Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but contains some grammar errors, awkward word choices and minor redundancy. Improve accuracy (e.g., past tense consistency), correct vocabulary (swingers → swings), and tighten phrasing. Use one topic sentence then 1–2 specific supporting details linked logically.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I spent hours on the swings and slides with my friends, and my parents often took me to the park at weekends. Because of that, the park was a great place to burn off energy and make friends.

Suggestion: The idea is fine but the response includes hesitation, incorrect phrases (take a fresh bath, which I'm in), and slight awkwardness. Remove filler words, correct collocations (take a shower → but better: get some fresh air), and connect ideas with linking words. Keep sentences concise and specific.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often go jogging or cycling there, and I like to get some fresh air to relax. Also, I enjoy seeing the flowers and watching children play.

Suggestion: Good opinion and reasons, but several grammar and vocabulary errors (spend their times on screen, really do outdoor activities, invest more on parts, socialized). Improve sentence structure, use linking words (because, therefore), and provide a specific suggestion or example. Keep it concise and accurate.

Example: Yes, definitely. Because many children spend too much time on screens, our city needs more parks where they can exercise and socialize. For example, the government could build small playgrounds in residential areas to encourage outdoor play.

Suggestion: Your answer conveys the idea but has unclear wording (the future of Jumbo, which is developed), tense issues and unnatural phrasing (in the park there includes). Be specific about the park name and features, use correct tense, and link points concisely.

Example: Yes. I want to visit the new Jumbo Park being developed near my house. I heard it will have a lake with boats, many children’s activities, and colourful flowerbeds, which sounds lovely.

× Yes, I loved going to park when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child.

Omission of the definite article 'the' before a singular countable noun 'park' is incorrect. Use 'the park' when referring to parks in general experience or a specific place previously known. Suggestion: include 'the' before 'park'. Grammar problem type ID:17

× I remember spending hours on swingers and slides with my friends and my parents who take me to the park on weekend.

✓ I remember spending hours on swings and slides with my friends and my parents who took me to the park on weekends.

Multiple issues: 'swingers' is wrong word; correct plural is 'swings' (noun for playground equipment). The clause 'my parents who take me' refers to past so verb should be past tense 'took'. Also 'on weekend' needs plural or article: 'on weekends' or 'on the weekend'. Suggestion: use 'swings', change 'take' to 'took', and 'on weekends'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I think park is the perfect place to burn off energy and meet with other children.

✓ I think the park is the perfect place to burn off energy and meet other children.

Missing definite article before 'park' — use 'the park'. Also 'meet with other children' is acceptable but more natural is 'meet other children'. Suggestion: add 'the' and remove 'with'. Grammar problem type ID:17

× Uh, I often go there for jogging or cycling and take a fresh bath, which I'm in and relax me a lot.

✓ Uh, I often go there for jogging or cycling and take a refreshing shower, which helps me relax a lot.

This sentence has several issues. 'Take a fresh bath' is unnatural; 'take a refreshing shower' or 'have a bath' is better. The relative clause 'which I'm in and relax me a lot' is ungrammatical. Use 'which helps me relax a lot' to show cause. Suggestion: replace with 'take a refreshing shower, which helps me relax a lot.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× I love the flowers and the children that play around the park.

✓ I love the flowers and the children who play around the park.

Use 'who' for people rather than 'that'. 'That' is acceptable for things but 'who' is preferred for children. Suggestion: replace 'that' with 'who'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes definitely I would like to see more parks in my city as we live in a modern time, most of the children spend their times on screen and really do outdoor activities.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would like to see more parks in my city because we live in modern times and most children spend their time on screens and do not do outdoor activities.

Problems: punctuation and sentence flow. 'as we live in a modern time' should be 'because we live in modern times'. 'spend their times' should be 'spend their time'. 'on screen' should be 'on screens'. 'really do outdoor activities' is the opposite of intended meaning; use 'do not do outdoor activities'. Suggestion: restructure for clarity and correct noun/verb forms. Grammar problem type ID:4

× So it would be better if government invest more on parts so that children can exercise, meet other children and socialized there.

✓ So it would be better if the government invested more in parks so that children can exercise, meet other children and socialize there.

Multiple errors: missing definite article 'the' before 'government'; verb tense/agreement 'invest' should be past-subjunctive 'invested' after 'would be better if'; 'on parts' should be 'in parks'; 'socialized' should be base form 'socialize' to match modal 'can'. Suggestion: add 'the', change verb to 'invested', use 'in parks', and 'socialize'. Grammar problem type ID:27

× Yes, I would like to go to the future of Jumbo, which is developed nearby my house.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to the new Jumbo park that is being developed near my house.

'Go to the future of Jumbo' is ungrammatical. Use 'the new Jumbo park' or 'the Jumbo park that is being developed'. 'Developed nearby my house' should be 'being developed near my house'. Suggestion: rephrase to 'the new Jumbo park that is being developed near my house.' Grammar problem type ID:7

× Recently I heard that in the park there includes a lake and boats and a lot of activities for children.

✓ Recently I heard that the park will include a lake, boats and many activities for children.

'In the park there includes' is incorrect word order. Use 'the park will include' or 'the park includes'. Use 'many activities' instead of 'a lot of activities' for formality. Suggestion: 'the park will include a lake, boats and many activities for children.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× Besides, the park is also surrounded by many flowers.

✓ Besides, the park is also surrounded by many flower beds / many flowering plants.

'Surrounded by many flowers' is slightly odd; plants or flower beds are more natural. Preposition 'surrounded by' is fine but specify 'flowering plants' or 'flower beds'. Suggestion: use 'surrounded by many flowering plants' or 'surrounded by many flower beds.' Grammar problem type ID:11}]}} PMID:27.0%INVALID TRANSCRIPT ID.oston.