Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "I love having fun" and "watching people also having fun"). Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "and").

Example: Yes. I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were peaceful and full of activities. For example, I used to play on the swings and watch families having picnics, which made the visits feel lively and relaxing.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid repeating the same idea ("relaxing" and "relax"). Add a specific detail about what you do there and use a linking phrase to explain why it appeals to you.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me unwind after a busy day. For instance, I often sit on a bench to read or take a short walk along the paths, which clears my mind and boosts my mood.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons rather than repeating similar phrases. Use linking words like "because" and "for example", and correct small errors (repeat of "city").

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are few green spaces at the moment. For example, having nearby parks would provide convenient places to relieve stress after work and meet friends for outdoor activities.

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence and avoid repeating "I would love" multiple times. Add one specific reason why you want to visit and perhaps mention an activity you'd do there to make the answer more vivid.

Example: Yes. I would like to visit Central Park in New York because of its size and variety of attractions. For example, I want to walk around the lake, visit the botanical areas, and watch street performers to get a real sense of the park's atmosphere.

× Yes, I did like going to the park as a child because I love having fun and I love watching people also having fun and it's just really fresh to see the nature around the park.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park as a child because I loved having fun and I loved watching other people having fun, and it was refreshing to see the nature around the park.

The sentence mixes past and present simple (did like, love) which is inconsistent when referring to childhood. Use past tense verbs (liked, loved) for past events. Also 'people also having fun' is awkward; use 'other people having fun'. 'It's just really fresh' is unnatural for past description; use 'it was refreshing'. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent and choose natural collocations.

× I do still like going to the park because it just seems relaxing and very fun to just relax and sit on the bench in the park and I still like playing in the park.

✓ I still like going to the park because it seems relaxing and fun to sit on a bench in the park, and I still enjoy playing there.

Redundant words ('do still', repeated 'just', 'very fun') and awkward phrasing should be simplified. 'Sit on the bench' -> 'sit on a bench' is more natural. Replace repeated 'like playing in the park' with 'enjoy playing there' for variety. Tense remains present, but wording needs smoothing.

× It would be great to see a lot of parks in our city city because there isn't a lot here right now and it would be very convenient, especially when you're having a really stressed day or a hard day.

✓ It would be great to see a lot of parks in our city because there aren't many here right now, and it would be very convenient, especially when you're having a stressful or hard day.

'City city' is a typo; remove duplicate. 'There isn't a lot' is uncountable phrasing; parks are countable so use 'there aren't many'. 'Really stressed day' is incorrect collocation; use 'stressful day'. Keep conditional tone ('would be').

× It would be nice to be relaxing in the park and sit on the bench.

✓ It would be nice to relax in the park and sit on a bench.

After 'would be nice' use the base form or to + infinitive: 'to relax' is preferable to 'to be relaxing' here. Also 'sit on the bench' -> 'sit on a bench' for general reference. Use simple infinitive to express desire rather than progressive.

× Yes, there's a park called Central Park in New York City.

✓ Yes, there's a park called Central Park in New York City.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. 'There's' (there is) is acceptable because 'a park' is singular. Included to show no error per list.

× I would love to go there in the future or now if possible, because it's such a really nice park and it's really big.

✓ I would love to go there in the future, or even now if possible, because it's a really nice and very large park.

Maintain conditional 'would love' and improve adverb use: 'such a really' is redundant; use 'a really nice' or 'such a nice'. 'Really big' -> 'very large' or 'quite big'. Small style corrections while keeping tense.

× I would love to experience what it would be like to be in that park.

✓ I would love to experience what it would be like to be in that park.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable and matches conditional structure; no change required. Included to indicate correct use of infinitive and conditional.

× I would love to see other people enjoy it too.

✓ I would love to see other people enjoying it too.

After 'see' when describing an ongoing action, use verb + -ing: 'see people enjoying' is more natural for witnessing others having fun. Using base form 'see other people enjoy' can be acceptable when referring to the whole event, but 'enjoying' better emphasizes the ongoing experience.