Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar (e.g., "around four years old" is redundant; say "when I was four").

Example: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. When I was four, my mother would walk me there and I often spent an hour playing with neighbourhood children. Because the park had swings and a sandbox, I was always excited to go.

Suggestion: Use a clear topic sentence and smoother phrasing; include linking words and one specific example to enrich the answer. Fix small grammar: say "a park near my home" and "take a book with me."

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I find them relaxing on nice days. For example, I often take a book with me to a park near my home and sit on a bench to read for an hour, which helps me unwind.

Suggestion: Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases (e.g., "Hey everyone Movy Night"); begin with a direct topic sentence and give specific reasons and linking words. Correct wording: "explore more parks," "particularly those with temples."

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, particularly those with temples nearby. These parks combine quiet green space with cultural interest, so I would visit them to relax and to learn about local traditions.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and correct grammar ("I have never been to it," "I've heard"); give a specific plan or time frame and a reason why you want to visit to make the answer more concrete.

Example: Yes, I want to visit a park near Horocho that I have never been to. I've heard it is very beautiful and contains a famous temple, so I plan to go there next month to take photos and explore the temple grounds.

× Yes, I loved it. I remember when I was four around four years old, my mum would always walk me to the park and I would spend one hour there, find some friend and play with them.

✓ Yes, I loved it. I remember when I was around four years old, my mum would always walk me to the park and I would spend an hour there, find some friends and play with them.

Problems: redundancy and count agreement. 'when I was four around four years old' is redundant; use 'around four years old' or 'when I was four'. 'one hour' is grammatical but 'an hour' is more natural because 'hour' begins with a vowel sound. 'find some friend' is singular while 'them' is plural; change to 'find some friends' for number agreement. Suggestion: remove redundant phrase, use 'an hour', and make 'friends' plural to match 'them'.

× Then we would come back to home.

✓ Then we would come back home.

Use of preposition 'to' with 'home' is usually unnecessary in English. Correct form is 'come back home' or 'come home'. Suggestion: omit 'to' before 'home'.

× I believe it's relaxing to spend some time in park if the weather is nice.

✓ I believe it's relaxing to spend some time in the park if the weather is nice.

Countable singular noun 'park' requires an article. Use 'the park' when speaking generally about a nearby or typical park, or 'a park' for any park. Here 'the park' fits the context. Suggestion: add appropriate article.

× Sometimes I take a book with myself and I go to a park that is near my home and try to chill there

✓ Sometimes I take a book with me and go to a park near my home and try to relax there.

'with myself' is incorrect; use 'with me'. 'that is near my home' is grammatical but can be shortened to 'near my home'. 'try to chill' is informal; 'try to relax' is more natural in speaking tests. Suggestion: replace 'with myself' with 'with me' and prefer 'relax'.

× Hey everyone Movy Night if I have time I think I would like to explore my more parks around the city, especially the ones that have a temple near them.

✓ If I have time, I think I would like to explore more parks around the city, especially those that have a temple nearby.

Sentence contains extraneous words 'Hey everyone Movy Night' which do not fit the context. 'my more parks' is incorrect word order and possessive; use 'more parks'. 'the ones that have a temple near them' is wordy; 'those that have a temple nearby' is clearer. Suggestion: remove irrelevant phrase, fix word order, and use concise phrasing.

× Yes, there is a park near Horocho that I never been to and I hear it's really beautiful because there's also a temple, a very famous temple.

✓ Yes, there is a park near Horocho that I have never been to, and I hear it's really beautiful because there's also a very famous temple.

Missing auxiliary for present perfect: 'I never been to' should be 'I have never been to'. Also word order: 'a very famous temple' is more natural than repeating 'a temple, a very famous temple'. Suggestion: use present perfect 'have never been' and streamline the noun phrase.

× So I plan to go there in some day.

✓ So I plan to go there someday.

'in some day' is not idiomatic. 'Someday' (one word) is used to mean at some unspecified time in the future. Alternatively, 'one day' is acceptable. Suggestion: use 'someday' or 'one day'.