Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct noun/verb forms and article use, and avoid repetition. For example, say you are not very organized, then give concrete examples and a brief reason or result.

Example: To be honest, I'm not very tidy, especially in my bedroom. For example, I often leave a water bottle and my laptop on the bed, so it looks cluttered and I can't sleep comfortably.

Suggestion: Answer directly about the past with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Fix grammar (use past tense, correct articles, remove repetitions) and use linking words like 'when' or 'because' to show reason. Mention a concrete example of what your mother did or said.

Example: No, I wasn't very tidy as a child. For instance, I often left toys and clothes on the floor, and my mother would frequently remind me to clean up because she wanted the house to look neat.

× I have to admit that I'm not that organized person so I don't think I keep the things tidy especially my bedroom.

✓ I have to admit that I'm not a very organized person, so I don't think I keep things tidy, especially my bedroom.

Use of adjective needs an article and modifier: 'not that organized person' is incorrect; use 'not a very organized person'. 'the things tidy' is incorrect—use 'things tidy' without 'the'. Also add commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× Many thing on my bed like my water like bottle of water and also sometime my PC always on my bed.

✓ Many things are on my bed, like my water bottle, and sometimes my PC is also on my bed.

Count noun agreement: 'Many thing' should be 'Many things'. Verb 'are' is needed to link plural subject to location. 'like my water like bottle of water' is redundant; use 'my water bottle'. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Also include 'is' for 'my PC is also on my bed'.

× I have to admit that I am not a organized person and my my things are messy in my room.

✓ I have to admit that I am not an organized person and my things were messy in my room.

Article use: before vowel sound 'an organized'. Also tense consistency: question asked about childhood ('Did you use to keep your room tidy as a child?'), so describe past state using past tense 'were messy'. Remove duplicate 'my'.

× This is the one problem that I face in my childhood because my mom always annoying about this and she told me every time like to keep your room tidy.

✓ This was a problem I faced in my childhood because my mom was always annoyed about it and she told me all the time to keep my room tidy.

Tense: use past tense 'was' and 'faced' for childhood. 'always annoying' is incorrect; use 'was always annoyed' (adjective) or 'was always annoyed with me'. 'about this' -> 'about it'. 'she told me every time like to keep your room tidy' is ungrammatical; correct to 'she told me all the time to keep my room tidy'. Also adjust pronoun 'my' for consistency.