Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy and grammar errors, use correct verb forms and prepositions, and add one specific example or reason using linking words. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: I prefer different kinds of music depending on my mood. For example, when I’m very happy I listen to upbeat, cheerful songs to celebrate, but when I’m stressed or feeling lonely I choose slow, sad songs because they help me relax and process my emotions.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, correct grammar, and use linking words to explain why with one specific detail. Avoid repetition and use appropriate vocabulary like "upbeat" or "energetic." Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, upbeat music definitely makes me feel more excited and energetic. For instance, fast-tempo songs with strong rhythms pump me up before I exercise and improve my motivation.

× It depends upon my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

Use of preposition: 'depend on' is the correct collocation in present tense. 'Depend upon' is possible but less common; choose 'depend on' for natural spoken English.

× When I feel over the moon then I definitely prefer to listen music which are happy.

✓ When I feel over the moon, I definitely prefer to listen to happy music.

Multiple issues: 1) Missing preposition 'to' after 'listen' (listen to + noun). 2) Word order: 'happy music' is the correct adjective-noun order. 3) Subject-verb agreement with 'which are' is incorrect here; use the adjective directly. Also remove unnecessary 'then' for natural flow and add a comma after the subordinate clause.

× But on all the other hand when I feel stressful and alone then I usually recommend to listen sad music to feel relaxed and comfortable.

✓ But on the other hand, when I feel stressed and alone I usually recommend listening to sad music to feel relaxed and comfortable.

Several problems corrected: 1) 'on all the other hand' should be 'on the other hand'. 2) Use 'stressed' not 'stressful' to describe a person. 3) After 'recommend' use the gerund form 'listening to' rather than 'to listen'. 4) Add commas for clarity and natural spoken rhythm.

× Yes definitely the music which are high beat are help to make me more excited and energized.

✓ Yes, definitely, high-beat music helps to make me more excited and energized.

Corrections: 1) 'which are high beat' is awkward; use the compound adjective 'high-beat music' or 'music with a fast beat'. 2) Subject-verb agreement: 'music' is singular (or uncountable) so use 'helps' not 'are help'. 3) Remove extra words and add commas for natural speech.

× After listening these type of music I feel and I I uplift my energy and also have more excited.

✓ After listening to this type of music, I feel my energy lift and I feel more excited.

Multiple issues: 1) 'listen' needs the preposition 'to' and 'these type' should be 'this type' (agreement between determiner and noun). 2) 'I feel and I I uplift my energy' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'I feel my energy lift' or 'my energy is uplifted'. 3) 'have more excited' is incorrect—use 'feel more excited'. 4) Add a comma after the introductory clause.