Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar and clarity: start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and avoid mixed ideas. Be specific about reasons and use linking words. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

Example: Yes, I like to keep my home tidy because it helps me find things quickly when I need them. Also, a clean house creates a pleasant atmosphere and makes me feel relaxed.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer about past habit, correct awkward phrasing, and support with one or two brief specific reasons. Use past simple and linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Example: Not really. I usually left my room messy when I was a child because I spent long hours at school and felt too tired to tidy up. As a result, cleaning was something I did only on weekends.

Suggestion: Be specific about the cleaning routine and remove unclear phrases. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. dust, wipe, organise) and a linking word to show reason. Keep answer concise (2–3 sentences).

Example: I clean my desk and room twice a week: I dust surfaces, wipe the desk, and put papers into folders. This routine prevents clutter and helps me concentrate.

Suggestion: State your opinion clearly and give two clear, specific reasons with correct vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' and avoid vague words like 'dunks'.

Example: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it reduces dust and bacteria, which protects our health. In addition, being organised saves time—for example, you can find documents quickly when you need them.

× Yes, I like to keep thing tidy because it's make me can't find thing easily in Raj Town that I have to go out and it's make me have good vibe in the house.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it makes me able to find things easily in Raj Town when I go out, and it makes me feel good in the house.

The student used singular 'thing' instead of plural 'things' when referring to multiple items. Use 'things' for countable plural nouns. Also corrected related agreement and phrasing: 'it makes me able to find things' and 'it makes me feel good'. Suggestion: use plural for general items and ensure verb agrees with singular subject 'it' -> 'makes'.

× Yes, I like to keep thing tidy because it's make me can't find thing easily in Raj Town that I have to go out and it's make me have good vibe in the house.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it makes me able to find things easily in Raj Town when I go out, and it makes me feel good in the house.

The auxiliary 'it' requires a third person singular verb form 'makes', not 'make'. Also corrected 'can't' misuse and word order by using 'able to find' for clarity. Suggestion: when subject is he/she/it, add -s to the base verb (make -> makes).

× Well, as a shy I think I didn't make my room that tidy because when I go to school early in the morning and back in the evening I just lost all my energy at school.

✓ Well, because I was shy, I think I didn't keep my room very tidy because when I went to school early in the morning and returned in the evening, I had lost all my energy at school.

The phrase 'as a shy' misuses the adjective 'shy' instead of a pronoun phrase; use 'because I was shy'. Also 'make my room tidy' is incorrect collocation; use 'keep my room tidy'. Suggestions: use correct subject 'I' with past tense 'was shy' and appropriate verbs 'keep'/'kept'.

× Well, as a shy I think I didn't make my room that tidy because when I go to school early in the morning and back in the evening I just lost all my energy at school.

✓ Well, because I was shy, I think I didn't keep my room very tidy because when I went to school early in the morning and returned in the evening, I had lost all my energy at school.

The narrative refers to past habits and events, so verbs should be in past tense: 'went' instead of 'go', 'returned' instead of 'back', and 'had lost' or 'lost' to show past state. Suggestion: keep tense consistent in past narratives.

× So when I get home I just leave my body.

✓ So when I got home I would just lie down and rest.

The original 'leave my body' is ungrammatical and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'lie down and rest'. Also tense should match past: 'got home'. Suggestion: use clear verbs for physical actions and maintain past tense.

× For me, I always clean up my workspace or my room like twice a week because umm, the dots in the air will fall in on things like.

✓ For me, I always clean up my workspace or my room about twice a week because dust in the air settles on things.

The student wrote 'the dots in the air will fall in on things' which is incorrect noun/verb choice and awkward '-ing' usage. 'Dust' is the correct noun and 'settles' (present simple) describes habitual action. Suggestion: use appropriate nouns and present simple for routines; avoid unnecessary -ing forms unless needed.

× For me, I always clean up my workspace or my room like twice a week because umm, the dots in the air will fall in on things like.

✓ For me, I always clean up my workspace or my room about twice a week because dust in the air settles on things.

The phrase 'fall in on' is an incorrect preposition combination here. Use 'settle on' to describe particles landing on surfaces. Suggestion: learn common verb+preposition collocations (settle on, fall on, land on).

× I think tidy is essential because it impacts too good health.

✓ I think being tidy is essential because it affects good health.

Missing gerund/article: use 'being tidy' or 'tidiness' rather than 'tidy' alone. Also corrected 'impacts too good health' which is ungrammatical; use 'affects good health'. Suggestion: use gerund forms to turn adjectives into nouns when needed.

× Good health if umm our room doesn't have dunks and also it's save our times like we can find thing easily when we need it and.

✓ Good health follows if our room doesn't have junk, and it also saves us time because we can find things easily when we need them.

The original sentence misuses 'if' and connectors and has vocabulary errors ('dunks' -> 'junk'). Corrected conjunction structure: 'if... and' with parallel clauses. Also corrected verb forms: 'saves' (third person singular) and plural 'things'/'them'. Suggestion: link clauses clearly and maintain subject-verb agreement.