Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は意図は伝わりますが、文法と表現が不自然で冗長です。まず主語と動詞の一致を直し、冗長な語句を減らして一貫した一文で答えを始めましょう。次に、理由を1つだけ明確に述べ、接続詞（because / so / therefore）で関連付けると良いです。また語彙は“keep”や“tidy/clean”を適切に使い、“fundamental”や“physical”の誤用を避けてください。具体的練習点：1) 主語＋動詞の正確な配置、2) 理由の導入にbecause/soを使う、3) 1〜2文で簡潔にまとめること。

Example: Yes, I like to keep my room tidy because a clean space helps me concentrate and feel relaxed. For example, when everything is in order I can find my books quickly and study more efficiently.

Suggestion: 回答は内容が分かりますが、文法ミスと語順の誤りが多いです。過去の習慣を表す“used to”や“would”を使うと自然になります。また“gave me instruction”は“gave me instructions”や“taught me”に直し、最後の部分は“to welcome friends”と表現するのが適切です。具体的練習点：1) 過去の習慣には“used to”を使う、2) 複数形や不定詞の使い方を確認する、3) 2文以内で答える。

Example: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because my mother taught me to clean up regularly. For example, I always put my toys away so the room was ready when friends came over.

Suggestion: 内容が不明瞭で不自然な表現が多いです。“perfectly clean up the surroundings”や“start starting”は不自然なので、“I tidy my desk before I start studying”のようにシンプルに言い換えましょう。また、具体的な方法（organizing books, using folders, throwing away trash）を1〜2点挙げ、接続詞でつなげると良いです。具体的練習点：1) 動詞句をシンプルにする、2) 具体的な整理方法を挙げる、3) 接続詞で情報をつなげる。

Example: I tidy my desk before I start studying, putting books in order and putting papers into folders so everything is easy to find. I also remove any trash and keep a pen holder to avoid clutter.

Suggestion: 意見は明確ですが、文法と語彙の選択が不自然です。“I do be tidy”は誤りで“I try to be tidy”や“I think it’s necessary to be tidy”が適切です。“subsequently”は文脈に合わないため“as a result”や“therefore”に変え、“prevent the damage of bugs”は“prevent pests”や“avoid insect problems”などと表現しましょう。具体的練習点：1) 意見の表現（I think / I believe）を使う、2) 因果を表す自然な接続詞を使う、3) 短く具体的に理由を述べる。

Example: Yes, I think it’s important to be tidy because it helps prevent pests and maintain good hygiene. For instance, throwing away food scraps and cleaning regularly reduces the risk of insects and keeps my home healthy.

× Stay the room clean is fundamental thing to stay my house and physical stay my house.

✓ Keeping the room clean is fundamental for maintaining my house and my physical health.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence structure and word choice. 'Stay the room clean' should be expressed as a gerund phrase 'Keeping the room clean'. 'Fundamental thing to stay my house' is ungrammatical; use 'fundamental for maintaining my house'. 'Physical stay my house' likely intends 'physical health', so replace with 'my physical health'. Suggestion: use gerund 'keeping' + correct preposition 'for' and the noun 'health'.

× My mother gave me I instruction to sort things out and clean up the room.

✓ My mother gave me instructions to sort things out and clean the room.

The original mixes pronouns and has incorrect noun form. 'Gave me I instruction' should be 'gave me instructions'. Use plural 'instructions' if more than one or 'an instruction' for one; also 'clean up the room' can be 'clean the room'. Suggestion: remove the extra pronoun 'I' and use correct plural form.

× So I often did clean up and ioffer welcoming friends.

✓ So I often cleaned up and offered to welcome friends.

The sentence mixes past and present forms incorrectly. 'Often did clean up' is awkward; use simple past 'often cleaned up'. 'ioffer welcoming friends' has a typo and wrong verb form; use 'offered to welcome friends' or 'welcomed friends'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense and correct verb forms.

× I perfectly clean up the surroundings when I start starting.

✓ I thoroughly clean the surroundings when I start working.

The phrase 'perfectly clean up' is unnatural; 'thoroughly clean' is better. 'When I start starting' is redundant and ungrammatical; likely meant 'when I start working' or 'when I start studying'. Suggestion: use 'thoroughly' for adverb and a clear verb like 'start working'.

× I use many kinds of books and instruction papers.

✓ I use many kinds of books and instruction papers.

The original sentence is mostly acceptable but 'instruction papers' is awkward; consider 'instructional papers' or 'instruction sheets'. The preposition use is fine, so only recommended wording change: 'instructional papers' for natural English. Suggestion: replace noun phrase with more idiomatic alternative.

× Yes, I do be tidy, keeps my room so clean.

✓ Yes, I try to be tidy and keep my room very clean.

The original 'I do be tidy' is ungrammatical for expressing habit; use 'I try to be tidy' or 'I am tidy'. 'Keeps my room' incorrectly uses third-person 'keeps' with subject 'I'; use 'keep'. Also 'so clean' is informal; 'very clean' is better. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use appropriate verb for habit.

× Subsequently we can prevent the damage of bugs and other insects and keep my health very good condition.

✓ Subsequently, we can prevent damage from bugs and other insects and keep in very good health.

Problems: 'prevent the damage of bugs' should be 'prevent damage from bugs'. 'Keep my health very good condition' is ungrammatical; use 'keep in very good health' or 'maintain good health'. Suggestion: use 'prevent damage from' and 'maintain good health'.