Teachers— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details with linking words. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., warm, approachable) and reduce redundant phrases (e.g., "very friendly" + "very respectful").

Example: My favorite teacher is a warm, approachable woman who often invites students to lunch and greets us with a big smile each morning. Because she listens patiently and treats everyone respectfully, I feel comfortable asking questions and spending time with her.

Suggestion: Open with a direct topic sentence and combine sentences to sound more fluent. Add a brief reason or example to show motivation. Avoid small hesitations or overly short fragments.

Example: Yes — I am already an English teacher for kindergarten and elementary students, and I plan to continue because I enjoy helping young learners build confidence through fun, structured lessons.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and repetitions ("so", repeated "prepared", "he he"). Start with a concise topic sentence, then give two specific examples of his qualities and explain why they impressed you. Use linking words like "for example" or "because" to organise ideas.

Example: I remember my biology teacher clearly because he always taught confidently without notes and could answer every question. For example, he calmly explained difficult concepts with clear examples, which made me admire his expertise and inspired me to aim for the same professionalism.

Suggestion: Correct word order and avoid repetition. Give one clear reason and use a linking phrase. Replace vague phrasing with precise language and remove duplicate phrases.

Example: No, I am not. When I was at primary school social media was not widely used, so we didn't exchange contact details and there was no easy way to keep in touch.

Suggestion: Fix minor grammatical errors and be more specific with examples of how they influenced you. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a concrete example of behaviour you adopt because of them.

Example: My favourite teacher taught me to treat teaching as a calling rather than just a job. For example, because of her example I now plan lessons with extra activities to engage students and try to act as a positive role model in lessons.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and long run-on sentences. Provide a concise contrast using linking words (e.g., "whereas", "while") and give one specific example of how high school teachers differed. Remove informal fragments and correct grammar.

Example: No — I preferred my high school teachers because, whereas primary teachers used corporal punishment, high school teachers disciplined us by talking and trying to understand our feelings. This made them more approachable and helped me learn more effectively.

× He always taught without referring to any textbook or notebook, and he seemed to have the answers to every questions that we asked.

✓ He always taught without referring to any textbook or notebook, and he seemed to have the answers to every question that we asked.

The noun 'questions' is plural while preceded by 'every', which requires a singular noun 'question'. Change to 'every question'. This fixes number agreement after 'every'.

× I think I admired him because he he did his job very well.

✓ I think I admired him because he did his job very well.

There is an accidental duplication of the pronoun/subject 'he'. Remove the repeated word to form a grammatical clause. Also ensure only one subject precedes the verb 'did'.

× I think when I was a student, social media wasn't a big it wasn't very popular so there was no chance to exchange any contacts with my teacher.

✓ I think when I was a student, social media wasn't very popular so there was no chance to exchange any contact details with my teachers.

The original has extraneous words 'a big it wasn't' causing ungrammaticality. 'Exchange any contacts' is awkward; use 'exchange any contact details' or 'contact information'. Also 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' if referring generally. Fixes preposition and word choice issues and removes redundancy.

× The my favorite teacher has helped me to always remember to teach with passion and to teach with the aim of being a role model to my students.

✓ My favorite teacher has helped me always remember to teach with passion and to teach with the aim of being a role model to my students.

The phrase begins with both definite article 'The' and possessive 'my' which is incorrect; drop 'The'. Also 'to always remember' can be streamlined to 'always remember' for natural word order.

× So my teachers have helped me to think about teaching as a calling and not just a job to earn money.

✓ So my teachers have helped me think about teaching as a calling and not just a job to earn money.

This sentence is broadly grammatical, but 'helped me to think' is acceptable; removing 'to' makes it more natural. No major agreement error; included as minor stylistic improvement rather than strict grammar fix.

× So I don't I don't have any contacts with my teachers from primary school.

✓ So I don't have any contacts with my teachers from primary school.

There is an unintended repetition 'I don't I don't'. Remove the duplicate to correct the pronoun and auxiliary repetition.

× And to add on that, I'd also say that my high school teachers would discipline us by talking to us. Us as compared to my primary school teachers who would cane us as a way of disciplining us.

✓ And to add to that, I'd also say that my high school teachers would discipline us by talking to us, as compared to my primary school teachers who would cane us as a way of disciplining us.

Sentence punctuation and pronoun placement were fragmented. 'Add on' is informal; 'add to that' is standard. The isolated 'Us as compared to...' fragment should be combined into one sentence. This fixes sentence structure and pronoun usage.