Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence that answers the question, then add 1–2 specific supporting details. Use correct tense (past) and simpler grammar. Link ideas with short connectors (for example, "because" or "and"). Avoid repetition and irrelevant words.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with many friends and we played games like tag and football. Because the park had a big playground and plenty of space, we spent many happy afternoons there.

Suggestion: Answer directly using present tense and give a brief reason. Keep sentences concise and grammatically correct. If mentioning the past, contrast it clearly with the present using linking words like "but" or "however."

Example: I like parks, but I rarely go now because I am very busy with work and study. Also, the park I used to visit near my house was replaced by a building, so I have fewer opportunities to go.

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion and support it with one specific reason. Avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words such as "because" and keep it within 1–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are very few at the moment. More parks would provide green space for families and help improve air quality in busy neighborhoods.

Suggestion: Be specific about which park and why you want to visit it. Use correct phrasing ("near my maternal uncle's house"), and avoid repetition. Finish your thought in 1–3 sentences, using a reason or memory to explain your wish.

Example: Yes, I want to visit the park near my maternal uncle's house because I have fond childhood memories there. I used to play there with my cousins, and I would like to revisit those memories and show the park to my younger relatives.

× I love going back into child.

✓ I loved going to the park when I was a child.

The student is trying to talk about a habitual past experience. Use past tense 'loved' and the correct phrase 'when I was a child'. 'Going back into child' is ungrammatical and uses incorrect prepositions and noun form. Use 'to the park' for place and 'when I was a child' for time.

× There are my so many friends.

✓ I had so many friends there.

The original misorders words and uses 'there are my' incorrectly. Use subject 'I' and past tense 'had' to describe friends in the past. Place adverb 'there' should follow the verb: 'I had so many friends there.'

× They often visit the parks.

✓ They often visited the parks.

Talking about childhood requires past tense. Change present 'visit' to past 'visited' to match time frame.

× We wish to play at the park and have a lot of fun.

✓ We used to play at the park and have a lot of fun.

'Wish' is incorrect for habitual past actions. Use 'used to' to express repeated actions in the past: 'We used to play...'.

× Currently I am too much busy with my life, I don't have any time to visit the park and the park we wish to play in the childhood and our house was built in it.

✓ Currently I am very busy with my life, so I don't have time to visit the parks. The park where we used to play in childhood was built on the site of our house.

Multiple issues: 'too much busy' is incorrect — use 'very busy' or 'too busy'. Run-on sentence needs splitting and conjunction 'so' for result. 'I don't have any time' -> 'I don't have time'. 'The park we wish to play in the childhood' should be 'the park where we used to play in childhood' (past habitual). 'Our house was built in it' is awkward; clarify 'was built on the site of our house' or reverse depending on intended meaning. Ensure verb tenses align (present for current state, past for childhood).

× So sadly I don't often visit the park. The parks is removed.

✓ So sadly I don't often visit the parks. The park was removed.

'The parks is removed' has subject-verb agreement and tense errors. If referring to one park, use singular 'the park' and past passive 'was removed'. If plural, 'the parks were removed'. Also maintain consistency: 'visit the parks' (plural) or 'visit the park' (singular).

× Actually, I love to see additional parks in my city since there are very few parks in my city, I will love additional parks in my city. Uh.

✓ Actually, I would like to see more parks in my city since there are very few.

'Love to see additional parks' is unnatural; use 'would like to see more parks'. Avoid repeating 'in my city'. The comma splice should be fixed by simplifying. 'Additional' is acceptable but 'more' is more natural. Use conditional 'would like' to express desire politely.

× Yes, there's a park located on my maternal uncle's house.

✓ Yes, there's a park at my maternal uncle's house.

'Located on my maternal uncle's house' is incorrect preposition use. Use 'at my maternal uncle's house' or 'near my maternal uncle's house'.

× I badly want to visit that park since I used to go I I used to visit that park when I was a kid and now I.

✓ I really want to visit that park because I used to visit it when I was a kid.

'Badly want' is informal; 'really want' or 'really would like' is better. Remove repeated 'I used to' and fragmented ending. Use past habit phrase 'used to visit it when I was a kid'. Ensure sentence is complete.