Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a direct, clear topic sentence, correct basic grammar, avoid filler words, and keep it concise (1–3 sentences). Mention one clear reason and a brief example. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct vocabulary (tidy, clean up).

Example: I don't usually keep my room tidy because I'm often very busy. For example, I leave my clothes and books where I study instead of putting them away, which makes it hard to find things later.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence about past habit, avoid hesitations, and give a specific supporting detail. Use past tense consistently and explain briefly what you did and why. Use linking words like "when" or "because."

Example: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because I liked organizing things. For example, in primary school I cleaned my locker regularly and arranged my books and stationery by color.

Suggestion: Give a clear method in one sentence and one brief reason. Avoid listing too many devices awkwardly and correct grammar (e.g., "I keep my desk tidy by not putting certain devices on it"). Use linking words like "because" to explain why.

Example: I keep my study space tidy by leaving my smartphone and tablet in another room because they distract me with social media. This helps me concentrate on studying at my desk.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion sentence and then one specific reason with correct vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words such as "because" and avoid vague phrases like "have effort."

Example: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it prevents you from losing items and saves time. For instance, a tidy desk helps me start work quickly without searching for my notes.

× No, because I'm not good at screen up my room, Uh, for example, I don't uh, take back my stuff, uh, from the place and I don't have such time since I I'm always busy.

✓ No, because I'm not good at cleaning up my room. For example, I don't put my stuff back in place and I don't have time since I'm always busy.

The phrase 'screen up' is incorrect; the correct form is the verb 'clean' with the present participle 'cleaning' plus the particle 'up' for the phrasal verb 'clean up'. 'Take back my stuff from the place' is an unnatural word order and verb choice; use 'put my stuff back in place'. 'Such time' is incorrect here; use 'time'. Also remove the doubled 'I'. Suggestions: use phrasal verbs appropriately ('clean up', 'put back'), keep subject pronouns singular and avoid repetition, and use concise time expressions ('I don't have time').

× Yeah, umm, when I was child I liked Korean things, so I always clean up my locker in primary school. So I assigned the color like books or, uh, flowers.

✓ Yeah, umm, when I was a child I liked Korean things, so I always cleaned up my locker in primary school. I arranged items by color, like books or decorations.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' is an article error (but within past-tense context). The action took place in the past so the verbs must be past tense: 'clean' should be 'cleaned'. 'Assigned the color' is incorrect collocation; use 'arranged by color'. Suggestions: include the article 'a' for 'a child', use past-tense verbs for past events, and choose correct collocations ('arrange by color', 'decorations' instead of 'flowers' if referring to locker items).

× I usually keep my desktop tidy by not putting uh, this two of the things such as smartphone, PC or tablet.

✓ I usually keep my desk tidy by not putting two of these things, such as a smartphone, PC, or tablet, on it.

Word order and demonstrative/quantifier use are incorrect: 'this two of the things' should be 'two of these things' or 'two of them'. Also 'desktop' is better as 'desk' when referring to the workspace surface. Include articles for singular countable nouns ('a smartphone') and clarify placement with 'on it'. Suggestions: use correct demonstratives ('these' with plural), proper word order, and include articles for countable nouns.

× It is uh, it is not useful for my study umm, because I usually watch YouTube or Instagram by the device says.

✓ They are not useful for studying because I usually watch YouTube or Instagram on those devices.

The sentence has subject-verb and noun-number mismatch: 'It is ... not useful' refers to multiple devices and should be plural ('They are not useful'). 'For my study' is awkward; use the gerund 'studying'. 'By the device says' is ungrammatical; the correct preposition is 'on' and refer to 'those devices'. Suggestions: match subject number, use gerunds for activities ('studying'), and use correct prepositions ('on devices').

× Yes, I think because we don't need to lose things and we can have effort by creating up the room or desk tidy. So it is very essential skills.

✓ Yes, I think so because we don't have to lose things and we can save effort by keeping the room or desk tidy. So, it is a very essential skill.

'Don't need to lose things' is awkward; 'don't have to lose things' or 'won't lose things' is better. 'Can have effort' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'save effort'. 'Creating up the room' is wrong; use 'keeping the room tidy' or 'keeping the desk tidy'. 'So it is very essential skills' has number agreement and article errors: 'skill' should be singular with 'a' or plural 'skills'. Suggestions: use correct modal constructions ('don't have to'), appropriate verbs ('save'), and ensure noun number and article agreement ('an essential skill').