Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 整体表达较清楚，观点明确，但存在语法错误、用词不当和冗余。建议：1) 修正语法和搭配，例如 avoid to do → avoid doing；services → surface(s) 或 rooms；2) 精简句子，最多5句并使用连接词（for example, however, so）使逻辑更连贯；3) 使用更恰当词汇（tidy, organised, clutter）并给出具体例子（桌面、书架）。

Example: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. I prefer to keep my desk and bookshelf organised so I can find items quickly. For example, I store stationery in a drawer and arrange books by subject. However, I don't use rigid systems because flexibility helps me work more comfortably.

Suggestion: 回答展示了背景和习惯，但表达含糊且有重复、语法和用词错误。建议：1) 开门见山给出主题句（Yes, I did.）后用一到两句具体说明原因和做法；2) 避免重复和填充词（you know, umm）；3) 修正搭配和语法（appropriate position；become → became/has become）。可加入具体细节（每天整理床铺、收玩具）。

Example: Yes, I did. My parents made tidying a daily routine, so I always made my bed and put toys in boxes after playing. Because of that training, keeping my room neat became a habit that stayed with me.

× I like to keep things in a slightly tidy way, but I avoid to put everything in a rigid structure.

✓ I like to keep things slightly tidy, but I avoid putting everything in a rigid structure.

动词短语 'avoid' 后应接动名词（verb + -ing），不能接不定式 'to put'。此外，'in a slightly tidy way' 更自然的表达是 'slightly tidy' 或 'keep things slightly tidy'。建议把 'avoid to put' 改为 'avoid putting'，并简化措辞以更符合英语习惯。

× but at the same time I also make sure my services is clean and not in a mess.

✓ but at the same time I also make sure my space is clean and not a mess.

原句中的 'services is' 主谓不一致且用词不当。'services' 意思是服务，不适合此处。应使用可数名词 'space' 或 'room'，并与单数动词 'is' 一致。此外 'not in a mess' 常用的表达是 'not a mess'。建议将 'my services' 改为 'my space' 或 'my room'，并调整为 'is clean and not a mess'。

× Did you use to keep your room tidy as a child?

✓ Did you use to keep your room tidy when you were a child?

提问时用过去习惯 'use to' 可以，但更自然的结构是 'Did you use to...' 或者使用 'when you were a child' 来明确时间。原句 'as a child' 可接受但与 'Did you use to' 连用时略显生硬，建议改为 'when you were a child' 以使时态和时间状语搭配更清楚。

× Yes, I did, you know, it's like a ritual, uh, in my family because my parents usually told me that you should put your things, umm, in a, in a appropriate situation, uh, inappropriate position that you that make your room looks very tidy.

✓ Yes, I did. It was like a ritual in my family because my parents usually told me that you should put your things in appropriate places so that your room looks very tidy.

原句结构混乱，有冗余填词（uh, umm）、重复（'in a, in a'）、词性和搭配错误：'a appropriate' 应为 'an appropriate'（但这里更自然用复数 'appropriate places'），'inappropriate position' 与上下文相反且句子不通；'that you that make your room looks' 出现多余的 'that'，且动词搭配错误（应为 'make your room look' 而不是 'looks'）。建议去掉口语填充，重组句子为更清晰的从句结构，使用 'so that your room looks' 或 'to make your room look'。

× So. That generally become a habit for me.

✓ So that generally became a habit for me.

这里描述过去形成的习惯，应使用过去时 'became' 而不是现在时 'become'。此外句首的 'So.' 不完整，合并为一完整句更自然：'So that generally became a habit for me.' 建议使用过去时谈论过去的习惯。