Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Focus on correct grammar (past tense, subject-verb agreement), concise sentences, and clearer details. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and vague phrases like “etcetera” and “their attachment.”

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often went with my family and we played football and had picnics, which helped me make friends with other children.

Suggestion: Use present tense correctly and reduce hesitations. Give one clear reason first (e.g., relaxation), then another supporting detail (e.g., exercise, socializing) with a linking word. Fix pronouns and verb forms (I go, people).

Example: Yes, I still like going to parks because they help me relax after a busy day. In addition, I enjoy exercising there and meeting friends, which improves my mood and social life.

Suggestion: Clarify your main point and use accurate vocabulary. Replace unclear phrases (e.g., "I ceased to more park") with a clear opinion. Provide a concise reason and an example, using linking words. Avoid repetition like “busy in their busy schedule” and “collect pictures to collect their memory.”

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many people are very busy and need accessible places to relax. For example, more small neighborhood parks would allow families to spend time outdoors and take photos together.

Suggestion: Use future tense correctly and be more specific about what you want to do there. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park, then give two specific reasons (e.g., flowers, events, photography) linked logically. Fix grammar (I will go, I feel relaxed).

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the Chandigarh Rose Garden in the future. I want to go there with my family because I love the wide variety of roses and it would be a great place to take photos and relax together.

× When I was a child, I like going to parks with my family because I playing some activities such as football etcetera and I meet some new peoples to their attachment.

✓ When I was a child, I liked going to parks with my family because I played some activities such as football, and I met new people there.

The sentence refers to past habit (when I was a child) so verbs should be in past tense (liked, played, met). 'Peoples' is incorrect plural form; use 'people'. 'to their attachment' is unclear; likely meant 'there' to indicate location. Use commas and conjunctions for clarity. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and correct plural nouns and prepositions. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Well, I think I still like going to parks now because, uh, I going to park to feel relaxed and playing some activities to feel relax our mind and meet some other peoples to, uh, gain always about my, uh, personal life.

✓ Well, I think I still like going to parks now because I go to parks to feel relaxed, play some activities to calm my mind, and meet other people to learn about my personal life.

The sentence mixes present simple and gerunds incorrectly. For habitual present actions use present simple (I go, I play, I meet). 'Playing some activities' should be 'play activities'. 'Feel relax our mind' is ungrammatical; use 'calm my mind' or 'relax my mind'. 'Peoples' is incorrect; use 'people'. 'Gain always about my personal life' is unclear; likely 'learn about'. Suggestion: use present simple for routines, correct verb forms and pronouns. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, in my opinion I ceased to more park in my city because in two day era mostly people are busy in their busy schedule and I think they go there park with family and friends to enjoy their activities and collect some pictures to collect their memory.

✓ Yes, in my opinion we need more parks in my city because nowadays most people are busy with their schedules, and I think they would go to parks with family and friends to enjoy activities and take pictures to keep memories.

Multiple issues: 'ceased to more park' is incorrect—likely meant 'need more parks' (verb choice). 'In two day era' is incorrect expression; use 'nowadays'. 'Mostly people are busy in their busy schedule' should be 'most people are busy with their schedules'. 'Go there park' should be 'go to parks'. 'Collect some pictures to collect their memory' should be 'take pictures to keep memories'. Also tense/modal: use present simple/modal would for hypothetical. Suggestion: choose correct verbs and prepositions, use 'most' not 'mostly' before noun, and use 'take pictures' not 'collect'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Well there are various types of a park but my favorite park is a Chandigarh Rose Garden. In future I going to this park with my family and friends to see some new things and click some pictures together and I feel a very relaxing to going this park with my family.

✓ Well, there are various types of parks, but my favorite is the Chandigarh Rose Garden. In the future I will go to this park with my family and friends to see new things and take pictures together, and I will feel very relaxed going to this park with my family.

Problems: 'types of a park' should be 'types of parks' (singular/plural). 'In future I going to this park' requires future tense 'I will go'. 'Click some pictures' is informal; 'take pictures' is better. 'I feel a very relaxing to going this park' is ungrammatical; use 'I will feel very relaxed going to this park'. Also use definite article 'the Chandigarh Rose Garden'. Suggestion: correct pluralization, use future simple for planned future, proper verb forms and adjective/adverb choices. Grammar problem type ID: 1