Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation words (uh) and repetition, and add one specific detail to enrich your answer. Keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use a linking phrase if you add an extra detail.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. There were lots of slides and climbing frames, and I often spent afternoons there with my best friend. We played hide-and-seek and climbed the tallest slide, which was my favourite activity.

Suggestion: Avoid filler and repetition; use correct verb forms and clearer phrases. Begin with a direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because or since). Correct small grammar errors and keep sentences shorter.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially when I'm stressed. For example, I often visit Jelly Park because it has a large lake where I can relax and watch people walking their dogs.

Suggestion: Make your reasons clearer and more natural: state the answer, then give two concise, specific reasons with linking words (because, so). Avoid awkward phrasing like “relax myself” or “best choice to choose.” Use plural/singular consistently.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in Melbourne because they offer places to relax after a busy day and provide cleaner air. For instance, a small neighborhood park would give residents somewhere to walk, exercise, or sit outside.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid unclear or repetitive statements. If you have no particular future park in mind, say so clearly and briefly, then offer a reason or example. Correct grammar (e.g., “they are similar”) and avoid incomplete sentences.

Example: Not really — I have visited most of the main parks in Melbourne, like the Royal Botanic Gardens and Jalis Park, and they feel quite similar. If I had to choose, I might revisit the Royal Botanic Gardens to see the seasonal flower displays.

× I did like going to, uh, to going to the parks as a child.

✓ I did like going to the parks as a child.

The original repeats 'to going to' which is redundant and incorrect. Remove the extra 'to' so the verb 'going' correctly follows 'like' in the -ing form. Suggestion: avoid repeating words and ensure verbs that follow 'like' use the -ing form.

× I do like spending my time with my friend there.

✓ I do like spending my time with my friends there.

If the speaker means multiple friends or general company at parks, 'friend' should be plural 'friends'. Use plural when referring to more than one person. If only one friend was intended, keep 'my friend' but consider adding an article or name for clarity. Ensure pronoun/ noun number matches intended meaning.

× I like the Jelly parks most 'cause there is a Big Lake and I could spend my time I I could spend my whole day there watching others like having their dogs playing.

✓ I like Jelly Park most because there is a big lake and I could spend the whole day there watching others play with their dogs.

Several issues: use singular park name 'Jelly Park' and lowercase common nouns. 'Because' is standard instead of 'cause' in formal speech. 'I could spend my time I I could spend my whole day' is repetitive—keep one clause. 'Watching others like having their dogs playing' is ungrammatical—use 'watching others play with their dogs' where 'play' is the base verb after 'watching' and 'with their dogs' correctly expresses possession and activity. Ensure verbs after 'watch' or 'watching' use base form for actions observed.

× I would like to see more parks in my city because in Melbourne we do need a lot of time to relax myself, to relax our lives and the parks are the best choice to choose.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because in Melbourne we need more time to relax our lives, and parks are the best option.

The original mixes pronouns 'myself' and 'our' inconsistently. Use 'our lives' to match 'we' earlier. 'Do need a lot of time' is awkward—use 'need more time'. 'The parks are the best choice to choose' is redundant; use 'parks are the best option.' Maintain consistent pronouns and avoid repetitive words.

× And also I would like to get more fresh air from the parks.

✓ I would also like to get more fresh air from parks.

'Omit 'And' at sentence start and remove the definite article 'the' before 'parks' if speaking generally. 'Also' should be placed after the subject for more natural word order: 'I would also like.' This keeps pronoun usage consistent and improves sentence flow.

× Well not really actually cause in my opinion in Melbourne parks there they do have a lot of similarities with others.

✓ Well, not really, because in my opinion parks in Melbourne are very similar to each other.

Original has redundant words and wrong preposition order: 'in Melbourne parks there they' is awkward. Use 'parks in Melbourne' for correct noun phrase order. 'Cause' should be 'because'. 'Have a lot of similarities with others' is wordy—use 'are very similar to each other.' Remove unnecessary 'do' and 'there.'

× I have been to Royal Botanic Garden and I have been to Jalis Park.

✓ I have been to the Royal Botanic Gardens and I have been to Jalis Park.

Use the definite article 'the' with named public gardens: 'the Royal Botanic Gardens.' Present perfect 'have been' is correct to describe experiences. Ensure proper name forms (Gardens plural) match the official name.

× Both of them have the Big Lake week with beautiful flowers and I do think.

✓ Both of them have a big lake with beautiful flowers, I think.

'Big Lake week' is unclear and likely incorrect; use 'a big lake' to describe the feature. 'I do think' is unnecessary; 'I think' is natural. Lowercase common nouns and remove extraneous words. Ensure adjective order and article use: 'a big lake with beautiful flowers.'