Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using correct verb forms and natural expressions. Avoid redundant phrases (e.g., “effectively”, “from my perspective”, “in the dump”) and check subject-verb agreement and tense (e.g., “gives me”, “has helped me”).

Example: I prefer happy music. It helps me connect with friends because we often share upbeat playlists, and it motivates me to stay positive — for example, when I felt stressed before exams, listening to cheerful songs helped me relax and concentrate.

Suggestion: Focus on clarity and natural vocabulary. Use correct verb forms and replace unclear phrases (e.g., “optimistic VAP”) with simple, meaningful words like “optimism” or “positive energy.” Limit to one or two sentences, use linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”), and give a specific example of how the music affects you.

Example: Yes — it definitely brightens my day because upbeat songs lift my mood and give me energy. For example, when I listen to an energetic playlist before a workout, I feel more motivated and perform better.

× From my perspective, I prefer happy music mainly because it not only helps me to keep in touch with other people, but also give me the motivation to keep moving forward and to keep my chin up effectively.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer happy music mainly because it not only helps me to keep in touch with other people, but also gives me the motivation to keep moving forward and to keep my chin up effectively.

The verb 'give' does not agree with the singular subject 'it' and should be in third person singular form 'gives'. This falls under present participle/verb form issues and subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: ensure verbs after 'it' use -s in present simple (it helps, it gives).

× And it's also helped me when I was down in the dump.

✓ And it also helped me when I was down in the dumps.

The original mixes contraction 'it's' (it is/it has) with past meaning; 'helped' already expresses past so use 'it' not 'it's'. Also the idiom is 'down in the dumps' (plural). Suggestion: use consistent past tense without contraction and correct idiom: 'it also helped me when I was down in the dumps.'

× Without any doubt, it brighten up my day effectively mainly because it give me the optimistic VAP and also give me a lot of useful advices in order to keep moving forward.

✓ Without any doubt, it brightens up my day mainly because it gives me the optimistic VAP and also gives me a lot of useful advice to help me keep moving forward.

There are multiple present tense errors: 'brighten' and 'give' should be third person singular 'brightens' and 'gives' to agree with subject 'it'. 'Advices' is uncountable; use 'advice'. 'In order to keep moving forward' is wordy; 'to help me keep moving forward' is clearer. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement in present simple and use uncountable noun 'advice'.