Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and grammatical errors, and use 2–3 supporting details connected with linking words. Use past tense consistently and specific examples (which park, what games, who accompanied you).

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My family went almost every weekend, and we usually had picnics at Maple Park. My father taught me to ride a bike there, which made those visits very memorable.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and clearer structure: give a topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details with linking words (for example, because, so). Mention frequency and examples of parks. Reduce repetition and filler sounds.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. In my hometown there are several large parks, like the Olympic Park and Seokjun Park, and they are very close to my home, so I usually visit them on weekends to walk or relax.

Suggestion: Be clear and specific about reasons: start with a direct answer, then give two concise reasons using linking words (for example, because / moreover). Avoid repetition and unclear words like 'UMM'.

Example: Definitely. I would like more parks because they provide free space for exercise and relaxation, and they create pleasant community areas where families can spend time together.

Suggestion: Give a realistic and coherent answer: avoid vague or fantastical ideas unless explained. Start with a clear topic sentence, then specify a real park you want to visit and why. Use linking words and correct grammar.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit a few parks in other cities, especially the botanical gardens in Seoul because they have rare plants and beautiful themed sections that I want to see.

× As I was usually go, uh, prepared to go to the park when I was child, uh, it is because, uh, my family always went there.

✓ I usually went to the park when I was a child because my family always went there.

The sentence mixes past and present forms and has incorrect word order. Use past simple 'usually went' for habitual actions in the past, include the article 'a' before 'child', and simplify redundant phrases. Suggestion: use consistent past tense and clear subject-verb order.

× As I was usually go, uh, prepared to go to the park when I was child, uh, it is because, uh, my family always went there.

✓ I usually went to the park when I was a child because my family always went there.

The phrase 'was usually go' incorrectly combines 'was' with the base verb instead of using the simple past or 'was going'. Replace with 'usually went' for habitual past actions. Avoid unnecessary auxiliary 'was' with base verb.

× As I was usually go, uh, prepared to go to the park when I was child, uh, it is because, uh, my family always went there.

✓ I usually went to the park when I was a child because my family always went there.

The noun 'child' requires the indefinite article 'a' when referring to a general period in someone's life. Add 'a' before 'child'.

× Uh, some people bought some picnic so, and my father always told me how to ride my bike.

✓ My family sometimes bought picnics, and my father always taught me how to ride my bike.

'Bought some picnic' is incorrect because 'picnic' should be pluralized when referring to one of several picnic events or use 'a picnic'. Use 'sometimes' rather than 'some people' to reflect family context. Also 'told me how to ride' is acceptable but 'taught me how to ride' is more natural for learning.

× Uh, some people bought some picnic so, and my father always told me how to ride my bike.

✓ My family sometimes bought picnics, and my father always taught me how to ride my bike.

Use past simple consistently for past habitual actions: 'bought' and 'taught' are past forms. 'Told me how to ride' is past but 'taught' fits better for instruction.

× Yes, I still going to park now it is because, uh, in my hometown there are a lot of parts such as Olympic parks or uh, Seokjun parks.

✓ Yes, I still go to parks now because in my hometown there are many parks such as Olympic Park and Seokjun Park.

'Still going' lacks the auxiliary 'am' to form present continuous but here simple present 'go' is better for habitual action. Use 'parks' plural and correct 'parts' to 'parks'. Use 'many' rather than 'a lot of' for conciseness and capitalize or treat proper names consistently. Use singular form for named parks if referring to specific locations.

× So it was very close to my, uh, from my home to the park.

✓ The park was very close to my home.

The original mixes 'to' and 'from' unnecessarily. Use a simple structure 'close to my home' to indicate proximity.

× So I was, I usually go to part.

✓ So I usually go to parks.

Mixes past 'was' with present habitual 'usually go'. Remove 'was' and correct 'part' to 'parks'. Use simple present for habitual actions.

× Uh definitely yes it is because UMM Parks makes people make people very happy and UMM enjoy their leisure and UMM make it is very memorable things for people, so it is good for them.

✓ Definitely yes, parks make people happy, help them enjoy their leisure time, and create memorable experiences, so they are good for people.

The original sentence is repetitive, ungrammatical and uses 'UMM' incorrectly. Restructure to a clear series of coordinated clauses, use plural subject 'parks' with plural verbs, and remove filler. Use 'enjoy their leisure time' and 'create memorable experiences' for natural phrasing.

× Uh definitely yes it is because UMM Parks makes people make people very happy and UMM enjoy their leisure and UMM make it is very memorable things for people, so it is good for them.

✓ Definitely yes, parks make people happy, help them enjoy their leisure time, and create memorable experiences, so they are good for people.

Pronoun and noun references were unclear and repetitive ('make people make people', 'UMM'). Replace with clear nouns/pronouns and avoid redundancy.

× I think yeah, uh, yes, umm, there are some parts I want to go to the future in the future and some outer space parks because I want to go outer space.

✓ Yes, I think there are some parks I want to visit in the future and also some outer-space attractions because I want to experience outer space.

Use 'want to visit' for future intention and 'in the future' once. Correct 'parts' to 'parks' and express 'outer space' as 'outer-space attractions' or 'space-related parks'. Use infinitive 'want to experience' rather than 'want to go outer space'.

× It is, it was, it is very interesting space for me.

✓ Outer space is very interesting to me.

Avoid mixing tenses and use a simple noun phrase 'Outer space is very interesting to me.' Use 'to me' rather than 'for me' for personal interest.

× So I want to go there and enjoy some, uh, new things.

✓ So I want to go there and enjoy some new experiences.

Replace vague 'new things' with 'new experiences' for natural noun phrase. 'Enjoy' is correct as base verb after 'want to', so keep infinitive structure 'want to go' followed by 'enjoy'.