Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer directly in the past tense because the question refers to your childhood. Correct the verb forms and nouns: say “I often went,” “many things,” and “friends.” Also, use a natural activity such as “play hide-and-seek,” and connect your supporting detail with “because” or “for example.”

Example: Yes, I really enjoyed going to parks when I was a child. I often went there with my father because there were many fun things to do. For example, I played hide-and-seek with my friends and sometimes rode my bicycle.

Suggestion: State your main idea clearly and avoid translating phrases directly from your first language. Use “a park” or “parks,” and replace “increase pressure” with “relieve stress.” Explain what you do there, such as walking or relaxing, to make the answer more specific.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they give me a peaceful place to relax. I usually take a walk or sit on a bench and listen to music. As a result, I feel more comfortable and can relieve the stress of daily life.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion and support it with a logical reason. Your original answer is difficult to understand because of incorrect grammar and unclear vocabulary, especially “limits back,” “private privacy,” and “little someplace.” If you mean that your city lacks private spaces, explain that directly; otherwise, say that more parks would benefit residents.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. There are not many green spaces, so people often have to travel far to relax or exercise. More parks would give families a place to spend time together and make the city more pleasant.

Suggestion: Your main idea is understandable, but the grammar and word choice need improvement. Say “the park near my house” rather than “my park is little leaves my house,” and use “childhood memories” instead of “memory in my mind in my childhood.” You can also explain why you want to return there and use “because” to connect the reason naturally.

Example: Yes, I would like to return to the small park near my house. I spent a lot of time there during my childhood, so it has many happy memories for me. I would like to visit it again and see whether it has changed.

× Yes, of course, when I was trying I often goes back with my father because I can do many thing in this part.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, I often went to parks with my father because I could do many things there.

Because the question refers to your childhood, use the past tense went instead of goes and the past modal could instead of can. Many must be followed by a plural countable noun, so thing becomes things. Use went to parks when describing movement to a place, and use there instead of in this part to refer to the parks.

× Firstly I can play handsick with other friend.

✓ Firstly, I could play handball with other friends.

Since you are describing a past experience, use could instead of can. The noun friend should be plural because you are referring to more than one person, so use other friends. Handball is the standard English word for the sport you probably mean.

× Yes gosh, now I go to park to have a peaceful place where have make me feel comfortable and I can increase pressure in my in the back.

✓ Yes, definitely. Now I go to the park to find a peaceful place where I can feel comfortable and reduce the pressure in my mind.

Use the definite article the before park when referring to a specific park. The clause where have make me feel comfortable is not correctly structured; use where I can feel comfortable. Use in my mind, not in my in the back. The phrase reduce the pressure is grammatically and logically appropriate here.

× No, I think in the future it's better is my city have the limits back because we are little someplace to have a private privacy but we didn't get other place to do anything.

✓ No, I think that in the future it will be better if my city has limited parks because we have little space for privacy, but we do not have any other places to go.

The original sentence needs a clear conditional structure: it will be better if my city has. Use the present tense have and do not have because you are describing the current situation. Use space, not someplace, with little in this meaning. Privacy is an uncountable noun, so do not use the article a before it. Use any other places because the sentence is negative and refers to more than one possible place.

× MMM no I think I don't go any park because I only like my park is little leaves my house and because it has a lot of memory in my mind in my childhood.

✓ No, I do not think I will go to any park because the only park I like is a little far from my house, and it holds many memories from my childhood.

Because the question asks about the future, use will go instead of do not go. Use go to any park because the preposition to is required after go when indicating a destination. The phrase the only park I like creates a correct sentence structure. Memories should be plural because you are referring to several experiences, and from my childhood is the appropriate prepositional phrase.