Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid tense inconsistency (use past tense for childhood), reduce redundancy, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me there, and I enjoyed the slides and swings while playing with neighborhood friends. Those carefree afternoons are some of my fondest memories because they felt safe and joyful.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and correct grammar (present tense). Use linking words to explain why you still like parks and add a specific recent example. Keep the reply concise and natural.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Seeing children play and smile reminds me of my childhood, so it feels nostalgic. For example, I often walk in a nearby park on weekends to relax and watch families having fun.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a reason using linking words. Be specific about benefits (for health, community) and avoid vague phrases like “warmth on it.” One or two concrete examples will improve content and coherence.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because they provide safe spaces for children to play and neighbors to meet. For instance, new parks could include playgrounds and walking paths, which would improve people's health and strengthen the community.

Suggestion: Be concise and confident. Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the place, use correct grammar (goal -> goals or my goal is), and give one or two specific reasons why you want to visit. Avoid filler phrases and corrections.

Example: Yes, I'd love to visit Disneyland in the future. It is a famous theme park, and I want to experience the rides and shows I missed as a child because they seem fun and nostalgic.

× Yes, I did. When I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child.

'When I was a child' is a sentence fragment because it lacks a main verb; combining it with the previous sentence creates a complete thought and avoids the fragment. Suggestion: attach dependent time clauses to a main clause (e.g., "I did when I was a child").

× My father and my mother will bring me to parks and I'll go sliding and also the swings and meeting other friends.

✓ My father and mother used to take me to parks, where I would go on slides and swings and meet other friends.

The original mixes future auxiliary 'will' and contractions with past recollection; for habitual past actions use 'used to' or 'would' and match verbs: 'take' (not 'bring' for accompanying child) and parallel verbs 'go on slides and swings and meet'. Suggestion: use consistent past habitual forms for childhood memories.

× At my age at that time and still growing up, I think having to recall those precious moments is really great.

✓ At that age, while I was still growing up, I think recalling those precious moments is really great.

The phrase 'At my age at that time and still growing up' is awkward and ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'At that age, while I was still growing up' and use the gerund 'recalling' rather than 'having to recall' which implies obligation. Suggestion: simplify temporal phrases and choose verbs that express the intended meaning.

× Having to see children is playing around, seeing their smiles on their face, it brings back memories.

✓ Seeing children playing around and seeing smiles on their faces brings back memories.

'Having to see children is playing around' is ungrammatical: 'having to' implies obligation and 'is playing' misaligns subjects. Use present participles in sequence with a singular verb: 'Seeing children playing... brings'. Also correct 'their face' to 'their faces'. Suggestion: use present participle clauses correctly and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I would love to see more parks in our city and to see children having or enjoying time together with their peers.

✓ Yes, I would love to see more parks in our city and to see children enjoying time together with their peers.

Use parallel structure: after 'to see' use the -ing form 'enjoying' not 'having or enjoying'. 'Having time' is awkward; 'enjoying time together' is more natural. Suggestion: maintain parallelism and choose the more natural verb.

× It's really great to see an improved city and you can see the warmth on it.

✓ It's really great to see an improved city and you can feel its warmth.

'Warmth on it' is incorrect preposition and phrasing; 'feel its warmth' or 'see the warmth in it' are natural. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and idiomatic expressions like 'feel its warmth'.

× Oh, yeah, Actually, one of my goal is to go in Disneyland.

✓ Oh, yeah. Actually, one of my goals is to go to Disneyland.

'One of my goal' is wrong: use plural 'goals' after 'one of' and 'is' agrees with singular 'one'. Also use preposition 'to' for destination, not 'in'. Suggestion: use 'one of my goals is to go to...'.

× Is it a park? Right. It's a theme park, I guess.

✓ Is it a park? Right. It's a theme park, I guess.

This sentence is acceptable but keep punctuation: break into separate sentences for clarity. No grammatical change needed except punctuation. Suggestion: maintain clear sentence boundaries.

× But yeah, so even though I'm going older, I think I still have the kid in me and I want to explore those things that I haven't experienced before and do it again.

✓ But yeah, even though I'm getting older, I think I still have the kid in me and I want to explore things I haven't experienced before and do them again.

'I'm going older' is ungrammatical; use 'I'm getting older'. Also 'those things that I haven't experienced before' can be simplified to 'things I haven't experienced before' and 'do it again' should agree in number: 'do them again' (plural 'things'). Suggestion: use 'getting older' and ensure pronoun-number agreement.