Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting points using linking words. Avoid repetition and non-native phrasing (e.g. "mood will automatically get down"). Use varied vocabulary and correct collocations (e.g. "tidy room", "well-organized"). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy keeping things tidy because a well-organized room helps me feel calm and focused. For example, when my desk is clear and everything has a place, I can concentrate better and feel less stressed. Therefore, I try to tidy up for a few minutes every day.

Suggestion: Organize your response: give a direct topic sentence about past habit, then provide 1–2 specific examples and a brief reason or contrast. Fix grammar issues (e.g. "I was a very naughty child", "I used to throw things around"). Avoid repeating the same idea several times.

Example: No, I wasn't very tidy as a child. My mother usually had to tidy my room because I often threw toys around and never put them back on the shelf. Looking back, I think I was more interested in playing than cleaning up.

× Yes, I like to keep things tidy because they uplift our mood.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it uplifts our mood.

The subject 'things' is plural but 'mood' is singular; the intended meaning is that keeping things tidy uplifts 'our mood' (singular). Use the singular pronoun 'it' to refer to the action/concept of keeping things tidy, and use the third-person singular verb 'uplifts' to agree with 'it'. Suggestion: Replace 'they uplift' with 'it uplifts' to match subject-verb agreement.

× For example, if we are in a very messy room in which all the things are here and there, nothing is placed in any sequence or mood will automatically get down.

✓ For example, if we are in a very messy room where everything is scattered and nothing is in order, our mood will automatically go down.

Original sentence has awkward structure and missing prepositions/articles. 'In which' is formal and unnecessary; 'here and there' is informal—'scattered' is clearer. 'Nothing is placed in any sequence' is unidiomatic; use 'nothing is in order'. 'Mood will automatically get down' is incorrect collocation; use 'our mood will automatically go down' (subject 'our mood' requires 'go down'). Suggestion: Use clear clauses: 'where everything is scattered' and 'our mood will go down'.

× But on contrary, if we visit to a room which is such a beautifully decorated, everything is placed at a right spot or our mood will uplift quickly.

✓ But on the contrary, if we visit a room that is beautifully decorated and everything is placed in the right spot, our mood will improve quickly.

Errors: missing article 'the' in 'on the contrary'; incorrect verb 'visit to' should be 'visit'; 'which is such a beautifully decorated' is ungrammatical—use 'that is beautifully decorated' or 'a beautifully decorated room'; 'at a right spot' should be 'in the right spot'; 'mood will uplift' is non-native—use 'our mood will improve' or 'our mood will lift'. Also use 'and' not 'or' to connect clauses. Suggestion: Use correct articles and conjunctions and natural collocations like 'in the right spot' and 'mood will improve'.

× As a child I never kept my room tidy instead my mom used to place the things back at their spot.

✓ As a child I never kept my room tidy; instead my mom used to put things back in their spots.

'Place the things back at their spot' is awkward; 'put things back in their spots' is natural. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join clauses. Tense 'used to' is appropriate for habitual past. Suggestion: Replace 'place' with 'put', 'at their spot' with 'in their spots', and separate clauses for clarity.

× I was very naughty kid in my childhood.

✓ I was a very naughty kid in my childhood.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'very naughty kid'. Also 'in my childhood' is redundant with 'as a child' but acceptable; consider using one phrase. Suggestion: Add 'a' and consider simplifying to 'I was a very naughty child'.

× I used so I used to throw things here and there.

✓ I used to throw things here and there.

Redundant fragment 'so I used' repeats 'used'. Remove the extra words. 'Used to' correctly expresses habitual past. Suggestion: Keep only one 'used to'.

× I never put back my toys in the shelves.

✓ I never put my toys back on the shelves.

Preposition and article errors: 'in the shelves' is incorrect for placing items on shelves; use 'on the shelves'. Also word order 'put my toys back' is more natural than 'put back my toys'. Suggestion: Use 'put my toys back on the shelves'.

× So yes I was very untidy child in my childhood.

✓ So yes, I was a very untidy child in my childhood.

Missing article 'a' before 'very untidy child'. Also redundant 'in my childhood'. Add a comma after 'So yes'. Suggestion: Use 'a' and consider simplifying to 'So yes, I was very untidy as a child'.