Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and fix verb forms and articles (e.g., “listen to sad music”). Mention a brief example to make it specific.

Example: I like both sad and happy music. For example, I listen to sad songs when I want to reflect or feel comforted, but at family gatherings I play upbeat songs so everyone can dance and enjoy themselves.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and reduce filler words. Add a specific detail about how it affects you and use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because it has a fast rhythm and cheerful melodies. For instance, when I hear pop or dance songs I want to get up and dance, and my mood usually improves within minutes.

× I prefer both sad or happy music as sometimes we feel very sad so so we love to listen sad music but when we are with family or at gathering so we love happy music while dancing.

✓ I prefer both sad and happy music; sometimes we feel very sad, so we like to listen to sad music, but when we are with family or at a gathering, we prefer happy music for dancing.

The sentence uses 'both ... or' incorrectly; use 'both ... and' for pairing or use 'either ... or'. 'So so' is redundant. 'Listen sad music' omits the preposition 'to'. 'At gathering' needs the article 'a'. The sentence is long and needs punctuation to separate clauses. Suggested improvements: use 'both ... and' for two items, include 'to' after 'listen', add 'a' before 'gathering', remove repeated words, and add commas/semicolons to clarify clause boundaries.

× Yes, happy music often feel me more excited as I love dancing.

✓ Yes, happy music often makes me more excited because I love dancing.

'Music' is a singular noun so the verb must be 'makes' (third person singular). 'Feel me more excited' uses incorrect verb structure; the correct pattern is 'makes me more excited' or 'often makes me feel more excited'. 'As' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer for cause. Suggestion: use third-person singular verb 'makes' and the correct object structure 'me more excited' or 'me feel more excited'.

× Whenever I listen to happy music I I always feel like I have to dance.

✓ Whenever I listen to happy music, I always feel like I have to dance.

There is a duplicated word 'I I' causing a typographical/repetition error. Also a comma is needed after the introductory subordinate clause 'Whenever I listen to happy music'. Suggestion: remove the duplicate and add appropriate punctuation.

× I get more excited uh.

✓ I get more excited.

The filler 'uh' is a non-standard spoken hesitation marker and should be removed in written responses. The sentence is otherwise acceptable but brief; keeping it as 'I get more excited.' is grammatically correct. Suggestion: avoid fillers in written answers.