Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời thiếu ngắt câu hợp lý và có lỗi ngữ pháp (thời quá khứ và thì hiện tại lẫn lộn), dùng từ không chính xác (on the swings), và hơi dài không đúng cấu trúc tối đa 5 câu. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng ở quá khứ, sửa ngữ pháp, và thêm chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn về kỷ niệm hoặc cảm xúc.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me there for picnics, and I remember playing on the swings and slides with my friends. One vivid memory is racing my best friend to the top of the slide — it felt exciting and free.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời chứa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng (a present, visiting park, sometime), cấu trúc rời rạc. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề hiện tại, dùng thì hiện tại đơn đúng, dùng linking words để liên kết ý và cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết về tần suất và lý do.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually visit a park at the weekend, and sometimes I walk or cycle there to keep fit. Because the parks are peaceful, they help me relax after a busy week.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời không trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi (Would you like to see more parks?) mà mô tả lợi ích. Có lỗi chia động từ và câu dài thiếu liên kết. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trả lời rõ ràng (Yes/No/Maybe) rồi nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể, dùng từ nối để mạch lạc.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. More parks would provide safe places for families and children to play, and they would also offer good spots for exercising or doing yoga. Therefore, adding parks would improve people’s health and community life.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, lặp từ (study study), tên địa điểm có vẻ sai (Wind pond province). Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, sửa ngữ pháp, nói rõ tên địa điểm một cách chính xác nếu có thể, nêu lý do muốn tới đó và khi nào có thể đi.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Wind Pond Park in the province near my city. I have heard it has beautiful scenery and large lakes, which would be perfect for relaxing. I am currently too busy with my studies, but I hope to go there next summer when I have more free time.

× Yes, when I was young my parents used to take me there for picnics and I love to play in on the swings and slides with my friends.

✓ Yes, when I was young my parents used to take me there for picnics and I loved to play on the swings and slides with my friends.

The sentence mixes past habitual 'used to' with present simple 'love'. Use past 'loved' to match the time frame. Also remove the extra preposition 'in' before 'on the swings'. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent when describing past routines (use past simple or 'used to') and check prepositions for idiomatic usage.

× Yes a present. I'm still visiting park at the weekend. I sometime walk or go by bike to school to stay healthy.

✓ Yes, at present I'm still visiting parks at the weekend. I sometimes walk or go by bike to school to stay healthy.

Use 'at present' for current time reference rather than 'a present'. 'Visiting park' needs plural or article: 'visiting parks' or 'visiting the park'. 'At the weekend' is acceptable but 'at the weekend' vs 'on weekends'—keep 'at the weekend' here. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). Ensure agreement between singular/plural and correct adverb forms.

× Actually the parks is great for exercising or doing yoga is good for families and children to play safely.

✓ Actually, parks are great for exercising or doing yoga, and they are good for families and children to play safely.

'The parks is' is incorrect: 'parks' plural requires 'are'. The original also runs two clauses together without conjunction punctuation. Add 'and they are' to connect ideas and make subject clear. Use commas to separate clauses. Ensure subjects and verbs agree in number.

× I really want to go to the Wind pond province but I don't have much time to visit parks and to busy with study study this day.

✓ I really want to go to Wind Pond Province, but I don't have much time to visit parks and I'm too busy with my studies these days.

Use 'too busy' not 'to busy'. 'Study study' is a repetition and should be 'my studies'. 'This day' is awkward; use 'these days' for current period. Capitalize proper noun 'Wind Pond Province' and include contraction 'I'm' for 'I am' to make 'too busy' construction. Ensure correct noun forms and adverbials of time.