Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition and hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (e.g., "parks are quite relaxing places", "I used to go with my parents"). Reduce filler words like "uh" and combine similar ideas to stay within 5 sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they felt relaxing and offered a break from home routines. For example, I used to travel by bus with my parents to a park that was quite far away, and I remember watching people jog and practice yoga there. Those visits helped me unwind and enjoy outdoor activities.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide one or two specific reasons and use linking words. Avoid repetition ("I just look at" multiple times) and fillers. Fix singular/plural and word order ("interesting places and scenery"). Keep to 3–4 sentences maximum.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, although my busy schedule limits how often I visit. Whenever I do go, I sit quietly to relax and watch people exercising or feeding birds, which I find soothing. The combination of fresh air and greenery helps me recharge after a hectic day.

Suggestion: Structure your answer with a clear opinion, then 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Correct grammar: "more parks in the city", "the government should build parks". Keep it concise and finish your thought.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because urban areas are increasingly congested and lack green spaces. Therefore, the government should prioritise creating new parks so residents have places to relax and exercise.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer and one clear reason. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use natural phrasing: "I haven't planned any visits, but I'd like to visit Green Park because..." Keep to 2–3 sentences with specific detail about why that park appeals to you.

Example: I haven't planned any specific park visits yet, but I would love to visit Green Park because I enjoy lush greenery and peaceful walking paths. I think its trees and quiet atmosphere would help me relax and unwind.

× I always feel parks are quite relaxing place and it's nice to unwind after busy work schedule.

✓ I always feel parks are a quite relaxing place and it's nice to unwind after a busy work schedule.

Missing article 'a' before singular countable noun 'place' and missing article 'a' before 'busy work schedule'; also 'quite relaxing' is adjective phrase modifying 'place' so include 'a'. Suggestion: use 'a quite relaxing place' or better 'quite relaxing places' if plural.

× I always feel parks are quite relaxing place and it's nice to unwind after busy work schedule.

✓ I always felt parks were quite relaxing places and it was nice to unwind after a busy work schedule.

Context refers to childhood, so past tense should be used ('felt','were','was'). If speaker intends general present preference, keep present tense. Ensure tense matches context.

× I always feel parks are quite relaxing place and it's nice to unwind after busy work schedule.

✓ I always feel parks are quite relaxing places and it's nice to unwind after a busy work schedule.

Mismatch between plural 'parks' and singular 'place'. Use plural 'places' to agree with 'parks', and add 'a' before 'busy work schedule'.

× It's quite interesting place though when you see people walking and jogging around.

✓ It's quite an interesting place when you see people walking and jogging around.

Missing article 'an' before 'interesting place'. Also 'though' is unnecessary; remove it or place properly. Ensure correct article before vowel sound.

× I saw a few people, they used to do yoga as well.

✓ I saw a few people; they were doing yoga as well.

Mixing past simple with 'used to' is awkward here. If describing a past observation, use past continuous 'were doing' or say 'they used to do yoga' for habitual past. Use proper connector instead of comma splice.

× Yes, I still love to go to the park, but because of my busy schedule, I often don't get time.

✓ Yes, I still love going to the park, but because of my busy schedule, I often don't have the time.

Use 'love going' as natural collocation; 'get time' is informal—use 'have the time'. Maintain present tense for current habit.

× But whenever I get time, I make sure I go to the park and sit there, just relax and umm, breathe.

✓ Whenever I get time, I make sure I go to the park, sit there, just relax, and breathe.

Remove leading 'But' for fluency; ensure parallel verb forms 'go', 'sit', 'relax', 'breathe' and commas between items. Avoid filler 'umm' in formal answers.

× I just, uh, look at, look around, uh, how the people do their day-to-day activities.

✓ I just look around and watch how people do their day-to-day activities.

'the people' implies specific group; better 'people'. Remove unnecessary commas and fillers; use 'watch' not 'look at, look around' for clarity.

× It's quite interesting place and sceneries and the birds, really, it's a beautiful scenery.

✓ It's quite an interesting place with lovely scenery and birds; it's really beautiful.

'Sceneries' is rarely plural in English; use 'scenery' (uncountable). Use article 'an' before 'interesting place'. Avoid repeating 'scenery' and use natural collocations 'lovely scenery'.

× Yes, I would love to see more park in cities because nowadays I'm feeling I I feel that city is more congested and there are very few places where people can go and relax and greenery is missing.

✓ Yes, I would love to see more parks in cities because nowadays I feel that cities are more congested and there are very few places where people can go to relax and greenery is missing.

Use plural 'parks' to match 'more', plural 'cities' to match general statement, and 'go to relax' is correct infinitive. Remove duplicated 'I' and extra words.

× So I feel government should pay more attention towards building new new parks where the people can come and relax.

✓ So I feel the government should pay more attention to building new parks where people can come and relax.

Use definite article 'the' before 'government' in many contexts. 'Pay attention to' is correct preposition. Remove duplicate 'new'. Use 'people' without 'the' for general reference.

× So I would definitely think we.

✓ So I would definitely support that idea.

Original is incomplete fragment. Provide a complete clause conveying the intended meaning, e.g., 'I would definitely support that idea'.

× Well, I haven't decided to go and visit any park in future, but if I get an opportunity to see, I would really love to see Green Park because I am so much into green.

✓ Well, I haven't decided which parks to visit in the future, but if I get an opportunity, I would really love to see Green Park because I love greenery.

Use 'which parks to visit' and 'in the future' for clarity. 'So much into green' is unidiomatic—use 'I love greenery' or 'I really like green spaces'. Keep modal consistency.

× I am so much into, uh, greenery. I really love it and I enjoyed it. It always gives you, uh, good sense of relaxation.

✓ I am very much into greenery. I really love it and I enjoy it. It always gives me a good sense of relaxation.

Maintain present tense 'enjoy' for a current preference. Use 'very much into' not 'so much into'. Pronoun should be 'me' not 'you' and include article 'a' before 'good sense'.