Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Speak more clearly and answer directly. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I liked going to parks as a child.), then add one or two specific supporting details using simple linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and irrelevant words.

Example: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child. After school I often went to the local park to play football with my friends and practice on the swings. It was a nice place to relax and meet people.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct response and then give concise reasons. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' correctly and avoid filler words. Be specific about when and with whom you go to parks now.

Example: Not as often as before, because I am a high school student and I have more studying to do. However, I still go to parks at weekends to spend time with my friends or family and chat or have a picnic.

Suggestion: Give a clear yes/no answer and explain with specific reasons and one suggestion. Use simple linking words ('because', 'so') and correct nouns (e.g. 'only one public park'). Avoid invented or unclear words.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there is only one public park at the moment. More parks would give families and children places to exercise and relax, so the local government should invest in building small neighborhood parks.

Suggestion: Answer directly and name the park you want to visit, then give specific reasons. Avoid confusing phrases like 'on social media' and reduce redundancy. Use one linking word to add a reason or feeling.

Example: In the future I would like to visit Disneyland. It has many themed rides and playgrounds for families, and I think it would be fun to try the attractions and see the parades.

× Yes, or a word chart. I go to the popular every day after the school to let me hang out and take some sport. Acting is.

✓ Yes. I used to go to the park every day after school to hang out and play sports.

The original contains multiple sentence structure issues: incorrect phrases ('or a word chart', 'the popular'), unnecessary articles ('the school'), wrong verb forms ('to let me hang out', 'take some sport'), and a fragment ('Acting is'). Corrected version simplifies meaning and uses natural collocations: 'used to' for past habitual action, 'the park' → 'a park' or 'the park' as appropriate, 'after school' (no article), 'hang out' (bare infinitive), and 'play sports'. Suggestion: keep sentences concise, use common collocations (go to the park, play sports), and avoid fragments.

× This order now I'm a high school student so I have to uh, learn more, but I only want to spend the time with my friend or my family and talk.

✓ Right now I'm a high school student, so I have to study more, but I only want to spend time with my friends or my family and talk.

Errors include wrong word choice ('This order now' should be 'Right now'), awkward verb ('learn more' → 'study more'), article and number errors ('my friend' → 'my friends'), and unnecessary article with 'time' ('spend time' not 'spend the time'). Corrected to present simple to match ongoing situation. Suggestion: use 'right now' for current time, 'study' for schoolwork, and pluralize 'friends' when generalizing.

× Yes, in the city now the actress one public park. So in the future I want the rowing would invest to build more park in the city or resume to predict.

✓ Yes, there is currently only one public park in the city. In the future I hope the government would invest in building more parks in the city.

Original has many structural and word choice errors: 'the actress one' is unintelligible, missing 'there is' for existence, incorrect modal and verb sequence ('want the rowing would invest'), wrong prepositions ('invest in'), and wrong noun forms ('build more park' → 'build more parks'). Corrected to use 'there is' plus present adverb, modal 'hope' with 'would' to express desire about future investment, and correct preposition 'invest in'. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' for existence, 'invest in' for funding, and pluralize nouns when appropriate.

× In the future, I want to go to Disneyland on social media. I know that is a fair lack of great many playgrounds and many activities for children and family, although I wonder to visit it.

✓ In the future, I want to go to Disneyland. I know it has a great many playgrounds and activities for children and families, so I would like to visit it.

Errors include incorrect phrase 'on social media' (irrelevant), wrong verb forms ('is a fair lack of' meaning opposite), missing subject for 'has', wrong noun number ('family' → 'families'), and awkward 'I wonder to visit it'. Corrected to future desire using 'want to' and 'would like to visit', and to state that Disneyland 'has' many attractions. Suggestion: remove irrelevant clauses, use 'has' to describe features, pluralize when general, and use 'would like to' for polite future intentions.