Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự từ, tránh lỗi lặp từ và diễn đạt dài dòng. Nên trả lời trực tiếp rồi cung cấp một đến hai chi tiết hỗ trợ ngắn gọn. Ví dụ, sửa thì động từ (was → were/used to), loại bỏ từ thừa (“nearby park near to”), và dùng liên từ hợp lý để nối ý.

Example: Yes, I did. However, there wasn’t a park near our home then, so my parents used to organize outdoor activities for me, such as picnics and playing in the countryside after school.

Suggestion: Sửa lỗi phát âm/orthography (“pass” → “parks”), thì động từ và đại từ sai (“become”→“became”, “rent home”→“rented home”, “her”→“them/her friends”). Trả lời cần ngắn gọn, mạch lạc, và thêm một chi tiết cụ thể. Dùng một liên từ để nối ý.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks. When I started university, I moved to a rented place near a park, so I often spend my free time there with friends and take photos together.

Suggestion: Cải thiện từ vựng và cấu trúc câu: tránh những cụm từ không đúng (“most honest citizen”, “parts”). Trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích cụ thể vì sao cần nhiều công viên hơn, dùng từ phù hợp như “residents” và “parks”.

Example: Yes, I would. Many residents would welcome more parks because they provide safe places for families to relax, exercise and spend time together after a busy day.

Suggestion: Tránh trả lời mơ hồ và sửa ngữ pháp; trả lời nên bắt đầu trực tiếp (‘No, I prefer…’). Sử dụng tên công viên đúng và giải thích ngắn gọn lý do bằng thì hiện tại đơn. Loại bỏ số hoặc từ thừa (‘nearby 1’ không rõ nghĩa).

Example: No, I prefer to visit a nearby park. I usually go to Tomyo Park at the weekend because it is close to my home and saves me travel time.

× However, unfortunately when I was a child there was no nearby park near to my home.

✓ However, unfortunately when I was a child there was no park near my home.

The phrase 'there was no nearby park near to my home' is redundant and uses incorrect preposition 'near to'. Use 'there was no park near my home' to correctly express non-existence and location. Keep 'there was' for past existence and use 'near' without 'to'.

× Instead of that, my parents try always try to organize some outdoor activities to entertain me after a long day at school.

✓ Instead of that, my parents always tried to organize some outdoor activities to entertain me after a long day at school.

The student mixes present 'try' with past context 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'tried' and place adverb 'always' before the verb. Also remove duplicate 'try'.

× Yes, of course, I still enjoy going to pass.

✓ Yes, of course, I still enjoy going to parks.

'Pass' is incorrect here — likely intended 'parks'. Use the gerund 'going to parks' to express the activity. Ensure correct noun 'parks' and plural if general.

× When I become a university student, there is a pass near my rent home.

✓ When I became a university student, there was a park near my rented home.

Tense should be past 'became' to match narrative. 'There is' should be past 'there was'. 'Pass' is wrong word; use 'park'. Use adjective 'rented' for home.

× Therefore, I always spend my spare time with my friends and take some photos with her.

✓ Therefore, I always spent my spare time with my friends and took some photos with them.

Pronoun 'her' doesn't match plural 'friends'; use 'them'. Also align tense to past 'spent' and 'took' to match previous sentences.

× Yes, of course, I think a most honest citizen in my city wanted to see more parts.

✓ Yes, of course, I think most honest citizens in my city want to see more parks.

'A most honest citizen' is wrong contextually and 'parts' is incorrect word. Use 'most honest citizens' (no 'a') and present tense 'want' if speaking generally. Use 'parks' not 'parts'.

× This is because this is the place where they can spend their time on with their families after a long day to relax or unwind.

✓ This is because it is a place where they can spend time with their families after a long day to relax or unwind.

Remove redundant 'on' after 'spend their time'. Replace 'this is because this is' with 'this is because it is' for conciseness and clarity.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to go to in the future?

The examiner question is fine but 'want to' is less polite; 'would like to' is more appropriate for future intentions in this context. This is a suggestion rather than strict grammar error.

× Certainly no, I prefer a nearby 1.

✓ Certainly not, I prefer a nearby one.

'Certainly no' is unnatural; use 'Certainly not'. 'a nearby 1' likely meant 'a nearby one' spelled out. Use 'one' to refer to 'park'.

× I don't like travel far from my home, therefore I just go to the Tomyo park at the weekend because it helped me save more time to travel.

✓ I don't like to travel far from my home, so I just go to Tomyo Park at the weekend because it helps me save time on travel.

Use infinitive 'to travel' after 'like'. Replace 'therefore' with 'so' for natural linkage. 'Tomyo park' should be 'Tomyo Park' (proper noun). Use present 'helps' to state a habitual fact and 'save time on travel' is natural phrasing.