Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer, more accurate and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (past tense), avoid filler words, correct vocabulary (e.g. 'benches' or 'trees' instead of 'brains'), and provide one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I often played on the swings and explored the small wooded areas, which made me feel adventurous. Also, parks were a place where I could play games with friends.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct tense and vocabulary. Say whether you still like parks, give a clear reason using linking words (because/so), avoid confusing conditional statements unless relevant, and correct phrases (a lot of work, visit parks). Keep it concise and specific.

Example: Not really; I don’t often go to parks now because I have a lot of work and little free time. However, if I had more free time on weekends, I would probably visit a nearby park to relax and go for a walk.

Suggestion: Good direct answer and clear reasons. Improve by making sentences more natural and specific, using linking words (for example, moreover), and correcting small grammar issues (helps children feel safe; when we have free time). Limit to 2–3 sentences and add a concrete example of benefit.

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would give children safe places to play and families more space for picnics and exercise. For example, a new park with playground equipment and walking paths would encourage more outdoor activity.

Suggestion: The answer is unclear and uses incorrect vocabulary. Give a direct response (Yes/No), then name a specific park or type of park you want to visit and briefly say why. Use linking words if needed and avoid metaphors like 'fog in my position' that confuse meaning.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the city botanical gardens next year because I enjoy seeing different plants and taking photos. I also want to go to the large riverside park nearby to try cycling on its long paths.

× Yes, I like going to park as a child because, umm, in park I can find, uh, a lot of brains and I can have uh, I can find a lot of things to play with. So yeah.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park as a child because, umm, in the park I could find, uh, a lot of things and I could find a lot of toys to play with. So yeah.

Issues: definite article missing before 'park' (use 'the park' for a specific place), tense mismatch (question asks about childhood so past tense 'liked' is correct), awkward/repeated phrasing and wrong word 'brains' likely intended 'branches' or 'things'/'toys'. Suggestions: Use 'the park' and past tense 'liked'; replace unclear word 'brains' with appropriate noun such as 'things' or 'toys'; avoid repetition by combining clauses (e.g., 'I could find a lot of toys to play with').

× No, I don't usually like to go to parks now because, umm, right now I have a lot of works to do, but I can't visit the parks. Uh, if I had to feed them, I would probably uh, like to go to park and have some umm, peas.

✓ No, I don't usually go to parks now because, umm, right now I have a lot of work to do, so I can't visit the parks. If I had the time, I would probably like to go to the park and have a picnic.

Issues: awkward verb phrase 'don't usually like to go' -> simpler 'don't usually go' for current habit; 'works' is incorrect plural for 'work' (uncountable); 'if I had to feed them' is unclear and likely incorrect conditional—should be 'if I had the time' for hypothetical free time; missing article before 'park' -> 'the park'; 'have some peas' is unlikely intended, use 'have a picnic' or 'eat snacks'. Suggestions: Use correct uncountable noun 'work', express habitual actions with simple present, replace unclear conditional with 'if I had the time', and use 'the park'.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because it helps children to feel secure and safe in that place and I, I and my family could have more space whenever we have a free time.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they help children feel secure and safe, and my family and I could have more space whenever we have free time.

Issues: plural agreement/article: 'it helps children' should be 'they help children' because 'parks' is plural; word order 'I and my family' is unnatural—use 'my family and I'; 'a free time' incorrect article—'free time' is uncountable, no article; extra 'to' after 'feel' unnecessary. Suggestions: Match verb number to plural subject ('parks' -> 'they help'), use natural pronoun order, and remove the article before 'free time'.

× Yes, I do have a lot of fog in my position to go in the future.

✓ Yes, I do have a lot of plans for places to visit in the future.

Issues: 'fog in my position' is unintelligible and incorrect collocation; 'a lot of' followed by an unclear noun; sentence does not convey intended meaning about future parks to visit. Suggestions: Clarify intended meaning—use 'plans' and 'places to visit' or 'parks I want to visit' to make the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.