better as plural 'computers' for generalization. 'anything for anyone' is awkward; use 'something' and 'phones' plural. Suggestion: use 'by hand', make nouns plural for general statements, and use clearer conjunctions.

× So these kind of things very helpful for.

✓ So these kinds of things are very helpful.

Errors: 'these kind of things' should be 'these kinds of things' or 'this kind of thing'. Missing verb 'are'. Unnecessary 'for' at end. Suggestion: choose correct singular/plural form and include the verb; end the sentence without dangling preposition.

× I definitely carry pen and pencil when I go out.

✓ I definitely carry a pen and a pencil when I go out.

Errors: Missing articles 'a' before singular countable nouns 'pen' and 'pencil'. Suggestion: add 'a' for each countable noun or use plural if appropriate (pens and pencils).

× If I have important exam, I definitely write my exam with the pen and it is very a common thing which is very beneficial for me.

✓ If I have an important exam, I definitely write it with a pen, and it is a common practice that is very beneficial for me.

Errors: Missing article 'an' before 'important exam'. Repetition 'my exam' unnecessary; use 'it'. 'the pen' should be 'a pen' for a nonspecific pen. 'very a common' incorrect order; 'a common' is correct. Ending 'for me' already implied; rephrase for clarity. Suggestion: use correct articles, avoid repetition, and fix adjective order.

× When I was a child I made a lot of sceneries on paper, make photos, flowers, house which is my favorite hobbies when I was a child.

✓ When I was a child, I made a lot of scenery on paper: pictures, flowers, and houses, which were my favorite hobbies.

Errors: Mixed verb forms: 'made' then 'make' should be consistent past tense. 'sceneries' is uncountable; use 'scenery' or 'scenes'; 'photos' and 'house' need plural agreement 'houses'. Repetition 'when I was a child' unnecessary. Relative clause 'which is my favorite hobbies' mismatches singular 'is' with plural 'hobbies'; use 'were my favorite hobbies'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent, use correct countable/uncountable nouns, and match subject-verb agreement in relative clauses.