Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference (or say you like both). Use correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and avoid unclear words (“lobbyists” is incorrect here). Provide one specific example and a brief reason using linking words (e.g., because, so, for example). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: I usually prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me focus. For example, when I’m studying I play upbeat pop songs because they make me feel energetic and less stressed.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use natural collocations. Say ‘Yes, it does’ then give a concise reason. Fix awkward phrases like “mental state will be posted” and use precise verbs (e.g., improves, boosts, energises). Use one linking word (because, so) and a short example of what you do when you listen to happy music. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, it does — happy music boosts my energy and motivation because of its fast tempo and positive lyrics. For example, I often dance or exercise to upbeat songs, which helps me feel more productive.

× I'm someone who always enjoy music, but the rhythm of music depends on my mood, my mental state.

✓ I'm someone who always enjoys music, and the rhythm of music depends on my mood and my mental state.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'I' with relative clause 'who' takes third-person singular verb 'enjoys'. Also replace comma splice with 'and' for correct sentence structure and remove redundant comma. Suggestion: use 'enjoys' and connect clauses with 'and'.

× If I'm happy, I always play cheerful songs, or if I'm not at all happy, I prefer songs that are with lobbyists.

✓ If I'm happy, I always play cheerful songs; if I'm not happy, I prefer sad songs.

Incorrect use of vocabulary/adverbs and awkward phrasing: 'not at all happy' is acceptable but wordy; 'songs that are with lobbyists' is nonsensical and likely a wrong word choice. Also punctuation: use a semicolon or separate sentences. Suggestion: use 'not happy' and 'sad songs' to convey intended meaning clearly.

× Always, whenever I listen to happy music, my mental state will be posted and I feel like I gain more energy, more power to do something.

✓ Whenever I listen to happy music, my mood improves and I feel like I gain more energy and motivation to do things.

Tense and word choice issues: 'Always' redundant with 'whenever'; 'will be posted' is incorrect verb and passive—likely wrong word choice. Use present simple for habitual actions ('my mood improves') and natural nouns ('motivation' instead of 'power'). Suggestion: remove 'always', use 'whenever' and present simple, and replace 'posted' with 'improves'.

× I always dance to happy music.

✓ I always dance to happy music.

No grammatical error detected. Present simple correctly expresses habitual action. Keep as is.

× That means it improves something in my mind.

✓ That means it improves my state of mind.

Awkward sentence structure and word choice: 'something in my mind' is vague and unidiomatic. Use the fixed phrase 'state of mind' to clearly convey mental wellbeing improvement.