Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant with good details, but a few issues lower the score: some word choice errors ("picnic sports" should be "picnic spots"), slight redundancy, and a minor overlong first sentence. Improve by using precise vocabulary, avoiding repetition, and linking sentences smoothly.

Example: I loved visiting parks with my parents because they had many attractions, such as play areas and picnic spots. In particular, I enjoyed the zoo section; I was fascinated by animals like monkeys and giraffes, which made the park my favorite place.

Suggestion: This response is natural, coherent and gives a clear contrast between past and present. To improve further, tighten phrasing, correct minor grammar ("remind us about my childhood" -> "reminisce about my childhood"), and use a linking phrase to show contrast more smoothly.

Example: I don't go to parks as much now, although I occasionally visit with my parents to reminisce about my childhood. For example, we enjoy seeing how the playground has been renovated and how the trees have grown, which makes those visits meaningful.

Suggestion: Content is relevant but marred by hesitations, grammar errors and repetition. Improve by removing filler words (uh, umm), using correct conditional and article forms, and adding one specific reason or example to support the point.

Example: Yes, I would welcome more parks in my hometown because they improve urban life and provide recreational space. For instance, new parks could offer playgrounds, walking paths and cultural events that attract both residents and tourists.

Suggestion: Answer is understandable but contains many problems: grammar mistakes, repetition, unclear reference ("Sam"), and filler words. To improve, be specific about which parks you mean, remove fillers, use correct comparative language, and give one concrete reason for visiting.

Example: I'd like to visit famous parks abroad, such as Central Park in New York City, because it contrasts greatly with parks in my hometown. For example, I want to see its vast lawns, winding paths and cultural events to compare how public spaces are designed in different countries.

× As a child, I loved visiting parks with my parents because they had so many attractions like play areas and picnic sports.

✓ As a child, I loved visiting parks with my parents because they had so many attractions like play areas and picnic spots.

The word 'sports' is incorrect here; the intended noun is 'spots' (places). This is a vocabulary choice error related to quantifiers/word use. Replace 'picnic sports' with 'picnic spots' to convey 'areas for picnicking.' Suggestion: use precise nouns that match context.

× What I enjoyed most was going to the zoo section.

✓ What I enjoyed most was going to the zoo section.

This sentence is grammatically correct; however if referring to a specific zoo area 'the zoo section' is correct. No change needed.

× I was fascinated by the different animals, especially the monkeys and giraffes, and it was my favorite place.

✓ I was fascinated by the different animals, especially the monkeys and giraffes; it was my favorite place.

Pronoun use 'it' refers back to 'going to the zoo section' and is acceptable. The original sentence is acceptable but punctuation improves clarity. No pronoun correction required.

× I don't really enjoy going to parks nowadays, but I sometimes visit them with my parents to remind us about my childhood.

✓ I don't really enjoy going to parks nowadays, but I sometimes visit them with my parents to remind myself of my childhood.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used because the subject 'I' is the one being reminded; 'us' incorrectly includes others. Also 'remind of' is the correct prepositional structure, so change 'remind us about my childhood' to 'remind myself of my childhood.' Suggestion: use reflexive pronouns when the subject and object are the same.

× For example, we like to look at how the playground has been renovated or how the trees have grown, which makes the visits meaningful.

✓ For example, we like to look at how the playground has been renovated or how the trees have grown, which makes the visits meaningful.

This sentence is correct: present simple 'like' with present perfect 'has been renovated' is appropriate to describe completed changes with present relevance. No correction needed.

× I would be happy if I see more parks in my hometown because it's very essential for me as I loved uh, going to parks in my childhood.

✓ I would be happy if I saw more parks in my hometown because it's very important to me; I loved going to parks in my childhood.

In conditional 'I would be happy if I saw...' the past simple 'saw' is required (second conditional) not 'see.' Also 'essential for me' is unnatural; use 'important to me.' Remove filler words 'uh' and correct 'in my childhood' to 'when I was a child' or keep as 'in my childhood.' Suggestion: use correct conditional forms and natural collocations.

× Because it's very good opportunity to improve my city and umm, attract a lot of new tourists and locals.

✓ Because it's a very good opportunity to improve my city and attract many new tourists and locals.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'very good opportunity.' 'Umm' is filler and should be removed. Use 'many' rather than 'a lot of' for conciseness. Suggestion: include articles before singular countable nouns and avoid fillers.

× I want to go to park in foreign countries, for example, New York City, because there are different, there are big difference between my hometown park and there, and I would like to look at, uh, changes between my country and Sam.

✓ I want to go to parks in foreign countries, for example New York City, because there are big differences between my hometown parks and those there, and I would like to see the differences between my country and others.

Multiple errors: 'go to park' needs plural or 'a park' and an article; 'in foreign countries' is fine but 'parks' fits better. 'There are different, there are big difference' is ungrammatical — use 'there are big differences' (plural) and remove repetition. 'Between my hometown park and there' is incorrect; use 'between my hometown parks and those there.' 'Look at changes' should be 'see the differences' or 'see the changes.' Also remove filler 'uh' and unclear 'Sam' which seems wrong. Suggestion: use correct plural forms, matching nouns and demonstratives, and clear referents.