Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence about liking parks as a child, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. They helped me relax after studying, and I often spent hours playing on the slides with my friends, which made weekends very enjoyable.

Suggestion: Answer directly and reduce hesitations. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'demotivated', 'children') and structure: topic sentence + specific examples connected by linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Whenever I feel stressed or demotivated, I go for a run or watch children playing, because being outdoors helps me clear my mind and reduce anxiety.

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion then two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct word choice ('parks', 'greenery') and avoid repeating phrases. Mention concrete benefits (air quality, recreation) for clarity.

Example: Definitely. I would like more parks in the city because they improve air quality and provide green spaces for recreation. As a result, residents are more likely to spend time outdoors and take pride in keeping their neighborhoods clean.

Suggestion: Use clearer tense and reduce repetition. Start with a direct answer about the specific park, then give one or two concrete reasons and a plan. Correct grammar (e.g., 'opened', 'I've heard about').

Example: Yes, I plan to visit a new park that recently opened in the opposite corner of the city. I haven't had time yet, but I want to go because I've heard it has extensive greenery and walking trails that look peaceful.

× When I was tired, I love to visit parks so because it actually helps me to relax from my studies and leave my studies and and I often play with my friends on slides and I love to spend actually half of my day on this in parks.

✓ When I was tired, I loved to visit parks because they actually helped me relax from my studies, and I often played with my friends on the slides; I loved to spend half of my day in parks.

The student mixes past and present tense. The question asks about childhood, so verbs should be in the past tense (loved, helped, played). Also corrected redundant words and improved sentence structure for clarity. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with the time reference (use past tense for childhood) and remove repeated words and awkward phrasing.

× MMM, yes, I love to go to the parks even now and whenever I feel stress or demotivator or uh, I, whenever I'm doing overthinking, I often go to the parts and uh, watch the child playing and even uh, go for running and jogging because it helps me to uh, get relief from stress.

✓ Yes, I still love to go to parks, and whenever I feel stressed or demotivated or when I start overthinking, I often go to the parks to watch children playing or to go running and jogging because it helps me get relief from stress.

The sentence has incorrect word forms and inconsistent verb forms. Use present tense for current habits (still love, feel, go). 'Demotivator' is incorrect; use 'demotivated'. 'Overthinking' is a noun but phrasing 'when I start overthinking' is clearer. 'Parts' should be 'parks'. Removed filler words and improved parallel structure. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms (stressed, demotivated) and consistent present tense for habitual actions.

× Definitely, I would like to see more sparks in our city because I think it actually makes the city clean.

✓ Definitely, I would like to see more parks in our city because I think they would help make the city cleaner.

The student wrote 'sparks' (wrong word) and used singular/plural and article issues. 'Parks' is correct plural noun. 'Makes the city clean' is grammatically acceptable but 'help make the city cleaner' is more natural and matches the plural subject with 'they'. Suggestion: Check word choice and ensure subject and verb agree with plurality; use comparative 'cleaner' for improvement.

× Like these areas have the greeneries that everyone like and it actually motivate people to clean, to clean our surrounding and be in peaceful and in good environment.

✓ These areas have greenery that everyone likes, and they actually motivate people to clean their surroundings and to live in a peaceful, healthy environment.

'Greeneries' is incorrect; use 'greenery' (uncountable). 'Everyone like' should be 'everyone likes' (subject-verb agreement). 'It actually motivate' should be 'they actually motivate' to match plural subject. 'Be in peaceful and in good environment' is awkward; corrected to 'live in a peaceful, healthy environment.' Suggestion: Use correct uncountable nouns (greenery), ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose natural collocations (clean their surroundings, live in a peaceful environment).

× There is a new park opened recently in our city.

✓ A new park opened recently in our city.

The phrase 'There is a new park opened recently' mixes 'there is' with past participle; use simple past 'opened' with 'A new park opened recently' or 'There is a new park that opened recently.' Suggestion: Match 'there is/are' with present states ('There is a new park in our city') or use past tense for events ('A new park opened recently').

× Actually it is the in the other corner of the city from where I live.

✓ Actually it is in the other corner of the city from where I live.

Extraneous article 'the' after 'the' and awkward preposition usage. Correct phrase is 'in the other corner of the city' or 'in the other corner of the city from where I live.' Suggestion: Remove redundant words and use natural prepositional phrases.

× So until now I am very busy to visit visit the park.

✓ So until now I have been too busy to visit the park.

'Until now I am very busy to visit' is incorrect tense and infinitive usage. Use present perfect continuous or present perfect 'have been too busy' to describe an ongoing situation up to now. Also removed duplicate 'visit'. Suggestion: Use 'have been' + adjective for states that continued up to the present, and use 'too busy to' followed by the base verb.

× But in future I would like to visit the park because I have listened that the greenery of the park.

✓ But in the future I would like to visit the park because I have heard about the park's greenery.

'I have listened that' is incorrect; use 'I have heard about' or 'I've been told that.' Also 'in future' is nonstandard in this context; 'in the future' is more natural. 'The greenery of the park' is fine but rephrased to 'the park's greenery' for fluency. Suggestion: Use 'hear about' or 'be told' for reported information and include the definite article in 'in the future'.