Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and preposition errors (e.g., “in my childhood” -> “when I was a child”; “hang out” -> “hung out”). Avoid redundant phrases like “the interesting thing is.”

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. For example, I lived next to a park, so my family and I often hung out there in the evenings, playing games and having picnics.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and reduce hesitation. Use correct comparative structure and verb forms (e.g., “rather than” is incorrect here; use “compared to” or “than before”; “love to hanging out” -> “still enjoy hanging out”). Add a brief reason to support your statement with a linking word such as “because” or “although.”

Example: I still enjoy going to parks, although I visit them less often than I did before because I am busier now. When I do go, I like walking and relaxing in the fresh air.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid contradictory phrasing in one sentence. Choose one clear stance or present both views with clear linking words (e.g., “On one hand… On the other hand…”). Correct grammar and use specific reasons. Replace vague phrases like “not so big as other another towns” with concise comparisons.

Example: On one hand, more parks would be nice for recreation and greenery. On the other hand, our town is quite small and already has enough open spaces, so I don't think we need many additional parks.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid filler phrases like “to be honest.” Use correct sentence structure (remove extra “it” after “visit”) and improve descriptions with more precise vocabulary and comparisons. Give a specific reason why you want to visit and a linking word to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Astana Central Park in the future because it is very large — almost like a small village — and I want to explore its lakes and gardens.

× The interesting thing is in my childhood I used to live near the park and always in the evenings we hang out with my family.

✓ The interesting thing is that in my childhood I used to live near the park, and in the evenings we would always hang out with my family.

The sentence mixes time references and verb forms. 'In my childhood' sets a past context, so 'hang out' should be past habitual 'would hang out' or 'used to hang out'. Also add conjunction 'that' after 'The interesting thing is' for clarity and place adverbial 'in the evenings' before the verb phrase. Suggestion: use consistent past habitual form and include 'that' to introduce the clause. Grammar problem type ID:6

× That's quite interesting question because now I rarely go to the parks, uh, rather than I used to, but I think I still love to hanging out there.

✓ That's quite an interesting question because now I rarely go to the parks, rather than I used to, but I think I still love hanging out there.

Several issues: 'interesting question' needs an article 'an'. 'Rather than I used to' is awkward; better 'than I used to'. 'Love to hanging' is incorrect: after 'love' use the base verb 'to' plus infinitive ('love to hang') or gerund ('love hanging'); here 'love hanging out' is natural. Also avoid filler 'uh' in writing. Suggestion: include the article, correct comparative phrase, and use 'love hanging' for fluency. Grammar problem type ID:6

× From my perspective, yes of course that's great idea, but for perspective of town I don't think that's a nice idea because our town is not so big as other another towns, so there are no need to add extra parks.

✓ From my perspective, yes of course that's a great idea, but from the town's perspective I don't think it's a good idea because our town is not as big as other towns, so there is no need to add extra parks.

Multiple errors: 'that's great idea' needs the article 'a'. 'for perspective of town' should be 'from the town's perspective' or 'from the perspective of the town'. 'that's a nice idea' changed to 'it's a good idea' for naturalness. 'not so big as other another towns' has redundancy: use 'not as big as other towns'. 'there are no need' should be 'there is no need' (subject-verb agreement with 'need' as uncountable noun). Suggestion: add articles, fix prepositional phrases, remove redundant words, and ensure subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID:22

× To be honest, there is one park that I wish to visit it, it is Astana Central Park.

✓ To be honest, there is one park that I wish to visit: Astana Central Park.

The relative clause 'that I wish to visit' should not be followed by the pronoun 'it' — this creates redundancy. Also combine or restructure the sentence; using a colon or rephrasing to 'I wish to visit Astana Central Park' is clearer. Suggestion: remove the redundant 'it' and join the sentences. Grammar problem type ID:3

× That park is very huge. It's like a 1 village I can say.

✓ That park is very large; it's like a small village, I would say.

'Very huge' is redundant because 'huge' already indicates great size; 'very large' or simply 'huge' is better. 'It's like a 1 village' mixes numeral and noun incorrectly; use 'like a small village' or 'like a village' and 'I can say' is more natural as 'I would say'. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjective ('huge' or 'large') and use idiomatic phrasing 'like a small village, I would say.' Grammar problem type ID:13}]}}