Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct pronoun and tense errors (use 'I had a great time', 'my friends and I'), avoid filler words like 'uh', and keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I had a great time there. My friends and I often played ball games and sometimes organized small races. Those visits were a regular part of our weekends and helped me stay active.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct grammar and linking words. Use a clear topic sentence ('Yes, I still enjoy...') then give 1–2 specific examples of current activities. Fix subject-verb agreement ('my friends and I are having'), avoid vague phrases like 'anything that can are in our mind', and limit to four sentences.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. My friends and I often have picnics and play improvised games like frisbee or tag, so we stay active and social. Going to the park is a relaxing way for us to meet on weekends.

Suggestion: Be clear and avoid repetition. Start with a direct opinion ('Yes, I would'), then give specific reasons with linking words ('because', 'for example'). Correct grammar and word choice ('many children need access', 'parks and playgrounds are essential'), and remove redundant phrases. Keep to three sentences.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many children need safe green spaces to play and exercise. For example, additional playgrounds would encourage outdoor activity and improve community health. Although the city has some parks, more small neighborhood parks would benefit families.

Suggestion: Give a concise, coherent description. Begin with a topic sentence naming the park, then add two specific details using linking words ('for example', 'because'). Avoid repetition ('it's', 'very') and incorrect phrases ('in the middle of the city'). Keep to three sentences.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Vacate Park in the city center. It is famous for its many waterfalls and large green areas, which would be perfect for photography and walks. I would especially like to visit in spring when the plants and waterfalls look their best.

× I liked going to the park when I was a child because I had one of the greatest time.

✓ I liked going to the park when I was a child because I had one of the greatest times.

The noun 'time' should be plural when used with 'one of the': 'one of the greatest times'. Use plural to indicate one item from a group of many times. Suggestion: say 'one of the greatest times' or more naturally 'one of the best times'.

× When me and my friends were going to the parks, we always tried to play some games with balls.

✓ When my friends and I were going to the parks, we always tried to play some games with balls.

Use subject pronoun 'I' (not 'me') in the subject position, and place 'I' last in the subject list: 'my friends and I'. Suggestion: reorder to 'my friends and I' for correct grammar and naturalness.

× I guess I like going to the parks now because me and my friends always having a really great time even though we don't actually play with balls, we always try to improvise anything that can are in our mind and try to play some games.

✓ I guess I like going to the parks now because my friends and I always have a really great time. Even though we don't actually play with balls, we always try to improvise things that are in our minds and try to play some games.

Multiple issues: 'me and my friends' should be 'my friends and I' (subject form). 'having' requires auxiliary 'are' or change to 'have' for present simple. 'Anything that can are in our mind' is ungrammatical: use 'things that are in our minds'. Use plural 'minds' for multiple people. Split long sentence into two for clarity. Suggestion: use correct subject pronouns and correct verb forms: 'my friends and I always have', 'things that are in our minds'.

× I guess I like going to the parks now because my friends and I always have a really great time. Even though we don't actually play with balls, we always try to improvise things that are in our minds and try to play some games.

✓ (Already corrected above)

No further change; included to show plural 'minds' correction.

× There are many children in my city that needs to have access to green spaces and in order to play and exercise.

✓ There are many children in my city who need to have access to green spaces in order to play and exercise.

When referring to people use 'who' not 'that'. 'Children' is plural so use 'need' not 'needs'. Remove redundant 'and' before 'in order to'. Suggestion: 'who need' and 'in order to' without extra conjunction.

× So I think more and more parts and playground should be necessary and should be so must be essential.

✓ So I think more parks and playgrounds are necessary and essential.

The original has incorrect words and structure: 'parts' should be 'parks', 'playground' plural 'playgrounds'. Phrases 'should be necessary' and 'should be so must be essential' are redundant and ungrammatical. Use simple 'are necessary and essential'. Suggestion: be concise: 'are necessary and essential'.

× Also my city already have of several parks but adding more with.

✓ Also my city already has several parks, but it could use more.

Use singular verb 'has' to match subject 'my city' (subject-verb agreement). Remove extraneous 'of' and fix incomplete clause 'adding more with' to a clear phrase like 'could use more'. Suggestion: 'my city already has several parks, but it could use more.'

× Yes, in my city, there's one specific park that I would like to go.

✓ Yes, in my city there's one specific park that I would like to go to.

When using 'go' with a place, include the preposition 'to' at the end: 'go to'. Suggestion: 'park that I would like to go to.'

× It's a fact. It's it's called Vacate Park and it's very beautiful.

✓ It's called Vacate Park and it's very beautiful.

Duplicate 'it's' and the sentence 'It's a fact.' is unnecessary and awkward in this context. Remove redundancy and duplicates. Suggestion: keep one clear sentence: 'It's called Vacate Park and it's very beautiful.'

× It's a middle of the city and it's amazing.

✓ It's in the middle of the city and it's amazing.

Use preposition 'in' with 'the middle of the city'. Suggestion: 'in the middle of the city' is the correct prepositional phrase.