Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện cụ thể: Giảm tiếng ngập ngừng (umm, uh), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và mạch lạc, sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ "TI a tidy thing" không đúng), giới hạn câu trả lời tối đa 4-5 câu. Thêm liên từ để nối ý (because, so, therefore) và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: sạch gọn giúp tìm đồ nhanh, tạo ấn tượng chuyên nghiệp).

Example: Yes, I do. I find keeping things tidy very helpful because it makes my room look neat and reduces stress. For example, when everything has its place I can find items quickly, which saves time. Therefore, a tidy environment also creates a good impression on guests.

Suggestion: Cải thiện cụ thể: Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes/No), tránh lặp từ và sửa cấu trúc (ví dụ "I don't really care to really care" sai), dùng từ vựng chính xác (untidy, messy, disorganized) và cung cấp lý do hoặc ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, so) và giữ độ dài hợp lí (2-4 câu).

Example: No, I didn't. When I was a child my room was quite messy because I was more interested in playing than tidying up. For instance, toys and clothes were often scattered on the floor, so my parents had to tidy it for me.

× Yes, definitely umm, personally, I think TI a tidy uh thing is really beneficial for me because it's really light and uh look appealing.

✓ Yes, definitely. Personally, I think keeping things tidy is really beneficial for me because it makes me feel lighter and look more appealing.

The sentence misuses nouns and verbs: 'TI a tidy uh thing' is unclear; 'look appealing' is incorrect because 'look' needs to be part of a verb phrase 'makes me look'. Replace incorrect fragments with 'keeping things tidy' (gerund phrase) and use 'makes me feel lighter and look more appealing' to link cause and effect. Suggestion: use gerund after 'think' to express general preference and use 'make' + object + adjective to describe resulting appearance.

× I mean umm, tiny thing can uh uh bring the first impression for others when they pay it.

✓ I mean, tiny things can create the first impression for others when they see them.

The original uses singular 'tiny thing' but talks about general cases, so plural 'tiny things' is needed. Also 'bring the first impression' is unnatural; use 'create the first impression' and 'when they see them' rather than 'pay it'. Suggestion: use plural when referring to things in general and choose collocations like 'create an impression' and 'see them'.

× MMM, I would say no because umm, I recognize myself as a person who uh, is really nonchalant and actually I don't really care to really care about my room.

✓ Um, I would say no because I see myself as a very nonchalant person and I don't really care much about my room.

'recognize myself' is awkward in present context; use 'see myself'. Redundant 'don't really care to really care' should be simplified to 'don't really care much'. Also adjust word order to 'see myself as a very nonchalant person' for natural English. Suggestion: avoid repetition and choose natural verbs for self-perception.

× So, umm, I actually when I was younger, my room is quite like disturbed.

✓ So, when I was younger, my room was quite messy.

The sentence describes a past state, so the verb should be in past tense 'was' not 'is'. 'Quite like disturbed' is ungrammatical and unclear; use 'quite messy' or 'quite untidy'. Suggestion: match tense to time expression 'when I was younger' and use appropriate adjectives like 'messy'.