Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give 1–2 concise supporting reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and keep to 3–4 short sentences. Focus on correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., 'go to parks', 'watch cartoons', 'play games').

Example: Not really. As a child I preferred staying at home because I liked watching cartoons and playing games with my siblings. Also, the local park had few facilities, so it wasn't very fun for us.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Correct vague or incorrect phrases ('going to parents' should be 'going to parks') and avoid repetition. Keep sentences concise and use accurate verb agreements.

Example: Yes, I do. I find going to parks relaxing because it reduces my stress and lets me enjoy nature. As a result, visiting parks often improves my mood.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give 1–2 clear, relevant reasons. Avoid vague or awkward phrases like 'boost my perspective' or 'enhance my knowledge about the different citizens' unless you explain them. Use linking words and finish sentences fully. Be specific about benefits (e.g., exercise, community space, clean air).

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would provide places for exercise and family outings, and they would improve local air quality. Additionally, parks can bring communities together for events and leisure.

Suggestion: Give a clear answer then add 1–2 specific details about which parks and why you want to visit them. Correct grammatical errors and remove repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to explain reasons.

Example: Yes, I do. I want to visit the parks in my hometown because they are famous for green hills and scenic views. For example, my close friend often goes there and says the trails and viewpoints are beautiful, so I'd like to see them myself.

× To be honest as a child I didn't love to bring to parks.

✓ To be honest, as a child I didn't like going to parks.

The student used 'love to bring to parks' which is ungrammatical. The verb 'like' and similar verbs are followed by gerund when expressing enjoyment of activities: 'like going to parks'. Also 'bring to parks' is incorrect contextually; 'go to parks' is appropriate. Add commas for clarity.

× I enjoy to watching cartoons at staying at home or spending or played game with my siblings and there is not a lot of facilities to win park so that's why I try to stay at home.

✓ I enjoyed watching cartoons and staying at home or playing games with my siblings, and there weren't many facilities in the park, so that's why I tried to stay at home.

Multiple errors: 'enjoy to watching' should be 'enjoy watching' (verb + -ing); tense consistency requires past 'enjoyed' since speaking about childhood; 'staying at home' is fine as a gerund phrase; 'played game' should be 'playing games'; 'there is not a lot of facilities' should be 'there weren't many facilities' (plural noun and past tense). Reorganize sentence for clarity.

× Yes, now I enjoy going to parents very often like I find it quite interesting and helps me to reduce my stress and I can easily connect with the natural beauty and reflects my mood.

✓ Yes, now I enjoy going to parks very often; I find them quite interesting and they help me reduce my stress. I can easily connect with nature and it reflects my mood.

The original had 'going to parents' (wrong word) and mixed subjects. 'Find it' vs 'helps me' subject agreement: use plural 'them' for 'parks' and 'they help'. Also 'connect with the natural beauty' is better as 'connect with nature'. Use consistent pronouns and correct verb agreement.

× So yes I love going back.

✓ So yes, I love going back to the parks.

Original 'going back' is vague; specify 'to the parks' for clarity and ensure plural noun matches prior mention. Add comma for natural pause.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city due to the fact that I can easily boost my perspective and enhance my knowledge about the different citizens and I can easily understand the different parks and.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they can broaden my perspective and help me learn about different people and parks.

Phrase 'due to the fact that I can easily boost my perspective' is awkward; use 'broaden my perspective'. 'Enhance my knowledge about the different citizens' is unnatural—use 'learn about different people'. Remove redundant 'and' at end. Quantifiers like 'more' are acceptable but rest of sentence needed clearer collocations.

× Yes, I want to visit some parks in my hometown which is very famous for the natural beauty, green hills and the green space of the area.

✓ Yes, I want to visit some parks in my hometown, which is famous for its natural beauty, green hills, and open green spaces.

Use 'which is famous for its' to show possession; 'the green space of the area' is wordy—use 'open green spaces'. Tense 'want to visit' is fine; adjust nouns and articles for natural phrasing.

× So my one of the my most friends going there and enjoy the natural beauty.

✓ One of my closest friends goes there and enjoys the natural beauty.

Original word order is wrong: 'my one of the my most friends' should be 'one of my closest friends'. Subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'one' requires 'goes' and 'enjoys'. Use 'closest' instead of 'most' for natural adjective.

× So I want to visit in in the future.

✓ So I want to visit there in the future.

Remove duplicate 'in' and place 'there' after 'visit' to indicate location. 'Want to visit' in present tense is appropriate for future plans; add 'in the future' at end for clarity.