Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix pronoun/number errors, and use a linking phrase before the reason. Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g. ‘organized’). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences and give a specific brief example to support the reason.

Example: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it makes it much easier to find things. For example, when my desk is organized I can grab documents quickly and work more efficiently. Also, a tidy room is quicker to clean, which saves me time.

Suggestion: Improve past-tense consistency and clarity. Begin with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add a specific supporting detail. Use correct past tense for habits (e.g. ‘I used to try’ or ‘I would try’) and correct noun forms (pillows). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include a linking word.

Example: No, I didn't have my own room as a child, because I shared with my mother. However, I used to keep our space tidy by folding the blankets and arranging the pillows by size, so the room always looked neat.

× I enjoy keeping things tidy because it helps me to see when I'm looking for things and also because it's a place easier to clean when everything's are tidy.

✓ I enjoy keeping things tidy because it helps me find things and also because it's easier to clean when everything is tidy.

Errors: 'helps me to see when I'm looking for things' is wordy and unnatural; use 'helps me find things' (concise verb phrase). 'it's a place easier to clean' is incorrect word order and article use; 'it's easier to clean' is correct. 'everything's are tidy' has incorrect contraction plus plural verb: 'everything' is singular and takes 'is', not 'are', and avoid contraction plus auxiliary; use 'everything is tidy'. Suggestion: simplify the phrase and ensure subject-verb agreement by using 'everything is' and place adjectives/adverbs in correct order ('easier to clean').

× I didn't have my own room when I was a child. I shared the bedroom with my mother, but I try to keep it tidy by folding the blankets and arranging the pillow in the order of the size.

✓ I didn't have my own room when I was a child. I shared the bedroom with my mother, but I tried to keep it tidy by folding the blankets and arranging the pillows in size order.

Error: tense inconsistency. The speaker describes past habits, so 'I try' should be 'I tried' (past). Number agreement: 'the pillow' should be plural 'pillows' if arranging more than one; use 'pillows' to match 'blankets'. Word order and phrasing: 'in the order of the size' is awkward; use 'in size order'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when speaking about childhood and match noun number and natural adjective order.