Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng sai và câu hơi dài lủng củng. Cụ thể: từ “ringing” không phù hợp (có thể bạn muốn nói “arranging” hoặc “cleaning”), cấu trúc “as soon as possible when I need” nên sửa thành “when I need them” hoặc “quickly when I need them”, và cụm “make the our my environment tidy” bị sai từ và thứ tự từ. Nên chia câu dài thành 2 câu ngắn, dùng từ chính xác và thêm một liên từ để mạch lạc (ví dụ: “so” hoặc “therefore”).

Example: Yes, I do. I really enjoy arranging my things so they look neat. This helps me find items quickly when I need them, so my surroundings stay tidy.

Suggestion: Ý trả lời rõ nhưng có lỗi về thì, từ và cấu trúc. Cần dùng đúng thì quá khứ khi nói về thói quen đã có (ví dụ: “I developed a routine” hoặc “I used to organize”), sửa “so easier” thành “more easily”, và dùng từ chỉ tần suất chính xác (“sometimes” thay vì “sometime”). Hãy giữ tối đa 3-4 câu, mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề và tiếp theo là chi tiết hỗ trợ với liên từ phù hợp (because/so/therefore).

Example: Yes, I did. My parents taught me to keep my belongings tidy so I could find them more easily. I also developed a routine of organizing my room every weekend and sometimes tidying up a little each day.

× Yes I do, I really enjoy ringing things to make them tidy.

✓ Yes, I do. I really enjoy arranging things to make them tidy.

'Ringing' is incorrect here; the intended verb is 'arranging' (sắp xếp). Use 'arranging' to mean putting things in order. Also add a comma after 'Yes' and separate into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: replace 'ringing' with 'arranging' and punctuate: 'Yes, I do. I really enjoy arranging things to make them tidy.'

× As a result I can find them as soon as possible when I need and so make the our my environment tidy.

✓ As a result, I can find them as soon as possible when I need them, and so make my environment tidy.

Problems: missing comma after introductory phrase; missing object 'them' after 'need'; extra word 'our' should be removed; word order corrected to 'make my environment tidy'. Suggestion: add commas and the missing pronoun: 'As a result, I can find them as soon as possible when I need them, and so make my environment tidy.'

× Yes, I used to. My parents always taught me to keep my things tidy so I could find them more quickly and so easier.

✓ Yes, I used to. My parents always taught me to keep my things tidy so I could find them more quickly and more easily.

Use 'more easily' not 'so easier'. 'Easier' is comparative adjective; adverb form 'easily' is needed and 'more' makes the comparison. Suggestion: replace 'so easier' with 'more easily' and keep past tense 'could'.

× And I develop a routine of organizing my room every weekend and sometime every day.

✓ And I developed a routine of organizing my room every weekend and sometimes every day.

Context refers to past habit, so use past tense 'developed' or 'used to develop'. 'Sometime' is incorrect; adverb 'sometimes' is needed. Suggestion: use 'developed' and 'sometimes': 'And I developed a routine of organizing my room every weekend and sometimes every day.'