Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Focus on clarity and basic grammar: give a clear topic sentence, simplify vocabulary, and avoid hesitation. Use one concise sentence saying you liked parks as a child, then add one or two specific supporting details (who you went with and an activity). Use linking words like “and” or “because” to connect ideas. Pronounce key words clearly (park, kindergarten, mother, brother).

Example: I loved going to parks when I was in kindergarten. I often went with my mother and brother and we used to play on the swings and feed the ducks, which made those visits very fun.

Suggestion: Be direct and coherent: state your main opinion clearly, then give a concise reason and one example. Reduce repetition and hesitations. Use linking words such as “because” and “so” correctly. Choose accurate vocabulary (prefer ‘go to parks’ not ‘write to go parks’; use ‘indoor places’).

Example: I don't go to parks much now because there are often dogs and cats and I’m uncomfortable around them. So I usually prefer indoor places like game centers or shopping malls where I feel safer and more relaxed.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and one or two consequences or benefits. Improve vocabulary for city description (use ‘downtown’, ‘green space’, ‘trees’, ‘grass’, ‘parks’) and avoid filler words. Use a linking word such as ‘because’ or ‘so’ to connect reason and result.

Example: Yes, I would. My city is mostly downtown and lacks green space, so there are very few trees or grassy areas. More parks would give residents a comfortable place to relax and improve air quality.

Suggestion: Be specific and concise: name or describe the park, say what interests you about it, and explain when or with whom you plan to go. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ to explain your motivation. Use correct noun forms (‘park’, ‘outdoor equipment’).

Example: Yes, there is a new park near my friend’s house that has outdoor exercise equipment and a climbing frame I haven't tried. I would like to go there with my friends after work one weekday so we can try the equipment and relax together.

× I loved to group parks when I was a in when I, when I was in a kindergarten, umm, I went to I Oh well, I went to much of, uh, many perks with my mother were further and brother and I loved the asterisk packs.

✓ I loved going to parks when I was in kindergarten. I went to many parks with my mother, father and brother, and I loved the playgrounds.

Original sentence contains incorrect verb form 'to group' instead of the correct gerund 'going' after 'loved'. It also repeats and misorders phrases and misuses nouns (perks, asterisk packs) that should be 'parks' and 'playgrounds'. Suggestion: use the gerund after 'loved' for activities, keep simple past for childhood actions ('went'), and use correct nouns ('parks', 'playgrounds'). Grammar problem type ID:10.

× No, I don't write to go parks much more because there are often dogs or cats and I I don't like. I dislike dogs and cats. So I prefer to go to the indoor place, like a game center, hotels, the scheduling and so on.

✓ No, I don't like to go to parks much anymore because there are often dogs or cats and I don't like them. I prefer to go to indoor places like game centers, malls and so on.

Errors include wrong word 'write' instead of 'like', missing preposition 'to' after 'go', omitted plural forms and incorrect article use. 'Parks' needs 'to go to parks' and 'anymore' instead of 'much more' for negative. Also replace vague items ('hotels, the scheduling') with appropriate examples ('malls'). Use pronoun 'them' to refer to animals. Suggestion: use correct verbs, include necessary prepositions, pluralize nouns when needed, and use appropriate vocabulary. Grammar problem type ID:22.

× Yes, yes I do. My city is located in the uh, what downtown, so there are no there are almost no green racket tree grass, so we need more comfortable press to relax.

✓ Yes, I do. My city is located downtown, so there is almost no green space, trees or grass, and we need more comfortable places to relax.

Problems: unnecessary phrase 'is located in the downtown' should be 'located downtown' or 'in the downtown area'. Phrases like 'green racket tree grass' are incorrect; correct term is 'green space, trees or grass'. 'Press' should be 'places'. Use singular 'there is' with uncountable 'space' and 'there are' for plural nouns; simplify sentence structure. Suggestion: use correct collocations ('green space'), correct noun forms, and proper subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID:6.

× Yes, there is a new perk near my friend's house and it is and this perk has a outdoor interesting equipment which I haven't experienced.

✓ Yes, there is a new park near my friend's house, and it has some interesting outdoor equipment that I haven't tried yet.

Errors: 'perk' should be 'park', use 'an' before a vowel sound ('an outdoor'), and use 'equipment' as uncountable or 'pieces of equipment'/'some equipment'. 'Which I haven't experienced' is awkward; use 'that I haven't tried yet'. Suggestion: use correct article 'a/an', use natural verbs ('try' for using equipment), and treat 'equipment' correctly as uncountable or specify 'pieces of equipment'. Grammar problem type ID:3.

× So I'd like to try the this equipment with my friends on weekdays to get more.

✓ So I'd like to try this equipment with my friends on a weekday to get more experience.

Errors: extra article 'the this' should be 'this'. 'On weekdays' implies repeated action; if referring to one visit use 'on a weekday' or 'on weekdays' if repeatedly. 'To get more' is incomplete — 'get more experience' completes the idea. Suggestion: choose correct article, clarify time expression (a weekday vs weekdays), and complete the infinitive purpose phrase. Grammar problem type ID:4.