Teachers— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid unnecessary words and grammatical errors (e.g. "study with him" → "study under him" or simply "had"), and add one specific example of what made him special. Keep to maximum 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes. My favorite teacher was my grade 6 English teacher. He was very popular because his lessons were interactive and fun — for example, he used role-plays to help us practice speaking, which made learning enjoyable and boosted my confidence.

Suggestion: Answer directly and finish the thought. Avoid filler words (umm, well) and repetition. Provide a clear topic sentence about your future desire (or not), then one or two concise supporting reasons. If mentioning dislikes, complete the sentence with a specific issue.

Example: I don’t plan to change careers — I’m already a high school teacher in Hanoi and I enjoy working with talented, motivated students. However, I find the workload overwhelming sometimes because we lack enough teaching materials and administrative support.

Suggestion: Be direct and limit to one clear idea. Start with a topic sentence naming the teacher, then give one or two specific reasons/examples that illustrate why you remember her. Avoid repetition and fillers; use a linking word to show reason (because, since).

Example: Yes. I particularly remember my homeroom teacher from grades 6 to 9 because she was strict and often singled out students unfairly. For instance, she frequently changed seating plans without explanation and criticized students publicly, which made a strong impression on me.

Suggestion: Be concise and structured: start with a direct answer (No), then give one or two clear reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid filler words and redundant phrases like "I totally forgot where they live now" — be specific about why contact was lost.

Example: No, I’m not still in touch with them because I moved far away after grade 6. They may also have retired or moved schools, so I haven’t been able to visit or contact them.

Suggestion: Good content but trim fillers and improve coherence: start with a clear topic sentence, use a linking phrase to add detail, and give one specific example of the teaching method and its result. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: My English teacher helped me become much more confident in speaking. For example, he used group activities and games to make lessons interactive, which made me less afraid to speak up in class and improved my fluency.

× I used to have a favorite English teacher that I got a chance to study with him when I was in grade 6.

✓ I used to have a favorite English teacher whom I got a chance to study with when I was in grade 6.

The original sentence redundantly uses both the relative pronoun 'that' and the object pronoun 'him'. Use 'whom' (object of the verb 'study with') or 'that' without 'him'. Use one correct object pronoun to avoid redundancy and maintain formal grammar. Suggestion: Use 'whom' after a preposition (with) or restructure: 'a teacher I got to study with in grade 6.'

× He was admired by many friends in my class for his teaching style and his open mindedness.

✓ He was admired by many friends in my class for his teaching style and his open-mindedness.

The compound adjective 'open-mindedness' should be hyphenated when formed from a compound adjective. Using the hyphen clarifies that 'open-minded' modifies '-ness'. Suggestion: Use 'open-mindedness' or rephrase to 'his openness of mind.'

× Well, I'm currently a teacher at one of the high schools in Hanoi, Umm What I enjoy about my job is that I get to meet a lot of talented students and umm, I get to interact with a lot of smart students in our school.

✓ Well, I'm currently a teacher at one of the high schools in Hanoi. What I enjoy about my job is that I get to meet and interact with many talented students at our school.

The original run-on sentence includes filler words and repetition ('meet' and 'interact' both repeated) and lacks proper punctuation. Combine related actions and remove fillers for clarity. Also use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for formality and 'at our school' rather than 'in our school.' Suggestion: Break into sentences and avoid filler words like 'umm.'

× Umm One thing that I do not like about my job is that we do not have.

✓ One thing that I do not like about my job is that we do not have enough resources.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks the object of 'do not have', resulting in a sentence without a complete verb phrase and object. Provide the missing information to complete the thought. Suggestion: Specify what is lacking (for example, 'enough resources', 'support', or 'time').

× Well, I can say that I remember a lot of teachers from my secondary to my high school.

✓ Well, I can say that I remember a lot of teachers from my secondary school to my high school.

The phrase 'from my secondary to my high school' omits the noun after 'secondary'; 'secondary' should be followed by 'school' to be parallel with 'high school'. This is a pronoun/word omission causing ambiguity. Suggestion: Maintain parallel structure: 'from my secondary school to my high school.'

× The one that I remember the most is my homeroom teacher from grades 6 to 9 and umm. I remembered her because she was very mean and manipulative umm to us.

✓ The one I remember the most is my homeroom teacher from grades 6 to 9. I remember her because she was very mean and manipulative to us.

Mixing 'remember' and 'remembered' creates inconsistent tense. Use present simple 'remember' to state a current memory about the past, and keep the clause 'she was' in past simple to describe her past behavior. Remove filler words. Suggestion: Use consistent tense: 'I remember her because she was...'. Also remove 'umm.'

× Actually I don't, I have moved quite far away from my old home so and I don't remember any primary school teachers that used to have UMM.

✓ Actually I don't. I have moved quite far away from my old home, and I don't remember any primary school teachers from back then.

The original contains mismatched clauses and the phrase 'teachers that used to have' is ungrammatical—'have' doesn't fit. Also 'UMM' is a filler. Rephrase to express the intended meaning: you don't remember teachers from that time. Suggestion: Use clear relative phrasing like 'teachers from back then' or 'my primary school teachers.'

× The last time I visited them I think it was in grade 6.

✓ The last time I visited them, I think, was in grade 6.

The sentence word order is awkward. The phrase 'I think' should be parenthetical. Placing 'I think' between subject and verb breaks flow. Reposition it for clarity. Suggestion: Use commas to set off 'I think' or say 'I think the last time I visited them was in grade 6.'

× After that I totally forgot where they live now or they might have moved to a different school so I couldn't visit them.

✓ After that I totally forgot where they lived, or they might have moved to a different school, so I couldn't visit them.

Tense inconsistency: 'forgot' (past) should be followed by 'lived' (past) when referring to that past time. Also commas are needed to separate clauses. Use past tense 'lived' to match 'forgot'. Suggestion: Keep past tense throughout: 'I forgot where they lived.'

× Well, I think my English teacher helped me to feel more confident with my abilities and also he, uh, introduced a new way of learning in which it was more about like having fun and being interactive with the lesson rather than just sitting down.

✓ Well, I think my English teacher helped me feel more confident in my abilities, and he introduced a new way of learning that focused more on having fun and being interactive during the lessons rather than just sitting and listening.

Use 'helped me feel' (omit 'to' after 'helped' is acceptable) and 'confident in my abilities' is idiomatic. 'In which it was more about like having fun' is wordy and ungrammatical; use 'that focused more on having fun'. Also change 'being interactive with the lesson' to 'being interactive during the lessons' and 'sitting down' to 'sitting and listening' for clarity. Suggestion: Use concise structures, correct prepositions ('confident in'), and gerund phrases properly.