Teachers— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (tense consistency and pronoun use), and provide one or two specific examples of what made the teacher memorable. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes. My favorite teacher was Charlie Maine, my high-school PE teacher. He made lessons fun by creating team games and encouraging everyone, so shy students joined in. Because he was relaxed and supportive, I grew more confident in sports and teamwork.

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and tighten wording. Use present or past consistently and give one concrete example of rewarding moments. Add a linking word to show contrast clearly.

Example: Teaching wasn't my first priority, but after I graduated I worked as an English teacher for Japanese students. I enjoyed helping them improve their conversation skills; for example, I held weekly speaking clubs which boosted many students’ confidence.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and be more specific: mention one or two teachers and a reason you still remember them, and use linking words (for example, "because", "so"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I still remember several teachers from high school and college because we keep in touch on Facebook. For instance, my biology teacher often sent study tips and encouragement, which helped me get into university, so I’m grateful and still connected with her.

Suggestion: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and add a concise reason plus a wish or possibility. Correct small grammar issues and avoid redundant phrases.

Example: No, I’m not in touch with my primary school teachers because I can’t remember their names or find them on social media. If I could reconnect, I would, since they played an important role in my early development.

Suggestion: Be specific about actions the teacher took and their effects. Use correct grammar and concise linking words (e.g., "for example", "by"). Avoid vague adjectives without examples.

Example: My favorite teacher shaped my character by encouraging creativity and independence. For example, he assigned group projects that required us to plan events, so I became more confident and resourceful in both schoolwork and life.

Suggestion: Give a clear comparison and one reason to support it. Remove repetition and correct awkward phrasing. Use linking words to show contrast or similarity (e.g., "rather than", "because").

Example: I don’t prefer one group over the other; I appreciate both primary and high-school teachers because each influenced me differently. For instance, primary teachers taught me basic study habits, while high-school teachers helped me develop critical thinking.

× I have a favorite teacher when I was in my high school.

✓ I had a favorite teacher when I was in high school.

Mixing present tense 'have' with past time phrase 'when I was' is incorrect. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time reference. Also 'in my high school' is unnatural; say 'in high school.'

× So we he wasn't strict.

✓ So he wasn't strict.

Extra word 'we' makes the sentence ungrammatical. Remove it to produce a correct clause: 'So he wasn't strict.'

× He wasn't.

✓ He wasn't strict.

The fragment 'He wasn't.' is incomplete because the adjective is omitted. Repeat the adjective or combine with the previous sentence: 'He wasn't strict.'

× Being a teacher wasn't really of my priority.

✓ Being a teacher wasn't really my priority.

The phrase 'of my priority' is incorrect collocation. Use 'my priority' after 'wasn't really' to express the intended meaning. The gerund 'Being' is fine but must connect to the correct noun phrase.

× However, when I graduated and started working, I became an English teacher for Japanese students.

✓ However, when I graduated and started working, I became an English teacher for Japanese students.

No correction needed; tense usage is appropriate. (Included only to show this sentence is correct so no change is required.)

× I really enjoyed it a lot, being able to educate students from different walks of life.

✓ I really enjoyed it a lot, being able to teach students from different walks of life.

'Educate' is correct but 'teach' is more natural in this context when referring to classroom instruction. The gerund phrase 'being able to teach' correctly follows 'enjoyed.'

× I have a lot of teachers that I still remember because we are friends on Facebook.

✓ I have a lot of teachers whom I still remember because we are friends on Facebook.

Use 'whom' for the object of 'remember' in formal grammar; however 'that' is commonly used. This sentence mainly has a relative pronoun choice issue rather than tense, but the present tense 'have' and 'are' are correct because the relationship still exists. Replacing 'that' with 'whom' improves grammatical accuracy.

× I am able to connect with them in social media platforms and I remember a lot of teachers from my high school and my college days.

✓ I am able to connect with them on social media platforms and I remember a lot of teachers from my high school and college days.

Use 'on social media platforms' not 'in.' Also 'my' before 'college days' is redundant when 'my high school' is already specified; more natural to say 'my high school and college days.'

× We are friends on Facebook because they're really good and encouraging teachers and I wouldn't cut ties with them.

✓ We are friends on Facebook because they were really good and encouraging teachers, and I wouldn't cut ties with them.

If referring to past teachers, use past tense 'were.' Also add a comma before 'and' to join clauses. Pronoun usage is fine but tense alignment is needed.

× No, I can't remember a teacher in my primary school that I am in contact with.

✓ No, I can't remember any teacher from my primary school whom I am in contact with.

Use 'any' for negative sentences and 'from' rather than 'in.' 'Whom' is the object of 'am in contact with.'

× I can't find their Facebook, sometimes I can't even remember their name.

✓ I can't find their Facebook profiles; sometimes I can't even remember their names.

Use 'profiles' to refer to Facebook accounts and plural 'names' to match 'their.' Use a semicolon or period rather than a comma splice.

× So we don't connect anymore.

✓ So we don't keep in touch anymore.

'Connect' is awkward here; 'keep in touch' is the natural idiom for ongoing contact. Present tense 'don't' is correct because it's a current state.

× However, if given a chance, I would really love to connect with them because they made me grow.

✓ However, if given the chance, I would really love to connect with them because they helped me grow.

'Given the chance' is the natural phrase. 'Made me grow' is unnatural; use 'helped me grow' or 'helped me to grow.' Also conditional 'would really love' is appropriate.

× My favorite teacher helped me become who I am today, a kind, encouraging and a very spontaneous person.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me become who I am today: a kind, encouraging and very spontaneous person.

When listing adjectives, do not repeat the article 'a' before the last adjective. Use a colon or comma and remove the extra 'a' before 'very spontaneous.'

× I had this teacher in high school, his name was Charlie.

✓ I had this teacher in high school; his name was Charlie.

This is a run-on comma splice. Separate into two sentences or use a semicolon. Keeping past tense is correct.

× He was really encouraging and he gave us a lot of ideas, not only would school work but also with life and I admire him so much.

✓ He was really encouraging and gave us a lot of ideas, not only about schoolwork but also about life, and I admire him so much.

Use 'about' to indicate topics ('about schoolwork,' 'about life'). 'School work' should be one word 'schoolwork.' Rephrase 'not only... but also' correctly and add commas to clarify clauses.

× I wouldn't say I like my primary teachers more than my high school teachers.

✓ I wouldn't say I like my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers.

Add 'school' after 'primary' for clarity. The comparative structure 'more than' is fine.

× I love all of my teachers in the past because they helped me shape who I am today.

✓ I love all of my past teachers because they helped shape who I am today.

'In the past' is awkward; 'past teachers' is more natural. 'Helped shape' is the correct verb combination; 'helped me shape' is acceptable but less concise.

× If not for them, I wouldn't be able to succeed in life, especially that they have honed me to become a better person and a better, better.

✓ If not for them, I wouldn't be able to succeed in life, especially since they helped hone me into a better person.

Use 'since' or 'because' instead of 'that' to link the reason. 'Honed me to become' is awkward; use 'helped hone me into.' Remove the repeated 'better.' Ensure the sentence is complete and idiomatic.