Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more fluent and avoid hesitations; correct grammar (past habits: used to + base verb), pronoun mistakes, and redundant phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, “For example” or “also”). Keep it to no more than 4–5 sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my mother often took my sister and me to play volleyball or basketball, which helped us stay active. Also, we would sometimes have picnics under the trees, so the park was both a place for exercise and family time.

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and word choice: use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and correct collocations (e.g., “hang out with friends,” “do some exercise,” “lie down on the grass”). Use linking words to contrast past and present (e.g., “although” or “but”). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Example: I still enjoy going to parks, although not as often as when I was younger. I usually go with friends to play basketball or volleyball, or sometimes we just lie on the grass and relax. Going to parks is still a good way for me to socialize and exercise.

Suggestion: Correct vocabulary errors ("parks" not "pirates") and be specific about desired features. Use linking words ("for example", "also") and avoid unrelated or unclear statements (the comment about "arts" is confusing). Provide 2–3 concrete suggestions for park types and why they are needed.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, especially dedicated spaces for different activities. For example, one park could have a cycling track, another could be designed for team sports with courts and fields. These parks would encourage healthier lifestyles and give neighborhoods more recreational options.

Suggestion: Use precise vocabulary (“hiking” not “hikings”; “national parks” and name examples accurately) and reduce hesitations. Start with a direct statement of intent, then add specific details about where and what you want to do, using linking words like “for example” or “such as.” Keep it to 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I want to visit national parks in the future because I enjoy hiking and solitude. For example, I would like to explore a park like the Lake District or a well-known national park near London to admire natural scenery. I hope to go with friends and spend time hiking and taking photographs of the views.

× When I was a child, my mom used to, uh, to go with us, with my sister himself to play volleyball or basketball.

✓ When I was a child, my mom used to go with us, with my sister, to play volleyball or basketball.

The sentence uses the incorrect reflexive/subjective pronoun 'himself' instead of 'herself' or simply omits it. According to the list, this is an incorrect use of pronouns. Use 'herself' if emphasizing that your sister accompanied you, but here it's clearer to remove the pronoun and keep 'with my sister'. Also remove the redundant 'to' after 'used to'. Suggestion: say 'my mom used to go with us, with my sister, to play...'.

× I think it's very necessary when you are a child to get some, umm, uh, do a little exercise.

✓ I think it's very important when you are a child to do a little exercise.

The original mixes 'get' and 'do' awkwardly and uses 'necessary' where 'important' is more natural. The error falls under verb + -ing form because the intended structure 'to do' should be used consistently. Use the infinitive 'to do a little exercise' or the gerund 'doing a little exercise'. Suggestion: 'to do a little exercise' or 'to get some exercise'.

× I feel like I'm going to parks, maybe not as much I I was before, but I still hang it out with friends that like to make some exercise or playing sports as basketball or volleyball or just lay down on the suspect.

✓ I still go to parks, maybe not as much as I did before, but I still hang out with friends who like to do some exercise or play sports like basketball or volleyball, or just lie down on the grass.

Multiple tense and word choice problems: 'I'm going to parks' is awkward for habitual action — use simple present 'I go'. 'not as much I I was before' needs past tense 'as I did before'. 'hang it out' is wrong; correct is 'hang out'. 'friends that' -> 'friends who'. 'make some exercise' should be 'do some exercise'. 'playing sports as basketball' should be 'play sports like basketball'. 'lay down' -> 'lie down', and 'suspect' is wrong word; context suggests 'grass'. These issues are primarily present tense usage errors and related verb forms. Suggest practicing subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms for habitual actions.

× I would love to see more pirates in my city, maybe with different uh spots to do different things.

✓ I would love to see more parks in my city, maybe with different spots for different activities.

The main problem is a wrong word 'pirates' instead of 'parks' (vocabulary error) and slightly awkward preposition 'to do different things'. Categorized here as incorrect use of pronouns per the allowed list closest to word misuse; however it's actually a word choice error. Correct phrase: 'spots for different activities'. Suggest expanding vocabulary and proofreading for similar-sounding words.

× Also, I think my country right now has enough arts, at least in the neighborhood I am.

✓ Also, I think my country right now has enough parks, at least in the neighborhood I live in.

'Enough arts' is incorrect; likely meant 'parks'. 'the neighborhood I am' is ungrammatical; use 'the neighborhood I live in'. This falls under quantifier/article and word choice issues; corrected version uses proper noun and prepositional phrase. Suggest using 'live in' for location and check noun selection.

× Uh yeah, I would like to visit national parks because I love lonely hikings.

✓ Uh yeah, I would like to visit national parks because I love hiking alone.

'Hikings' is not a correct plural noun and 'lonely hikings' is awkward. Use the gerund 'hiking' and place 'alone' after it for clarity: 'hiking alone'. This is a verb + -ing form issue and word order issue. Suggest: 'I love hiking alone' or 'I love solitary hikes'.

× Umm, maybe take the London park natural process for it.

✓ Maybe visit a national park in London for that.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing: word order and noun phrases are wrong ('London park natural process'). This is a sentence structure error. Clarify intent: if you mean a London area natural park, say 'visit a national park in London' or 'visit London's natural parks'. Suggest planning clear noun phrases in subject-verb-object order.

× I would love to go with my friends and admire the nature and the views from there.

✓ I would love to go with my friends and admire nature and the views there.

Minor wording: 'admire the nature' is nonnative; 'admire nature' is preferred. 'from there' is redundant — 'there' suffices. This is an incorrect use of articles/pronouns issue. Suggest omitting unnecessary articles and prepositions for natural phrasing.