Teachers— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, give one or two specific reasons or an example of what made them memorable, and avoid repetitive adjectives. Use linking words to connect points (for example, because, for instance, and consequently).

Example: My favourite teacher was my 10th-grade English teacher because he focused on clear explanations and gave helpful feedback. For example, he encouraged us to read classic short stories and gave individual comments on our essays, which improved my grammar and confidence.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and state your position clearly. Use one topic sentence saying whether you want to be a teacher, then give 1–2 concise reasons with linking words (for example, because, although).

Example: No, I don't want to be a teacher because I prefer hands-on or technical work rather than classroom instruction. Although my family thinks I would be good at teaching, I believe my strengths suit a different career path.

Suggestion: Be specific about what you remember. Give a concise topic sentence and then one concrete example of a memory or value she taught you. Replace vague praise with concrete details and use linking words (for example, because, such as).

Example: Yes, I still remember my first-grade teacher at La Salle Green Hills because she helped me settle into a new school. For example, she taught me how to share and be confident in class, which made it easier for me to make friends.

Suggestion: Good clear answer. To improve, add a brief reason or a short reflection about how you feel about that and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it concise and natural.

Example: No, I'm not in touch with them anymore because I never collected their contact details as a child. As a result, I sometimes regret not keeping in contact since they had a big impact on me.

Suggestion: Be more specific and provide a concrete example of how the teacher helped you, using linking words to show cause and effect (for example, because, so). Avoid listing similar items; combine them naturally.

Example: He helped me improve my writing because he gave detailed feedback on my essays and assigned weekly reading tasks. As a result, my grammar and reading skills improved and I felt more confident participating in class.

× I have a plethora of favorite teachers, however, if I were to choose one, it would be my English teacher from the 10th and 7th grade.

✓ I have a plethora of favorite teachers; however, if I were to choose one, it would be my English teacher from the 10th and 7th grades.

The phrase '10th and 7th grade' should be pluralized to '10th and 7th grades' because it refers to two separate grade levels. Use plural form for multiple items of the same kind. Also using a semicolon before 'however' or starting a new sentence is preferred to join two independent clauses correctly. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns when referring to multiple distinct instances and use proper punctuation to link independent clauses.

× He taught very well and he was very precise with his teaching.

✓ He taught very well and he was very precise in his teaching.

The sentence is mostly correct, but 'precise with his teaching' is unidiomatic. Use 'precise in his teaching' to describe manner. The verb forms are correct for third person past. Suggestion: prefer idiomatic preposition 'in' after 'precise' when describing how someone teaches.

× He was very excellent when it came to fostering knowledge to his students.

✓ He was excellent at fostering knowledge in his students.

'Excellent' does not need 'very' (redundant) and collocates with 'at' for the activity. Also 'fostering knowledge to his students' incorrectly uses 'to'; the correct preposition is 'in' to indicate the students possessed the knowledge. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions for verbs/phrases ('excellent at', 'foster knowledge in') and avoid redundant intensifiers.

× Teaching isn't the career I personally want, however I have heard from family that I'd make a pretty good teacher.

✓ Teaching isn't the career I personally want; however, I have heard from my family that I'd make a pretty good teacher.

Add 'my' before 'family' to clarify possessive relationship. The modal 'I'd' (I would) is acceptable here. Also use proper punctuation before 'however'. Suggestion: include possessive determiners when referring to groups related to the speaker and punctuate transitional adverbs properly.

× However in my opinion, again, it's not something I'd want.

✓ However, in my opinion, it's not something I would want.

'I'd' is a contraction of 'I would' and is acceptable, but in formal spoken answers expanding to 'I would' is clearer. Also remove redundant 'again'. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary repetition and use full modal form for clarity in formal contexts.

× I feel like I wouldn't do well in the field and in my opinion I just feel like I'll do better elsewhere.

✓ I feel I wouldn't do well in the field, and I think I'll do better elsewhere.

The sentence repeats 'I feel like' and 'in my opinion' which is redundant. Use consistent modal forms: 'wouldn't' for hypothetical ability and 'I'll' for future expectation is fine; keep concise by using 'I think' instead of repeating 'I feel like'. Suggestion: eliminate redundancy and choose concise reporting verbs.

× A teacher from my past that I still remember is my first grade teacher.

✓ A teacher from my past whom I still remember is my first-grade teacher.

Add hyphen in 'first-grade' when used as a compound adjective before 'teacher'. Also 'that' is acceptable for people but 'whom' is more formal and grammatically correct as the object of 'remember'. Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives and use 'whom' for formal object reference, though 'who' or 'that' are common in speech.

× When I first moved to La Salle Green Hills, she kept me very safe.

✓ When I first moved to La Salle Green Hills, she kept me safe.

'Very safe' is not wrong but 'kept me safe' is more natural; 'very' is unnecessary. The grammar is otherwise fine. Suggestion: omit unnecessary adverbs for natural phrasing.

× She was very excellent.

✓ She was excellent.

'Excellent' is a strong adjective; adding 'very' is redundant and unidiomatic. Use either 'very good' or 'excellent', not both. Suggestion: avoid combining 'very' with absolute adjectives like 'excellent'.

× She taught me good values.

✓ She taught me good values.

Grammatically acceptable; however, 'good values' is slightly informal—'valuable values' is awkward, better: 'She taught me important values.' This is a style suggestion rather than strict grammar. Suggestion: prefer 'important values' for clarity.

× She taught me amazing things that I still remember to this day.

✓ She taught me amazing things that I still remember to this day.

Sentence is grammatically correct. 'To this day' is idiomatic. No preposition error. No correction necessary.

× Unfortunately, I am no longer in touch with my primary school teachers.

✓ Unfortunately, I am no longer in touch with my primary school teachers.

Sentence is correct. 'My' correctly indicates possession. No change needed.

× Those were years ago and when I was a kid I didn't bother getting their contact information, which is why now I don't know where they are anymore.

✓ Those were years ago, and when I was a kid I didn't bother getting their contact information, which is why I don't know where they are now.

'Which is why now I don't know where they are anymore' is wordy and has redundant time adverbs 'now' and 'anymore'. Rearranged to 'which is why I don't know where they are now' for clarity and conciseness. Also add a comma before 'and' joining independent clauses. Suggestion: avoid redundant adverbs and place time expressions at the end of the clause for natural flow.

× My favorite teacher helped me improve my literacy, my reading, my grammar, and my writing.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me improve my literacy, reading, grammar, and writing.

Listing the same possessive 'my' before each item is unnecessary and repetitive. Grammatically both forms are acceptable, but concision favors a single determiner. Suggestion: use one determiner for a coordinated list to improve fluency.

× He did his best to teach everybody in class.

✓ He did his best to teach everybody in the class.

Add definite article 'the' before 'class' to specify the particular class. 'Everybody in class' is acceptable in speech, but 'in the class' is slightly more natural. Suggestion: include 'the' when referring to a specific class.

× He made sure everybody was safe, and he made sure that we were all working together as a team.

✓ He made sure everybody was safe, and he made sure that we were all working together as a team.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.