Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid fragments and filler phrases (e.g., “I guess compared to nowadays”). Use past-tense consistently and give a concrete example of what you did in the park.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. We didn’t have smartphones, so after school my friends and I would play tag, climb trees, and have picnics together, which made those afternoons really memorable.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and follow with one clear reason and a linking word. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Mention specific activities you do now to show contrast with childhood.

Example: Yes, I still like parks, but my reasons are different now. Rather than playing, I go there to exercise — for example, I usually run three times a week or take long walks to relax.

Suggestion: Respond directly then give one or two specific reasons with clear linking words. Fix unclear phrases and vocabulary (e.g., “perks” → “parks”); avoid repeating ideas. Suggest what new parks could offer to be persuasive.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because many people prefer gyms or exercising at home. New parks with walking paths, outdoor gym equipment, and shaded seating would encourage more people to exercise outdoors.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence naming the park, then provide two specific reasons why you want to visit. Avoid repetition and filler phrases (e.g., “in the world, I guess”). Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., “Central Park”) and complete sentences.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York. It’s famous for its size and variety of attractions, and I want to see the lakes, join outdoor events, and observe how people from different cultures relax there.

× I guess compared to nowadays.

✓ I guess compared to nowadays, things are different.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a clear subject and verb. Completing the clause with a main verb or rephrasing creates a full sentence. Suggestion: include a subject and verb (e.g., 'things are different') to make it complete.

× We didn't really use smartphones at the time, so after school or even after Academy, we just went outside to meet my friends and then we just had the fun.

✓ We didn't really use smartphones at the time, so after school or even after academy, we just went outside to meet my friends and then had fun.

The phrase 'had the fun' is incorrect; 'had fun' uses the noun 'fun' without an article. Also 'Academy' should be lowercase unless it's a proper name. Remove the extra 'just' for style. Suggestion: use 'had fun' and lowercase common nouns.

× I could probably say yes actually since I'm getting older I don't really like ride a bike or enjoy the park, but if I want to just exercise I just go to park and then run or just walk.

✓ I could probably say yes. Actually, as I'm getting older I don't really like riding a bike or spending time in the park, but if I want to exercise I just go to a park and then run or walk.

'like ride a bike' should use the gerund 'riding' after 'like' (verb + -ing). 'Go to park' needs an article 'a' before 'park'. Also 'enjoy the park' is awkward here; 'spending time in the park' is clearer. Suggestion: use gerunds after verbs like 'like' and include articles for singular countable nouns.

× Yeah, so hopefully I'd like to see more parks in my city since many people are just doing some exercise in their own house or even go to the gym.

✓ Yeah, so hopefully I'd like to see more parks in my city since many people just exercise at home or even go to the gym.

'Doing some exercise in their own house' is wordy and 'their own house' can be simplified to 'at home'. Also 'are just doing some exercise' is awkward; simple present 'just exercise' fits general habit. Suggestion: use concise expressions for habits and standard prepositions ('at home').

× I think many people don't use the park as much as the before as much as the past.

✓ I think many people don't use parks as much as they did in the past.

The original repeats 'as much as' and misuses articles 'the before' and 'the past'. Use 'parks' plural for general reference and 'in the past' for the time expression. Suggestion: compare present and past with 'as much as they did in the past.'

× So I hope there's more perks.

✓ So I hope there are more parks.

'Perks' (benefits) is wrong here; context refers to 'parks'. Also 'there's' contracts 'there is' which is singular; use 'there are' for plural 'parks'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun and match the verb number.

× Yes, I definitely have one part that I really, really want to go.

✓ Yes, I definitely have one park that I really, really want to go to.

'Part' is a wrong word; should be 'park'. The verb phrase 'want to go' requires the preposition 'to' at the end for destination. Suggestion: use correct noun and include 'to' after 'go' when specifying destination.

× It's located in New York, which is the most popular park around the world in the world, I guess since it's really, really wide and the many people, many kind of people are gathering there to communicate.

✓ It's located in New York; I guess it's one of the most popular parks in the world since it's very large and many different kinds of people gather there to socialize.

Errors: 'the most popular park around the world in the world' is redundant and incorrect superlative; use 'one of the most popular parks in the world'. 'Really, really wide' is informal; use 'very large'. 'The many people, many kind of people are gathering there to communicate' has article and number errors and awkward phrasing; use 'many different kinds of people gather there to socialize.' Suggestion: simplify redundancy, use correct superlative/partitive forms, and use 'gather' without progressive for habitual action.

× So I hope there's more perks.

✓ So I hope there are more parks.

Original includes contraction 'there's' which is singular while referring to plural 'parks'; also previously noted noun error. A complete sentence needs subject-verb agreement: 'there are' for plural. Suggestion: ensure 'there' construction matches number of the noun.