Teachers— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, avoid hesitations and repetitions, and give specific examples of how he helped you. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words.

Example: Yes. My favourite teacher was Mr. Rajeshwar Shasta, who taught social studies and also helped students with problems in other subjects. For example, he organised after-school tutoring sessions twice a week, which helped me improve my grades in maths and science.

Suggestion: Give a direct, fluent response with clearer grammar and specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your aim and reasons, and correct subject-verb agreement.

Example: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I hope to become a social worker because I want to help people in urban areas who lack basic facilities, and I believe social work will allow me to make a bigger impact.

Suggestion: Focus on a single clear statement: name the teacher and one specific reason you remember them. Avoid pronoun/grammar errors and unclear phrases. Use a linking phrase to add a concrete example of what they did.

Example: I remember a secondary teacher named Kamala Rizal because she taught our chemistry class very effectively. For instance, she demonstrated each experiment in class and gave clear step-by-step explanations, which made difficult topics easy to understand.

Suggestion: Use clearer vocabulary (e.g. 'in touch', 'message') and correct grammar. State frequency and purpose clearly, and use linking words to organise your answer.

Example: I'm not in regular contact with my primary school teachers, but occasionally I message them on social media to ask for advice about my future. They often give me helpful suggestions about careers and study choices.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific ways the teacher helped you, using linking words and correct tense and grammar. Avoid filler words.

Example: My favourite teacher helped me in several ways. For example, Kamala Rizal explained difficult chemistry concepts step by step and provided extra practice questions, which helped me solve problems faster and with more confidence.

× I do have my favorite teacher, uh, his name is Rajeshwar Shasta.

✓ I do have a favorite teacher; his name is Rajeshwar Shasta.

Use of pronoun is acceptable but article use was redundant. Change 'my favorite teacher' to 'a favorite teacher' for natural English when introducing someone. Also replace comma with semicolon for clearer clause separation.

× He taught us social studies and he also helped us to solve problems of every subject.

✓ He taught us social studies and he also helped us solve problems in every subject.

Remove the infinitive 'to' after 'helped' and use 'solve' (bare infinitive) and use preposition 'in' for 'problems in every subject'. This corrects verb usage and preposition choice.

× He was the in charge of our school and he, he, he always cured us.

✓ He was in charge of our school and he always cared for us.

Use the phrase 'in charge of' without 'the'. 'Cured us' is wrong contextually; likely intended 'cared for us' or 'helped us'. 'Cared for' is the correct verb phrase here.

× No, I don't want to be a teacher in my future because my aim is not that to be a teacher.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because my aim is not to be one.

Use 'in the future' or 'in my future'—'in the future' is more natural. Remove unnecessary 'that' and replace 'a teacher' repetition with pronoun 'one'. This corrects awkward phrasing and word order.

× I want to be a social worker and help the people of urban areas who is who are is not getting any facilities.

✓ I want to be a social worker and help people in urban areas who are not getting any facilities.

Use 'people in urban areas' (no 'the'), and correct subject-verb agreement: 'who are not getting' (plural 'people' requires 'are'). Remove redundant words.

× Ashley have many teachers from our primary and secondary school but I still remember my umm secondary teacher with her name is Kamala Rizal and see taught us chemistry for instance.

✓ I had many teachers in primary and secondary school, but I still remember my secondary teacher, Kamala Rizal, and she taught us chemistry, for instance.

Correct pronoun use and verb tense: 'I had many teachers' (past) and 'she taught' (past). Use 'in' for 'in primary school'. Remove awkward 'with her name is' and replace with apposition 'Kamala Rizal'. Fix 'see' to 'she'.

× He gave us the uh relations which would do not we.

✓ He gave us the relationships which we did not understand.

The original is unintelligible; likely meaning is 'relationships' (or 'relations') that 'we did not understand'. Use past tense 'did not understand' and correct word order.

× I'm not so touched with my primary school teacher, but sometimes we do have a uh massage in the social media and I ask them what to do in my future and what is good for me.

✓ I'm not in close contact with my primary school teachers, but sometimes we exchange messages on social media and I ask them for advice about my future and what is good for me.

Replace 'not so touched' with natural expression 'not in close contact'. 'Massage' should be 'messages'. Use plural 'teachers' consistent with earlier. 'Ask them for advice' is the correct collocation.

× They give us they give me suggestion which helps to be a better future.

✓ They give me suggestions that help me have a better future.

Use consistent person: 'give me suggestions'. Use plural 'suggestions' and correct clause 'that help me have a better future' for clarity and grammar.

× My favorite teacher help me in very many ways.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me in many ways.

Past reference requires past tense 'helped' and 'in many ways' is more natural than 'in very many ways'. This corrects tense and phrasing.

× Umm Kamala Rizal help me to solve the chemistry problems which I felt difficult in that time.

✓ Kamala Rizal helped me solve the chemistry problems that I found difficult at that time.

Use past tense 'helped'. Replace 'felt difficult' with 'found difficult' and use 'at that time' for time reference. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helped'.

× She also uh explain in detail which give us more examples to solve the problem easily and take the less time.

✓ She also explained things in detail, giving us more examples to solve problems more easily and in less time.

Use past tense 'explained'. Use participle 'giving' to show result. Replace 'take the less time' with 'in less time'. Use plural 'problems' or 'the problem' consistently and 'more easily' for adverb.