Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct verb tenses; open with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. 'in the park' used twice) and correct past-tense forms ('had some picnic' → 'had picnics').

Example: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. After long days of studying, I often went there after dinner to get fresh air, and on weekends I walked with my parents or had picnics in the grass.

Suggestion: Provide a full, coherent answer: start with a direct topic sentence and follow with a specific reason and example. Avoid sentence fragments like 'Especially.' Use linking words (because, so) to connect ideas.

Example: Absolutely — I still enjoy going to parks. I go with my friends because parks offer peaceful green space in the city, which helps us relax and chat away from noisy streets.

Suggestion: Use clearer, grammatically correct sentences and avoid hesitations. Begin directly, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Correct subject-verb agreement and remove repeated words ('is is').

Example: Yes, I would. Parks are ideal for exercise and relaxation: for example, people can jog or unwind by the sea, and in my coastal city some parks even have swimming facilities.

Suggestion: Keep the answer concise and avoid fillers like 'oh' and 'That's that.' Start with a clear topic sentence, then add concrete details (features you want) using linking words. Use natural collocations (‘a swimming pool’ is fine) and avoid repeating the same idea.

Example: I don't have a particular park in mind, but I would like to visit a large garden park with wide lawns, walking paths, good facilities and a swimming pool because I enjoy exercising and relaxing outdoors.

× I had spent the whole day on my studies.

✓ I had spent the whole day studying.

Use the past participle 'spent' is correct but the preposition phrase 'on my studies' is awkward; use a gerund phrase 'studying' to show the activity. This makes the sentence more natural: 'I had spent the whole day studying.' Suggestion: replace 'on my studies' with 'studying'.

× So it's a nice way to get some fresh air in the park.

✓ So it's a nice way to get some fresh air.

The phrase 'in the park' is redundant after 'a nice way to get some fresh air' because the context already indicates location. Grammatically it's acceptable, but concision improves naturalness. If you want to keep location, use 'at the park.' Suggestion: remove redundancy or change to 'at the park.'

× And sometimes on the weekend I like walking with my parents or had some picnic there.

✓ And sometimes on the weekend I like walking with my parents or having picnics there.

The sentence mixes present habit 'I like walking' with past 'had some picnic.' Use parallel gerund forms for both activities: 'walking' and 'having picnics.' Also pluralize 'picnic' to 'picnics' for habitual actions. Suggestion: use parallel gerunds and plural 'picnics.'

× I really like going to the park with my friends and we really need a green space in the city.

✓ I really like going to the park with my friends, and we really need green spaces in the city.

The original repeats 'really' and uses singular 'a green space' which sounds like one unspecified space; plural 'green spaces' fits general need. Also add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. Suggestion: use plural for general statements and avoid repeated adverbs.

× Especially.

✓ Especially in a crowded city.

'Especially' alone is a sentence fragment; it needs an object or clause to complete the thought. Add context such as 'in a crowded city' to clarify what is being emphasized. Suggestion: avoid fragments; attach 'especially' to a complete clause.

× I hadn't really thought about this before but I guess yes 'cause I reckon that park is is the best place to helps people exercise to unwind like jogging or even swimming because I live in a coastal city.

✓ I hadn't really thought about this before, but I guess yes because I reckon that parks are the best places to help people exercise and unwind, like jogging or even swimming, since I live in a coastal city.

Multiple errors: 'is is' is duplication; 'park' should be plural 'parks' for a general statement; 'helps' should be base form 'help' after 'to' or change structure to 'to help' but better to say 'to help people' or 'help people.' Use 'places' plural to match 'parks.' Also replace informal ''cause' with 'because' and add commas for clarity; 'since' fits causal 'because I live.' Suggestion: remove duplication, use plural for generalizations, use base verb 'help,' and formal 'because/since.'

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to go to in the future?

Question uses present 'want' which is acceptable, but 'would like' is more polite and fits future preference context. This is a stylistic improvement rather than strict grammar; use 'would like' for future intentions. Suggestion: use 'would like' for polite future preferences.

× I enjoy being outdoors to relax and exercise and oh even have a swimming pool.

✓ I enjoy being outdoors to relax and exercise, and I would even like it to have a swimming pool.

The clause 'and oh even have a swimming pool' is ungrammatical. To express desire for a pool as part of the park, rephrase with a subject and modal: 'I would even like it to have a swimming pool.' Also add comma and remove filler 'oh.' Suggestion: include a subject and modal verb for clarity and formality.

× That's that. That's my ideal park.

✓ That's it. That's my ideal park.

'That's that' is informal and can be unclear; 'That's it' is a clearer closing remark. This is a stylistic correction to improve naturalness. Suggestion: use 'That's it' to conclude.