Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise, use correct tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one specific detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and check subject-verb agreement and pronouns.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my parents used to take me to the local botanical garden every weekend, where I enjoyed exploring the flower beds and playing on the swings.

Suggestion: Answer directly, use present simple for routines and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words (however, although, so) and give one clear specific example of what you do in parks.

Example: Not really; I only visit parks occasionally. For instance, when I need a break from studying I usually go to a quiet park nearby to sit on a bench and listen to music while I clear my mind.

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion first, then briefly explain why. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Use linking words like 'however' or 'now' to contrast past and present, and provide a specific reason.

Example: Not really; although I loved parks as a child, I don't feel the same now. Nowadays I prefer convenient green spaces close to home because I usually visit only when I need a short break.

Suggestion: Be specific and correct some grammar (e.g., 'Paris, France' redundancy, 'admired me' incorrect). State a clear preference and give one or two precise examples of parks and reasons why you want to visit them.

Example: I would like to visit parks abroad, for example the Boboli Gardens in Florence and Luxembourg Gardens in Paris, because they look beautiful in photos and have historic sculptures and well-kept landscapes I'd like to see in person.

× Yes, I love to visit different parks as a child and I always, I have always been a child who insists, insist her parents to bring like bring me to a park.

✓ Yes, I loved visiting different parks as a child and I was always a child who insisted that my parents bring me to a park.

The original mixes present and past tenses incorrectly ('love' with 'as a child'); use past tense 'loved' for a past habit. 'Have always been' should be 'was always' for past. 'Insists/insist' must be past 'insisted'. Use 'that my parents bring me' or 'to bring me' for correct verb pattern and possessive 'my parents'. Avoid filler 'like bring'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for childhood descriptions and simplify to 'I loved visiting...' and 'I was always the child who insisted that my parents bring me.'

× I need to go park.

✓ I needed to go to the park.

The sentence refers to a past feeling, so use past tense 'needed'. Also include the preposition 'to' and the definite article 'the' with 'park' when referring to a specific place. Suggestion: Use 'I needed to go to the park.'

× So I loved it. I'm I was very into it.

✓ So I loved it. I was very into it.

The fragment 'I'm I was' mixes present and past forms; remove 'I'm' and keep past 'I was' to match past context. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent: 'I was very into it.'

× Not that much, but I try to visit different parks in my free times, especially when I need a break from my studies, and in that cases I just go in the park, sit down, sit somewhere and thinking about life or listening to music.

✓ Not that much, but I try to visit different parks in my free time, especially when I need a break from my studies, and in those cases I just go to a park, sit down somewhere and think about life or listen to music.

Use singular 'free time' not 'free times'. 'In that cases' should be 'in those cases'. Use preposition 'to a park' rather than 'in the park' for general visits. Parallel verbs require base form 'think' and 'listen' after 'sit down' or use gerunds consistently; here use simple present 'think' and 'listen' to describe habitual actions. Suggestion: Maintain parallel structure and correct prepositions: 'go to a park, sit down somewhere and think... or listen...'.

× If you have asked that question to the child me, I would have answered that yes, definitely.

✓ If you had asked the child me that question, I would have answered 'yes, definitely.'

This is a third conditional about a past hypothetical; use past perfect in the if-clause: 'If you had asked...' and 'I would have answered...' The original 'have asked' is incorrect placement and word order; place 'that question' after 'me' or better 'asked me that question'. Also punctuation: put yes in quotes or commas. Suggestion: Use standard third conditional structure: 'If you had asked me that question when I was a child, I would have answered yes.'

× But today it is not that enjoyable for me and umm, I just try to, I just try to sit down in a park that I fi find and in the nearest place.

✓ But today it is not that enjoyable for me and I just try to sit in the nearest park I find.

Remove filler and repetition 'I just try to, I just try to'. Use 'sit in' or 'sit at' a park; 'sit in a park that I find and in the nearest place' is awkward—better 'the nearest park I find'. Maintain present tense 'try' for current habit. Suggestion: Simplify to 'I just try to sit in the nearest park I find.'

× Uh, so I'm not into it that much.

✓ So I'm not into it that much.

Only minor filler 'Uh' removed. Sentence is otherwise acceptable in present tense. Suggestion: Avoid unnecessary fillers in formal speech.

× Definitely not in my country, but it doesn't mean that I wouldn't want to travel the parks abroad.

✓ Definitely not in my country, but that doesn't mean I don't want to visit parks abroad.

The original mixes negation and modal forms awkwardly ('doesn't mean that I wouldn't want'). Use 'doesn't mean I don't want' for present desire. Also use 'visit parks' rather than 'travel the parks'. Suggestion: Use clear negation and appropriate verb: 'that doesn't mean I don't want to visit parks abroad.'

× I I'd love to visit different parks in Italy or in Paris, France.

✓ I'd love to visit different parks in Italy or in Paris, France.

Remove duplicated 'I I'd'. Contraction 'I'd' is fine for 'I would'/'I would love'. Suggestion: Proofread for repeated words: 'I'd love to visit...'.

× They are astonishing and they admired me in pictures, so I want to see it in first.

✓ They look astonishing in pictures and they amazed me, so I want to see them in person first.

Pronouns and verb forms are incorrect: 'they admired me' is wrong; parks don't admire people—pictures can 'amaze' or 'look astonishing'. Use 'amazed me' (active past) or 'look astonishing'. Use plural pronoun 'them' for parks, not 'it'. 'In first' should be 'in person first'. Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb relations and pronouns: 'They look astonishing in pictures and amazed me, so I want to see them in person first.'